5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 rong0816的 第1次作业

rong0816UID: 2612194

It is really hart to say which is better between finishing a project and then start another to finish two projects. They have different function in different situations. So, it depends on what kind of the projects are.

Suppose the things are long-term and may cost you gigantic energy of both brain and body, you might as well finish them at the same time. Frequently, when you keep doing a certain thing for a long time, it’s very easy for you to feel tied and at this situation, doing another project may relax your brain, as well as your body. Moreover, you probably gain an unexpected inspiration when you do other things. Like preparation of the final examination, we review math, history and geography while we review other subjects. If we review them one by one, we’ll easily forget the last content when we go on the next subject. What’s more, doing them at the same time can promote efficiency.

However, when it comes to projects which have inner connection, it’s better to finish a project and then start another. Such as learning, firstly, we learn words, simple grammar and primary mathematics. After finishing that, we start further study. It is to say, finish the based, then start another. Take building houses for example. People always lay the foundation at first, then build the houses. How can a building be substantial without foundation?

Therefore, before you take projects, analyze them first of all. If they are long-term and may cost you gigantic energy, finish them at the same time. And if they have inner connection, finish a project and then start another. In that way, you’ll feel it’s easier to fulfill your tasks.

zhuyongchaochaoUID: 2616114

It is really hart to say which is better between finishing a project and then start another （starting another later and finishing) to finish two projects ( at the same time) .  (  用between .... and...  结构，同时保持对称）  They have different function in different situations. So, it （ which  )depends on what kind of the projects are.   非限制性定语从句，简洁) C4 ]  B! P+ z
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Suppose the things are long-term and may cost you gigantic （ gigantic 通常用来形容物体具体的大， 而energy 不能用来具体的形容大，建议用tremdrous 更好）  energy of both brain and body, you might as well finish them at the same time. Frequently（Generally speaking), when you keep doing a certain thing for a long time, it’s very easy for you to feel tied and at this situation( tireness will haunt you quickly, 原句太冗长), doing another project may relax your brain, as well as your body（中式英语的表达法,While switching to another projects will refresh your brain and body)   . Moreover, you probably gain an unexpected inspiration when you do other things. ( you'll come up with an unecpected inspiration when achieving  other things, 注意句式和词语的变换）   Like  （ examples are ) preparation of the final examination, we [img]（are reviewing ) [/img]review math, history and geography while we (are reviewing) review other subjects. (强调同时正在进行）  If we review them one by one, we’ll easily forget the last content when we go on the next subject. What’s more, Cracking multiple things at the same time can promote ( stimulate, 用刺激更好， promote 是促进的意思） efficiency.
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( I( t& V1 V: n% q4 k+ O- bHowever, when it comes to projects which have inner connection, it’s better to finish a project and then start another. Such as learning, firstly, we learn words, simple grammar and primary mathematics. After finishing that, we start further study. It is to say, finish the based, then start another. Take building houses for example. People always lay the foundation at first, then build the houses. How can a building be substantial without foundation? ; s6 u; k& @5 C6 E( b

cons 1 论点不是很清晰很突出 2 较多中式英语的直接翻译 3 用此单一简单。注意同义词变换
pros  1 例证充分且实际
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3 ^. h. J/ ^' X* `Therefore, before you take projects, analyze them first of all. If they are long-term and may cost you gigantic energy, finish them at the same time. And if they have inner connection, finish a project and then start another. In that way, you’ll feel it’s easier to fulfill your tasks.

zoezuohuangUID: 2518976

learn from you ..thanks

melody106UID: 2559573

It is really hart to say which is better between finishing a project and then start another (补充and)to finish(改为finishing，与前面保持一致) two projects. They have different functions in different situations. So, it depends on what kind of the projects are.
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Suppose the things are long-term and may cost you gigantic energy of both brain and body, you might as well finish them at the same time. （我觉得最好去掉cost gigantic energy这个表述，因为容易让人产生疑问，既然耗费很多脑力体力为什么还可以同时完成呢。强调时间久就可以啦，与你后面的意思就顺理成章了。）Frequently, when you （这个假设的主语最好是we或者people，更有说服力）keep doing a certain thing for a long time, it’s very easy for you to feel tied and at this situation, doing another project may relax your brain, as well as your body. Moreover, you probably gain an unexpected inspiration when you do other things. Like preparation（preparing） of （for）the final examination, we review math, history and geography while we review other subjects（有点点啰嗦，可改为we review math, history as well as geography这几个科目就可以表达不止一个project了，无需再提other subjects）. If we review them one by one, we’ll easily forget the last content when we go on the next subject. (we’ll easily forget the content which cost us tremendous effort to remember after we change our attention to another subject for a while加个定从这样会不会好一点？)What’s more, doing them at the same time can promote efficiency. （efficiency可以用increase 或者enhance, improve）
However, when it comes to projects which have inner connection, it’s better to finish a project and then start another. Such as learning, firstly, we learn words, simple grammar and primary mathematics. After finishing that, we start further study. It is to say, finish the based, then start another. Take building houses for example. People always lay the foundation at first, （and） then build the houses（superstructure上层建筑）. How can a building be substantial（substantial用这里讲不通，你是想表达steady?） without foundation? (这段观点很不错，例子也很恰当，赞一个)
Therefore, before you take projects, analyze them first of all(去掉of all）. If they are long-term and may cost you gigantic energy, finish them at the same time. And if they have inner connection, finish a project and then start another. In that way, you’ll feel it’s easier to fulfill your tasks.

rong0816UID: 2612194

2# zhuyongchaochao

回拍啦。。。。。。。。

rong0816UID: 2612194

4# melody106

谢了。。。。。学到很多。。。。。。。