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jackie1983UID: 2484456

06/30/07: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
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Should we see our friend make errors or do something that may destroy our friendship? Different people may respond to this question variously from their own perspectives. Nevertheless, as far as I am concerned, a true friend should not allow his/her friend to make mistakes without doing anything.

Admittedly, it seems like that the friendship will be destroyed if we do something when our friend is doing something wrong. For instance, during an exam, when our friend wants to cheat in the exam, if we report his/her behavior to teachers, the friend will probably be punished and the friendship may also be ruined. However, by reporting to teachers the friend's misbehavior, we have virtually helped the friend, enhanced the quality of the exam and at last enhanced the friendship.

Firstly, the friend himself/ herself actually benefits from our reporting. After the friend gets a warning from the teacher, he/she will probably realize his/her mistake, and worked hard later on. Therefore, the friend may learn well by himself/herself. As we can see, our report in fact helped the friend.

Secondly, the equality of the exam can also be maintained if we can report the friend's mistake. Because there are also other students taking part in the exam, if we did not report the friend's misbehavior, it is unfair for other students who also take the exam.

Last but not least, our report of the friend's misbehavior will finally promote the friendship with the friend.
Although the friend may complain or even hate us for our reporting his/ her mistake
in the beginning, after he /she has realized that the report is not only beneficial for himself/ herself but also good to the other students, he/ she will be grateful to us. And therefore our friendship will be improved..

In conclusion, we should do something when we see our friend making some mistakes rather than let the misbehavior do harm to our friend and others. Although it may harm the friendship for the moment, in the long term, the friendship will be enhanced after the friend has realized that we are doing the right thing.

桑梓UID: 2613051

Should we see our friend make errors or do something that may destroy our friendship? Different people may respond to this question variously from their own perspectives. Nevertheless, as far as I am concerned, a true friend should not allow his/her friend to make mistakes without doing anything.

Admittedly, it seems like that the friendship will be destroyed if we do something when our friend is doing something wrong. For instance, during an exam, when our friend wants to cheat in the exam, if we report his/her behavior to teachers, the friend will probably be punished and the friendship may also be ruined. However, by reporting to teachers the friend's misbehavior, we have virtually helped the friend, enhanced the quality of the exam and at last enhanced the friendship.

Firstly, the friend himself/ herself actually benefits from our reporting. After the friend gets a warning from the teacher, he/she will probably realize his/her mistake, and worked hard later on. Therefore, the friend may learn well by himself/herself. As we can see, our report in fact helped the friend(情态动词后用动词原形~)

Secondly, the equality of the exam can also be maintained if we can report the friend's mistake. Because there are also other students taking part in the exam, if we did not report the friend's misbehavior, it is unfair for other students who also take the exam.

Last but not least, our report of the friend's misbehavior will finally promote the friendship with the friend.
Although the friend may complain or even hate us for our reporting his/ her mistake in the beginning, after he /she has realized that the report is not only beneficial for himself/ herself but also good to the other students, he/ she will be grateful to us. And therefore our friendship will be improved.

In conclusion, we should do something when we see our friend making some mistakes rather than let the misbehavior do harm to our friend and others. Although it may harm the friendship for the moment, in the long term, the friendship will be enhanced after the friend has realized that we are doing the right thing.

LZ的基本功很好啊 没什么语法错误 只是觉得通篇只有一个例子 不够充实
最好还是从这个例子展开 再写点别的讲讲大道理什么的吧 比如 不仅仅是在考试里 在生活中别的事情中 如果朋友有错 偶们也要指出怎样怎样……

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

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谢谢帮我拍作文啊，回拍啦~~~

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

Should we see our friend make（making) errors or do(doing) something that may destroy our friendship? Different people may respond to this question variously from their own perspectives. (呃，这句这样写会不会好一点，different people may view this question differently based on their own experience)Nevertheless(这里不用加这个词吧）, as far as I am concerned, a true friend should not allow his/her friend to make mistakes without doing anything.9 z) U! k1 Z/ T6 i
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Admittedly, it seems like that the friendship will be destroyed if we do something when our friend is doing something wrong.（这个句子觉得语法好像不太对，而且有点中式，可以写成admittedly,people keep a stereotype that we may destory our friendship if we tell or do something to provent our friend's from making mistakes.） For instance, during an exam, when our friend wants to cheat in the exam, if we report his/her behavior to teachers, the friend will probably be punished and the friendship may also be ruined. However, by reporting to teachers the friend's misbehavior, we have virtually helped the friend, enhanced the quality of the exam and at last enhanced (strengthen)the friendship.7 x- q2 y7 n( b2 q3 E7 P9 G! M" q
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Firstly, the friend himself/ herself actually benefits from our reporting. After the friend gets a warning from the teacher, he/she will probably realize his/her mistake, and worked(本句里的时态有点乱） hard later on. Therefore, the friend may learn well by himself/herself. As we can see, our report in fact helped the friend.

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Secondly, the equality of the exam can also be maintained if we can report the friend's mistake. Because there are also other students taking part in the exam, if we did not report the friend's misbehavior, it is unfair for other students who also take the exam.（本段有点脱题，文章是要说对friendship有没有影响，不是别的）

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Last but not least, our report of the friend's misbehavior will finally promote the friendship with the friend.（这里用逗号，后面用even though,这两句应该是一个让步状语从句）Although the friend may complain or even hate us for our reporting his/ her mistake" N8 pin the beginning,(句号 .）after（After） he /she has realized that the report is not only beneficial for himself/ herself but also good to the other students, he/ she will be grateful to us. And therefore our friendship will be improved..

In conclusion, we should do something when we see our friend making some mistakes rather than let the misbehavior do harm to our friend and others. Although it may harm the friendship for the moment, in the long term, the friendship will be enhanced after the friend has realized that we are doing the right thing.

建议：不要总是写长句，三长两短比较好。
还有桑梓说得，应该多一点例子，不然觉得展开不够。
加油~~~~