【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 jessie18第24次作业】

jessie18UID: 2596971

写的不好 语法错误较多 麻烦来改我的同学了
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship.

Friends are as precious as priceless treasures sent by angels. Every individual are longing for sincere and congenial friends. However, upon the question, which is better, letting a friend make a mistake or doing something prevent the mistake. Different people have different opinions due to their different background. From my personal angle, I am in favor of the opinion that we should do something to prevent our friends make a mistake, and I think that would not destroy the friendship, on the contrary, this would enhance the friendship.

First of all, it is true that sincere friend should help each other and correct the error if he or she goes wrong. I think this is the really friend should do. As the saying goes “ A friend in need is a friend indeed”. Come what may, the loyal friend always gives us a feeling of security and warmth. My personal experience serves as a typical example. Lily is one of my good friend, she usually think other things when she does her homework. I talk to Lily her problem when I find this. Then in order to prevent her careless I always supervise Lily when she does her homework. Finally she gained full marks in the examination. Our friendship is become stronger than before.

In addition, if our friend who make a mistake we did not tell her, maybe this little mistake would become serious problem, and might influence our friend’s normal life. For example, my friend Lucy was a good student, we all like her. When she sometimes surfing on the computer, I though she maybe too tried and relax from the all day study, so I did not remind Lucy she should study. Then one day I found Lucy was absent from school in order to play the online game, and she got a low mark. She did not want to study with us more. So I think when we find a friend does something wrong we should tell she or he to prevent the mistake.

Furthermore, some people, who are more or less sophisticated and artful, are reluctant to rectify their friend mistakes in fear of irritating or offending their friend, are not the really friend. They did not want to destroy the friendship but they behaves towards friends has already destroy the friendship. At last, they may lose their friend and the friendship can not be found or recovered.

To sum up, a genuine friend is, without doubt, always a great helper and an instructive advisor. So taking into account all the factors discussed above, we could safely come to the conclusion that we should do something to prevent our friends who make a mistake even a small error, it is a good idea for we enhance the friendship.
                                                                                          

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Friends are as precious as priceless treasures sent by angels.(首句直接写成friends are precious treasure which sent by angels.不用那么复杂)Every individual are longing for sincere and congenial friends. However, upon the question, which is better---- letting a friend make a mistake or doing something (to)prevent the mistake? Different people have different opinions due to their different(用词重复，改成diverse)backgrounds. From my personal angle, I am in favor of the opinion that we should do something to prevent our friends make (prevent sb.from doing)a mistake, and I think that would not destroy the friendship, on the contrary, this would enhance the friendship.  T. Z* ^# f2 n4 ?

First of all, it is true that sincere friends should help each other and correct the error if he or she goes(前面说的是each other,所以这里应该用if any of them go wrong) wrong. I think this is the(a) really friend should do. As the saying goes “ A friend in need is a friend indeed”. Come what may, the loyal friend always gives us a feeling of security and warmth. My personal experience serves as a typical example. Lily is one of my good friends, she usually thinks other things when she does her homework.(这里表意不太清楚，可以直接写成 she can hardly pay full attention to her homework) I talk to Lily (with)her problem when I find this. Then in order to prevent her careless I always supervise Lily when she does her homework. Finally she gained full marks in the examination. Our friendship is become stronger than before.2 ^. K% f& c# m9 |- z1 p) j0 t% ^
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In addition, if our friend who make a mistake (but)we did not tell her, maybe this little mistake would become serious problem, and might influence our friend’s normal life. For example, my friend Lucy was a good student, we all like her. When she sometimes surfing on the computer, I though she maybe too tried and (want to)relax from the all day study, so I did not remind Lucy she should study. Then one day I found Lucy was absent from school in order to play the online game, and (at the end of this semester)she got a low mark. She did not want to study with us more. So I think when we find a friend does something wrong we should tell she or he to prevent the mistake.$ v- X+ U% \  F* v' F

Furthermore, some people, who are more or less sophisticated and artful（用这个词合适吗？）, are reluctant to rectify their friend‘s mistakes in fear of irritating or offending their friend, are not the really(real) friends. They did not want to destroy the friendship but (actually)they(their) behaves towards friends has already destroy the friendship. At last, they may lose their friend and the friendship can not be found or recovered.
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To sum up, a genuine friend is, without doubt, always a great helper and an instructive advisor. So taking into account all the factors discussed above, we could safely come to the conclusion that we should do something to prevent our friends who make a mistake even a small error(语法错误，你这样写本句的核心是we should do something to prevent our friends), it is a good idea for we(us)(to) enhance the friendship.

有个小问题，我不知道可不可以用enhance friendship,我用的是strengthen friendship，参考下~

soilinkinUID: 2163892

Friends are as precious as priceless treasures sent by angels. Every individual are longing for sincere and congenial friends. However, upon the question, which is better, letting a friend make a mistake or doing something prevent the mistake. Different people have different opinions due to their different background. From my personal angle, I am in favor of the opinion that we should do something to prevent our friends make(from making) a mistake, and I think that would not destroy the friendship, on the contrary, this would enhance the friendship.

First of all, it is true that sincere friend should help each other and correct the error if he or she goes wrong. I think this is the really(real) friend should do(this is what a real friend should do). As the saying goes “ A friend in need is a friend indeed”. Come what may, the loyal friend always gives us a feeling of security and warmth. My personal experience serves as a typical example. Lily is one of my good friend, she usually think(thinks) other things when she does her homework. I talk to Lily（with） her problem when I find this. Then in order to prevent her careless I always supervise Lily when she does her homework. Finally she gained full marks in the examination. Our friendship is become stronger than before.(举例的时候全用过去时)

In addition, if our friend who make（made） a mistake（but） we did not tell her, maybe this little mistake would become （a）serious problem, and might influence our friend’s normal life.（这句有点问题...如果后面用and might influence...前面就不要用maybe或者就不要用逗号隔开...） For example, my friend Lucy was a good student, we all like（liked） her. When she sometimes surfing（surfed） on the computer, I though she maybe（may be） too tried and （need to）relax from the all day study, so I did not remind Lucy she should study. Then one day I found Lucy was absent from school in order to play the online game, and she got a low mark（in test）.（这句的逻辑结构不太好） She did not want to study with us more（any more）. So I think when we find a friend does something wrong we should tell she or he（him） to prevent（一直用prevent...可以换个词avoid之类...） the mistake.

Furthermore, some people, who are more or less sophisticated and artful, are reluctant to rectify their friend mistakes in fear of irritating or offending their friend, are not the really friend.（这句怎么有这么多are啊...到底主语有几个...） They did not want to destroy the friendship but they（their） behaves towards friends has already destroy（destroyed） the friendship. At last, they may lose their friend and the friendship（which） can not be found or recovered.

To sum up, a genuine friend is, without doubt, always a great helper and an instructive advisor. So taking into account all the factors discussed above, we could safely come to the conclusion that we should do something to prevent our friends who make a mistake even a small error, it is a good idea for we（for us to） enhance the friendship..