09 10 G[ try best]第二次作业by wangyao735

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Recently, many of the world's lesser-languages are being lost as fewer speak them .I agree with the speaker opinion about the government of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct. However the ability of governments should be considered first.

Every 14 days a language dies. By 2100, more than half of the more than 7,000 languages spoken on Earth—many of them never yet recorded—will likely disappear, taking with them a wealth of knowledge about history, culture, the natural environment, and how the human brain works. Moreover, some information was transmission by the language would never be understand..

Another important reason to prevent language from extinct is that the distinct ideals which only be convey by particularity language would be preserved.

Before we take some measures to protect a language from extinct, the reason which cause the extinction should be understand.
The fist reason is colonialism. For example, when a colonial culture was accepted by the native residents, the own language is going to extinct. As the appreciation of traditional oral American Indian literature has been limited, hampered by poor translations. contemporary American Indian writers have broadened their potential audience, while
retaining many essential characteristics of their ancestral oral traditions. Finally, more English used and few Indian literature preserved.

When it comes to government should act to protect their language, we must realize that a government could not use all the resource to protect their language when people in society are hungry and out of work or lack the basic skills to survive. What is more, the more measures we take do not mean we could protect it effectively. So the government's ability should be consider high priority.
In sum,

how to prevent language from extinct depend on the government’s economical stand and the ability.

   

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Recently, many of the world's lesser-languages are being lost as fewer speak them .I agree with the speaker's opinion about the governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct. However the ability of governments should be considered first.

这段是你的例证，我觉得最好在这里加上"Based on my observation,every 14..."这样显得更诚恳、连贯，并且更加有理可证。有些范文上有类似写法。Every 14 days a language dies. By 2100, more than half of the more than 7,000 languages spoken on Earth—many of them never yet recorded—will likely disappear, taking with them a wealth of knowledge about history, culture, the natural environment, and how the human brain works. Moreover, some information was tranmissed by the language would never be understood.

Another important reason to prevent language from extinct is that the distinct ideals which only be convey by particularity language would be preserved. 这个reason叙述的非常不够充分啊。。似乎刚明白了这句话的意思，还没有叙述清楚为什么要保护语言。下面话锋一转到了引起语言灭种的原因。

Before we take some measures to protect a language from extinct, the reason which cause the extinction should be understand.我觉得没有必要花大篇幅阐述语言消失的原因，从逻辑链条上看它也不是必要的一环。题目政府should怎样怎样，那么要考虑的问的就是should不should，should的原因在哪里？原因在于：第一段你写的，第二段你写的。但到第三段突然出现了很大篇幅的语言消失原因，这不是issue关心的核心问题。对成文也没有什么价值。
The fist reason is colonialism. For example, when a colonial culture was accepted by the native residents, the own language is going to extinct. As the appreciation of traditional oral American Indian literature has been limited, hampered by poor translations. contemporary American Indian writers have broadened their potential audience, while retaining many essential characteristics of their ancestral oral traditions. Finally, more English used and few Indian literature preserved.

When it comes to government should act to protect their language, we must realize that a government could not use all the resource to protect their language when people in society are hungry and out of work or lack the basic skills to survive. What is more, the more measures we take do not mean we could protect it effectively. So the government's ability should be consider high priority.
In sum,
how to prevent language from extinct depend on the government’s economical stand and the ability.在sum里最好把前面的都概括上，你的sum里只对倒数第二段做了总结。

我认为你这篇issue逻辑上不够严谨。
包括后半部分，政府能力应该被考虑在应不应该保护语言的问题内，但没有做足够有说服力的分析和例证。a government could not use all the resource to protect their language when people in society are hungry and out of work or lack the basic skills to survive。题目考虑的不是政府够不够资本保护语言而是应不应该保护语言。你重点可能偏差了，建议看看范文。