【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 jessie18第29次作业】

jessie18UID: 2596971

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

It is truth universally acknowledged that every individual are longing for a warmer and harmonious family. Family plays an increasingly significant role in people’s life. However, upon the question, extended family is not as important as it was in the past? Different people have different opinions due to their diverse cultural backgrounds. From my personal angle, I am in favor of the opinion that the extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

First of all, people usually go to another city where is far away from their home place, because they need to improve their living conditions and obtain better opportunities, which are very important for their further development. Over the past few years, people like our elders did not need to worry about find a work because there were lots of jobs in our city, so they can stay with a large family. But now, more and more workers lost their jobs even the well-educated can not find a proper job. So that people can not but leave their extended family and go to another city in order to find a job. For example, my uncle who worked in a city where is far away from our hometown, he did not come home unless in the Festival. So I think that the extended family is not as important as it was in the past because there are many factors influence us decisions.

In addition, young people are bothering about the so-called generation gap, which is nevertheless a common problem existing between young adults and their families. Because their difference in attitude and lack of understanding, young people do not like to live with their families. They have their own family including their wife and kids instead living with their parents and grandparents. There are numerous instances closely fit the notion, just like my brother. When he got married, he and my sister-in-law built their own home and moved out of our parents’ home, because they have different habits such like my mother prefers to wash clothes and plates by hands rather than by machine but my sister-in-law like using the washing machine. It would be unfavorable to each of them if they were to live together. So I think for some young people, the extended family is not usually a good idea since their diverse cultural.

Furthermore, with the development of society and the living conditions improve, nowadays people do not need to live in the narrowness space---the extended family. The main change since the development of society is that the focus of loyalty has been steadily narrowed from “extended family” to the “nuclear family”. Nowadays, people like the freely and larger house. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious that we do not need to live crowded together in the large family.

To sum up, a family is, without doubt, a place always full of gladness and vitality. However, taking into account all the factors discussed above, we could safely come to the conclusion that modern people do not like the large family, extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

1点50分UID: 2474836

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

It is truth(去掉) universally acknowledged that every individual are（is） longing for a warmer and harmonious family. （加个and 吧）Family plays an increasingly significant role in people’s life. However, upon the question, extended family is not as important as it was in the past? Different people have different opinions due to their diverse cultural backgrounds. From my personal angle, I am in favor of the opinion that the extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

First of all, people usually go to another city where is far away from their home place, because they need to improve their living conditions and obtain better opportunities, which are very important for their further development. Over the past few years, people like our（去掉） elders did not need to worry about find a work because there were lots of jobs in our city, so they can stay with a large family. But now, more and more workers lost their jobs even the well-educated can not find a proper job. So that people can not but（？？不知道对不对） leave their extended family and go to another city in order to find a job. For example, my uncle who worked in a city where is far away from our hometown, he did not come （加上back） home unless（until比较好） in the Festival. So I think that the extended family is not as important as it was in the past because there are many factors influence us decisions.

In addition, young people are bothering about the so-called generation gap, which is nevertheless a common problem existing between young adults and their families. Because their difference in attitude and lack of understanding, young people do not like to live with their families. They have their own family including their wife and kids instead （of）living with their parents and grandparents. There are numerous instances closely fit the notion, just like my brother. When he got married, he and my sister-in-law built their own home and moved out of our parents’ home, because they have different habits such like my mother prefers to wash clothes and plates by hands rather than by machine but my sister-in-law like using the washing machine（改为which my sister-in-law likes to use）. It would be unfavorable to each of them if they were to live together. So（改为hence，前面有个so了） I think for some young people, the extended family is not usually a good idea since their diverse cultural(改为lifestyle).

Furthermore, with the development of society and the living conditions improve, nowadays people(这个两个词互换) do not need to live in the narrowness space---the extended family. The main change since the development of society is that the focus of loyalty has been steadily narrowed from “extended family” to the “nuclear family”. Nowadays, people like the freely and larger house. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious that we do not need to live crowded together in the large family.

To sum up, a family is, without doubt, a place always full of gladness and vitality. However, taking into account all the factors discussed above, we could safely come to the conclusion that modern people do not like the large family, extended family is not as important as it was in the past.

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