0910G【Try Best】第二小组第三次作业 argument 242 by 许浩杰

许浩杰UID: 2644623

TOPIC: ARGUMENT242 - The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.

"To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton's honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which students were closely monitored by teachers and an average of thirty cases of cheating per year were reported. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating; five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council, a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without."
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TIME: 01:40:26
DATE: 2009-6-7 9:50:33

In this argument, the speaker asserts that in order to combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students not to cheat in academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect others are cheated. To support his claim, the speaker cites the statistics of numbers of cases of cheating, that is, in this new honor code, the cases of cheating fall to 14 in five yeas while the number is 30 in old one five years before. At first glance, the recommend seems to perfect, however, in a further closely thinking on this argument, we will find how groundless it is. This argument suffers from at least 3 logical fallacies.

Firstly, the other colleges and universities are totally different from the Groveton Colleges. The comparison between them adopted by author is unfair and unwarranted. Perhaps the students in Groveton College are much more sticked to their agreements once agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors. If so, the rates of cheating will automatically fewer than before. The situation in other schools will fail to forecast due to the difference in students. Moreover, the number of the faculty maybe is larger than that of other schools; therefore they will have leisure time and be more responsible for their students' affairs of case of cheating.

Secondly, the number of cases of cheating fall from 30 to 14 in five years is unwarranted for this honor code. Because the fallen number is just 16 in five years albeit the rates have decreased to half of the statistics fives years before. In other words, the decreased number of case of cheating is only about 3 cases in average in every year. The number is so small that many other casual factors can lead to this. For example, it is possible that the students are more shame to commit cheating than those five years before. Perhaps these courses in latest five years are not such different than 5 years before ant then there will be fewer student to cheat in examinations. In short, the honor code cannot reason groundly the fallen numbers of cases in Groveton College especially 3 only in average per year.

Even assuming the situations between these schools are similar and the honor code can result to decrease in the number of cases of cheating, the survey conducted by Groveton College can not justify the idea that honor code will prevent students from cheating. The survey showed that a majority of students would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. The result will be sure and foreknow before carrying out the survey. Because the statistics above said the largest number committing cheating is 30 and this number will certainly be a very modicum number when compared to the whole number of students. So, the survey will prove nothing since the sample has indicated the result.

In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. The comparison is unfair between these different schools and the survey and the statistics quoted are unfortunately valid. The speak need more convincing evidences to support his claim.

tianshi02UID: 2362794

1# 许浩杰
对argument写作的要点把握得很好，段落间衔接得当。我要多多学习。
但有些地方没有攻击到问题的本质。我觉得你第3，4段的说理并没有达到理想的效果，比如，“ Perhaps these courses in latest five years arenot such different than 5 years before ant then there will be fewerstudent to cheat in examinations.” 读者要自己去猜你的逻辑是什么，这里可以说的更直白。比如，“For example,it is possible that the students are more shame to commit cheating thanthose five years before”， 读者会想是不是honor code导致了学生更shameful呢，这恐怕不是一个casual factor吧。
再如，“The result will be sure and foreknow before carrying outthe survey. Because the statistics above said the largest numbercommitting cheating is 30 and this number will certainly be a verymodicum number when compared to the whole number of students.“ 你的逻辑不必然，有点强词夺理。
总的来说，你的写作思路很正确，在逻辑说理和语言表达上还可以继续提高。

wangyao735UID: 2629777

In this argument, the speaker asserts that in order to combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating among college and university students, these institutions should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton's, which calls for students not to cheat in academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect others are cheated. To support his claim, the speaker cites the statistics of numbers of cases of cheating, that is, in this new honor code, the cases of cheating fall to 14 in five yeas while the number is 30 in old one five years before. At first glance, the recommend seems to perfect, however, in a further closely thinking on this argument, we will find how groundless it is. This argument suffers from at least 3 logical fallacies.

Firstly, the other colleges and universities are totally different from the Groveton Colleges. The comparison between them adopted by author is unfair and unwarranted. Perhaps the students in Groveton College are much more sticked 这个是什么意思？倾向？ to their agreements once agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors. If so, the rates of cheating will automatically fewer than before. The situation in other schools will fail to forecast due to the difference in students. Moreover, the number of the faculty maybe is larger than that of other schools; therefore they will have leisure time and be more responsible for their students' affairs of case of cheating.

Secondly, the number of cases of cheating fall from 30 to 14 in five years is unwarranted for this honor code. Because the fallen number is just 16 in five years albeit the rates have decreased to half of the statistics fives years before. In other words, the decreased number of case of cheating is only about 3 cases in average in every year. The number is so small that many other casual factors can lead to this. For example, it is possible that the students are more shame to commit cheating than those five years before. Perhaps these courses in latest five years are not such different than 5 years before ant then there will be fewer student to cheat in examinations. In short, the honor code cannot reason groundly the fallen numbers of cases in Groveton College especially 3 only in average per year.

Even assuming the situations between these schools are similar and the honor code can result to decrease in the number of cases of cheating, the survey conducted by Groveton College can not justify the idea that honor code will prevent students from cheating. The survey showed that a majority of students would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without. The result will be sure and foreknow before carrying out the survey. Because the statistics above said the largest number committing cheating is 30 and this number will certainly be a very modicum number when compared to the whole number of students. So, the survey will prove nothing since the sample has indicated the result.

In conclusion, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. The comparison is unfair between these different schools and the survey and the statistics quoted are unfortunately valid. The speak need more convincing evidences to support his claim.
写得很好，但是在论证上还有一点问题。 一 和三段的论证是一样的哦所以在论证的布置上有问题。建议第三个换一个切入口。