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zhuyongchaochaoUID: 2616114

第十三次作业 下周三晚（6月3日）22：00前交
   110. Spend time alone or with friends?

Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do

you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends? Use specific reasons to support your answer


    When talking about how to relax yourself during the leisure time, many people will choose to hang out with friend, go shoping or playing together.  While few will spend most of their time alone since humanbeing are social beings. However, as far as I am concerned , i treasure the time of being alone. To illustrate my opinion , there are several reasons following.
    To begin with , This is such a bizarre world , filled with a great deal of unhappy events. So if we can be left alone , far away from the crowded and noisezy world, inner peace will be harvested. For example, after a busy and crispy work, we are stuffed with a large number of complicated feelings and are headache with multiple difficult questions. What we need most is a private room only to ourself.
    Furthermore , some people enjoy the private time of being alone,especially the one who need a large sum of deep thoughts. They can concentrate fully on what they are researching only on the conditon that the environment is quiet enough. For instance , Jingrui Chen,who is a famous math professor, claims that when he is caculating a tough formula all things go silence. It is obvious that he does not want to be interrupted and do want being alone. So we can safely draw the conclusion that we'd better spend time alone to work efficiently.
    What is more, in certain kind of situation it is you who can rely on. Thus, to force yourself to be alone and become independent  is  essencial for adults. Generally speaking , young adults usually are reliable to their parents,but they have to face loneness when they step the real society and work to support themselves. Therefore the ability to deal with loness and make decison on his owen is essencial for
a youung adult. It is not only a mark of having grown up but an important attitude for adult.
    All in all, we should spend some of our time alone to concentrate ,to think and to enjoy the lonely time.

happye321UID: 193904

When talking about how to relax yourself during the leisure time, many people will choose to hang out with friend, go shopping or playing together.  While few will spend most of their time alone since human being are social beings. However, as far as I am concerned , i treasure the time of being alone. To illustrate my opinion , there are several reasons following.
To begin with , This is such a bizarre world , filled with a great deal of unhappy events. So if we can be left alone , far away from the crowded and noisezy world, inner peace will be harvested. For example, after a busy and crispy work, we are stuffed with a large number of complicated feelings and are headache with multiple difficult questions. What we need most is a private room only to ourself.
  Furthermore , some people enjoy the private time of being alone,especially the one who need a large sum of deep thoughts. They can concentrate fully on what they are researching only on the conditon that the environment is quiet enough. For instance , Jingrui Chen,who is a famous math professor, claims that when he is caculating a tough formula all things go silence. It is obvious that he does not want to be interrupted and do want being alone. So we can safely draw the conclusion that we'd better spend time alone to work efficiently.
    What is more, in certain kind of situation it is you who can rely on. Thus, to force yourself to be alone and become independent  is  essential for adults. Generally speaking , young adults usually are reliable to their parents,but they have to face loneness when they step the real society and work to support themselves. Therefore the ability to deal with loness and make decison on his owen is essencial for a youung adult. It is not only a mark of having grown up but an important attitude for adult.
    All in all, we should spend some of our time alone to concentrate ,to think and to enjoy the lonely time.

zoezuohuangUID: 2518976

When talking about how to relax yourself (考虑这个是否妥当？）during the leisure time, many people will choose to hang out with friend, go shoping or playing together.  While few will spend most of their time alone since humanbeing （human being）are social beings. However, as far as I am concerned , i （大写）treasure the time of being alone. To illustrate my opinion , there are several reasons as following.
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a youung adult. It is not only a mark of having grown up but an important attitude for adult.* H) z- \/ \9 Y& q
    All in all, we should spend some of our time alone to concentrate ,to think and to enjoy the lonely time.
   (写作思路还是比较清晰的，内容也比较充实，基本语法也还不错，句式比较多样但很多显得冗长。一个很重要的问题就是，本文中心问题是回答你自己喜欢怎么做以及你自己为什么要这么做，但是很奇怪，基本上没有看到自己本人描写自己的体会和感受，而是描写普遍的事例，更为值得关注的是作者似乎是要全世界的人都来独自生活，反对与朋友一起生活，这跟开头或者说跟现实都是相悖的。）

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

since humanbeing are social beings -----human beings are social animals
论证三段部分 需要加强 论述的不够充分 比如 To begin with , This is such a bizarre world , filled with a great deal of unhappy events. So if we can be left alone , far away from the crowded and noisezy world, inner peace will be harvested. For example, after a busy and crispy work, we are stuffed with a large number of complicated feelings and are headache with multiple difficult questions. What we need most is a private room only to ourself.
例子后面可以再扩充点内容 像是自己独处可以放松 忘记 unhappy 等等

开头段 模板用的不好 不要 many few 的 就用some some

结尾很无力 实在写不出 就先写和别人在一起的坏处 再写好处 然后自己的观点 这样会看起来充实些

意见仅供参考 考试+U