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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the ' friendship. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Friends are the most valuable wealth in our lives, so they maybe hold the idea of letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship. But from my point of view, I hold the opposite idea. Now I will give some main reasons as follow.
First of all, it is the responsibility to help our friends to correct any mistake they have made. Honesty and confidence are the two most critical points in our friendship, and everyone should abide by them when they want to form a deep and lasting friendship. For instance, if we find that our friends maybe have made some mistakes, we should tell them right now which maybe destroy the friendship. They will understand our purposes to do this.
Secondly, a good and lasting friendship would bear lots of setback, such as correcting their mistakes, and it will not proceed smoothly without a hitch. Confronting these problems in our friendship is just the inevitable process that will deepen and strengthen this relationship even between the great friendships, for example, the friendship between Marx and Engels. And it will remain the genuine friendship. Of course, helping our friends correct mistakes will not destroying the friendship.
Last but not the least one is that our friends need us to help correct problems just like we need them. This is what they really want get from us between our friendships. And they will also help us when we make the same mistakes. It is the essence of the mutual friendship. Like my best friend, I will correct him when he is wrong even he is severely angry, but he will do the same as I do. It is your friend, a life long friendship.
In a word, we should do the right thing we should to maintain our friendships, and please believe that it is the idea what our friends think about.

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本帖最后由 lingyao1 于 2009-4-28 18:52 编辑

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Friends are the most valuable wealth in our lives, so they maybe hold the idea of letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship.(不通顺啊!而且不太懂你要说的意思;“朋友很重要,所以朋友可能会有这样一个观点就是让一个朋友是否犯错也好于去指正他”)
But from my point of the view, I hold the opposite idea. Now I will give some main reasons as follow. (But I am holding the opposite ideas about subject and there are several main reasons as follow
是否可以这样合并表达.)


First of all, it is the responsibility to help our friends to correct any mistake they have made.(everyone has responsibility to help…) Honesty and confidence are the two most critical points in our(可去掉) friendship, and everyone should (to) abide by them when they want to form a deep and lasting friendship.(是否可以这样说and especially when he or she want to keep a deep and lasting friendship.) For instance, if we find that our friends maybe(去掉) have made some mistakes, we should tell them right now which(even though it) maybe destroy the friendship. They will understand our purposes to do this. 这不是一个结论句,而且if we find…we should tell…这两句话完全可以合并一句。
Secondly, a good and lasting friendship would bear lots of setback, such as correcting their mistakes, and it will not proceed smoothly without a hitch(???). Confronting these problems in our friendship is just the inevitable process that will deepen and strengthen this relationship even between the great friendships. For example, the friendship between Marx and Engels(他俩怎么的了??继续说啊). And itit指代什么) will remain the genuine friendship. Of course, helping our friends correct mistakes will not destroying the friendship.
不太明天你要论证什么?第一句说必须经历挫折,后面应该讲这是一个怎样的挫折,然后举例子说明。


Last but not the least one is that our friends need us to help correct problems just like we need them.病句!那个one指代什么,还有last but没有这样的搭配吧两个词性也不对啊。 This is what they really want get from us between our friendships. And they will also help us when we make the same mistakes. It is the essence of the mutual friendship. Like my best friend, I will correct him when he is wrong even he is severely angry, but he will do the same as I do. It is your friend, a life long friendship. 乱了,完全乱了!!


In a word, we should do the right thing we should to maintain our friendships, and please believe that it is the idea what our friends think about.(这是个病句,主语是we后面又说please believe…你是想说“请大家相信”这两个不能用逗号直接连接。) 什么是right thing
有的没的

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