5.6月份 cracking ibt essay! 小组写作组 annazjy 第1次作业

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第一次作业题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to finish a project and then start another than to finish two projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.（06/24/07）

In different areas around the world ，people have divergent attitudes toward the way of doing projects. Moreover, today, with the rapid development of global finance and industry, time is much more important for us than before. Someone in order to save time may think it is better for them to do two projects simultaneously. Others may still finish the first project then start next one. In my opinion, I prefer finishing one project firstly then beginning another one rather than doing these two things at the same time. There are several reasons.

First of all, it is significantly difficult for people to do different projects at one time. I will cite my own experience to support this. I cannot do cooking and reading simultaneously, if I hope to have a delicious soup in my dinner time, I must concentrate on cooking otherwise the soup would be tasted not good. As cooking, reading should be done alone. In my view, we should do every project separately and have one-hundred-percent concentration on it.

Secondly, each project is individual and distinguished. In the process of doing a project, we may find something new which could be very important for the development of this project. If we done two projects at the same time, we would ignore the discovery, this means we might not notice what really happened to each independent project. In this regard, it is harmful for both of these two projects and may prevent their futures.

Lastly, someone may claim that they do two projects simultaneously, because they can save time to do more things than others. Is it true? We can put question mark in our mind. As you know, if you did something wrong or in an improper way, you had to fix it after finishing it. In this circumstance, we may spend more time on the project than we scheduled. In this regard, we do a project with all our effort and in a right way then do next could be much better than doing two projects at the same time.

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In different areas around the world ，people have divergent attitudes toward the way of doing projects. Moreover, today, with the rapid development of global finance and industry, time is much more important for us than before. Someone in order to save time may think it is better for them to do two projects simultaneously. Others may still finish the first project then start next one. In my opinion, I prefer finishing one project firstly then beginning another one rather than doing these two things at the same time. There are several reasons.
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First of all, it is significantly difficult for people to do different projects at one time. I will cite my own experience to support this. I cannot do cooking and reading simultaneously, if I hope to have a delicious soup in my dinner time, I must concentrate on cooking otherwise the soup would be tasted not good. As cooking, reading should be done alone. In my view, we should do every project separately and have one-hundred-percent concentration on it.
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Secondly, each project is individual and distinguished. In the process of doing a project, we may find something new which could be very important for the development of this project. If we done two projects at the same time, we would ignore the discovery, this means we might not notice what really happened to each independent project. In this regard, it is harmful for both of these two projects and may prevent their futures.5 G0 }: t+ h  m* R# l4 s9 T
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Lastly, someone may claim that they do two projects simultaneously, because they can save time to do more things than others（觉得这里可以去掉，如果有others则应该有限制，这样句子看上去更严谨）. Is it true? We can put question mark in our mind. As you know, if you did something wrong or in an improper way, you had to fix it after finishing it. In this circumstance, we may spend more time on the project than we scheduled. In this regard, we do a project with all our effort and in a right way then do next could be much better than doing two projects at the same time.

正如你从我的文章看到的，我的语言基础不好，所以在用词上只能为你进行简单的语法检查，蓝色的部分你可以考虑适当的换词，尽量不要重复；而红色的部分则是需要再请高手斟酌的。
结构上比较完整，但不知道你发现没有你中间的两段是最短的，这样不是很理想，你可以考虑把结尾段的分析再扩充一些，然后放在中间两段，而结尾只留下你的结论。

annazjyUID: 2630173

谢谢指点:handshake