[just do it]第二次作业 Issue13 by zmjxf2008

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

"Many of the world's lesser-known languages are being lost as fewer and fewer people speak them. The governments of countries in which these languages are spoken should act to prevent such languages from becoming extinct."

In the economic globalizing procession, lesser-known languages face the threat from more widely used language,so does the culture those lesser-known languages symbolize.The world originally composed of various languages, different ethnics and diversed thinking system, tend to be a global village, where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system. Economic globalization is the spontaneous result of a maturer economic system.However, driven by the unified language used in media,especially the Internet, the procession has been moved forward so fast that the lesser-known languages lose original use and attention.Under this situation, only a small rescuing action will generate great effect in preserving the endangered languages.

Lesser-known language, as an indispensable element in the world language ecosystem, plays an vital role in keeping ethnical and cultural heritage.If the mother language of a nation become extinct, nobody could read the literature, let alone admire it, remember history because no one could understand the records written by predecessors, or believe the original religion because all the mental treasure is expressed in the mother language which is no more used or understood.Once that happen, the nation itself will collapse soon, gone with the language is the individual identity of cultural heritage and the national cohesion to assemble the hearts of all its people.This will also be a big loss of the world because the irrecoverable extinction of one language means the end of admiring the mental treasure it conveys, the literature and art, and the distinct thinking system. Translation seems to be a comfort for some, but it does not help a lot, whatever kind of translation loses some beauty of the original work.

There is no doubt that people's realization and care of their mother language or original language can save the endangered language directly,but each individual in the speeding process of globalization seems like bewildered,and it is the government's responsibility to wake them up and gather them under the banner of protecting intangible cultural heritage. There is a lot the government can do,for example establishing a language museum,and set up specialty fund rewarding those who study the nation's lesser-known languages. Once the people's realization is evoked, the transmission of the language will go more smoothly through generations.So the government's appeal and promotion is essential and effective to guide people and gather their dispersive energy, and it is eventually the people's awareness and joint effort that rescue the endangered local languages.

Admittedly, with the deeper cooperation and more frequent communication, a unified language will decrease the communicating barriers.But considering the vital role language played in inheriting the cultural system for its people and preserving the diversity of language ecosystem for the whole world, the rescuing action and governmental effective instruction is rewarding and urgent.

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In the economic globalizing procession, lesser-known languages face the threat from more widely used language(s),so does the culture those lesser-known languages symbolizeing. The world originally composed of various languages, different ethnics and diverse(d) thinking system, tend to be a global village, where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system. Economic globalization is the spontaneous result of a maturer economic system. However, driven by the unified language used in media, especially the Internet, the procession has been moved forward so fast that the lesser-known languages lose original use and attention. Under this situation, only a small rescuing action will generate great effect in preserving the endangered languages.

Lesser-known language, as an indispensable element in the world language ecosystem, plays an vital role in keeping ethnical and cultural heritage.If the mother language of a nation become extinct, nobody could read the literature, 这是不是少了介词let alone admire it, remember history because no one could understand the records written by predecessors, or believe the original religion because all the mental treasure is expressed in the mother language which is no more used or understood. Once that happen, the nation itself will collapse soon, gone with the language which is the individual identity of cultural heritage and the national cohesion to assemble the hearts of all its people. This will also be a big loss of the world because the irrecoverable extinction of one language means the end of admiring the mental treasure it conveys, the literature and art, and the distinct thinking system. Translation seems to be a comfort for some, but it does not help a lot, whatever kind of translation loses some beauty of the original work.

There is no doubt that people's realization and care of their mother language or original language can save the endangered language directly,but each individual in the speeding process of globalization seems like bewildered,and it is the government's responsibility to wake them up and gather them under the banner of protecting intangible cultural heritage. There is a lot the government can do,for example establishing a language museum,and set up specialty fund rewarding those who study the nation's lesser-known languages. Once the people's realization is evoked, the transmission of the language will go more smoothly through generations.So the government's appeal and promotion is essential and effective to guide people and gather their dispersive energy, and it is eventually the people's awareness and joint effort that rescue the endangered local languages.

Admittedly, with the deeper cooperation and more frequent communication, a unified language will decrease the communicating barriers.But considering the vital role language played in inheriting the cultural system for its people and preserving the diversity of language ecosystem for the whole world, the rescuing action and governmental effective instruction is rewarding and urgent
第一节和第二节都谈到了语言消失的原因，第二节更详细些，但是第一节似乎有点冗长，第二节谈的原因比较单一，如果多元化一点，再详细的强调对文明的影响，不知不是这样写比较好一点
第三节谈到了政府应该负责任，但是没谈为什么必须负责，关于政府可以做什么也些的比较简单，可以再深入一点
水平有限，感谢楼主

leopard2009UID: 2596872

In the economic globalizing procession\process, lesser-known languages face thethreat from more widely used language,so does the culture thoselesser-known languages symbolize.The world originally composed ofvarious languages, different ethnics and diversed thinking system, tendto be a global village, where most people speak the unified languageand own the same thinking system. Economic globalization is thespontaneous result of a maturer economic system.However, driven by theunified language used in media,especially the Internet, the procession\globalizationhas been moved forward so fast that the lesser-known languages loseoriginal use and attention.Under this situation, only a small rescuingaction will generate great effect in preserving the endangeredlanguages.这句话是主题句吗？意思不是很明确哦。
很好的开头，不过背景描述可能长了，我也犯了同样的问题

Lesser-known language, as an indispensable element in the worldlanguage ecosystem, plays an vital role in keeping ethnical andcultural heritage.If the mother language of a nation becomes extinct,nobody could read the literature, let alone admire it, or remember historybecause no one could understand the records written by predecessors, orbelieve the original religion because all the mental treasure isexpressed in the mother language which is no more used orunderstood.Once that happen, the nation itself will collapse soon, gonewith the language is the individual identity of cultural heritage andthe national cohesion to assemble the hearts of all its people.Thiswill also be a big loss of the world because the irrecoverableextinction of one language means the end of admiring the mentaltreasure it conveys, the literature and art, and the distinct thinkingsystem. Translation seems to be a comfort for some, but it does nothelp a lot, because whatever kind of translation loses some beauty of theoriginal work.
很好的论述。
There is no doubt that people's realization and care of their motherlanguage or original language can save the endangered languagedirectly,but each individual in the speeding process of globalizationseems like bewildered这句话是什么意思哈,and it is the government's responsibility to wakethem up and gather them under the banner of protecting intangiblecultural heritage. There is a lot the government can do,for exampleestablishing a language museum,and setting up specialty fund rewardingthose who study the nation's lesser-known languages. Once the people'srealization is evoked, the transmission of the language will go moresmoothly through generations.So the government's appeal and promotionis essential and effective to guide people and gather their dispersiveenergy, and it is eventually the people's awareness and joint effortthat rescue the endangered local languages.
很好的论述哈
Admittedly, with the deeper cooperation and more frequentcommunication, a unified language will decrease the communicatingbarriers.But considering the vital role language played in inheritingthe cultural system for its people and preserving the diversity oflanguage ecosystem for the whole world, the rescuing action andgovernmental effective instruction is rewarding and urgent.
很好的文章哈，组长的用词表达和文章论述都很好

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

In the economic globalizing procession, lesser-known languages face the threat from more widely used languages,so does the culture those lesser-known languages symbolize. The world originally composed of various languages, different ethnics and diverse thinking systems, tend to be a global village, where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system.


Admittedly,economic globalization is the spontaneous result of a maturer economic system. With
deeper cooperation and more frequent communication, a unified language will decrease the communicating barriers.However, driven by the unified language used in media, especially the Internet, the procession has been moved forward so fast that the lesser-known languages lose original use and attention. Under this situation, only a small rescuing action will generate great effect in preserving the endangered languages.



Lesser-known language, as an indispensable element in the world language ecosystem, plays an vital role in keeping ethnical and cultural heritage.If the mother language of a nation become extinct, nobody could read the literature,
let alone admire it, remember history because no one could understand the records written by predecessors, and believe the original religion because all the mental treasure is expressed in the mother language which is no more used or understood. Once that happen, the nation itself will collapse soon, gone with the language is the individual identity of cultural heritage and the national cohesion to assemble the hearts of all its people.
This will also be a big loss of the world because the irrecoverable extinction of one language means the end of admiring the mental treasure it conveys, the literature and art, and the distinct thinking system. Translation seems to be a comfort for some, but it does not help a lot, whatever kind of translation loses some beauty of the original work. So the trend that 2 languages die out in every week will not only ruin the language ecosystem, but also damage the diversity of cultural ecosystem.



There is no doubt that people's realization and care of their mother language or original language can save the endangered language directly,but individual exposed to the speeding process of globalization seems like bewildered,
and it is the government's responsibility to wake them up and gather them under the banner of protecting intangible cultural heritage. There is a lot the government can do,for example establishing a language museum,and setting up specialty fund rewarding those who study the nation's lesser-known languages. Once the people's realization is evoked, the transmission of the language will go more smoothly through generations.According to the above, the government's appeal and promotion is essential and effective to guide people and gather their dispersive energy, though it is eventually the people's awareness and joint effort that rescue the endangered local languages.



Considering the vital role language played in inheriting the cultural system for its people and preserving the diversity of language ecosystem for the whole world, the rescuing action and governmental effective instruction is rewarding and urgent.Rather than take the extinction of lesser-known languages for granted in globalization or wait for others' help, the government should take a positive and active attitude in this issue and then do what could be done to inspire its people to participate in this rescue.

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

过奖了，Issue还是有很多问题
开头我总是觉得按我的行文顺序提不到主题句上，我改了一下，把第一段拆开，觉得自然些但第一段就成了背景引出，没有提到文章的中心，也不太好。我想看些别的文章在改改。

each individual in the speeding process of globalizationseems like bewildered我想表达的意思是：个人容易在加速的全球化进程中晕头转向。
我改了一下，不知道有没有表达准确一点。
3# leopard2009

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

谢谢jack的建议，我先把一些句子纠正了一下，确实应该加强阅读，多用英语思维，有些问题通过写文章就发现了。


In the economic globalizing procession, lesser-known languages face the threat from more widely used languages,so does the culture those lesser-known languages symbolize(这里是个从句，省略了连接词that, the culture that those lesser-known languages symbolize) The world originally composed of various languages, different races and diverse thinking systems（这三个感觉并列到一起不是特别适合）, tend to be a global village, where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system. The world tend to be a global village where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system which was originally composed of various...语法是没什么问题，但读起来，不知道which代指的是啥？  

Admittedly,economic globalization is the spontaneous result of a maturer（比较级） economic system. With  deeper cooperation and more frequent communication, a unified language will decrease the communicating barriers.However, driven by the unified language used in media, especially the Internet, the procession has been moved forward so fast that more and more lesser-known languages are all but disappearing. Under this situation, only a small rescuing action will generate great effect in preserving the endangered languages.


Lesser-known language, as an indispensable element in the world language ecosystem, plays an vital role in keeping ethnic and cultural heritage.If the mother tongue of a nation become extinct, nobody could read the literature,let alone admire it, remember history because no one could understand the records written by predecessors, and believe the original religion because all the mental treasure is expressed in the mother tongue which is no more used or understood. Once that happen, the nation itself will collapse soon. Gone with the language is the individual identity of cultural heritage and the national cohesion to assemble the hearts of all its people.
This will also be （loss 是名词，前面当然要有BE动词啊）a big loss of the world because the irrecoverable extinction of one language means the end of admiring the mental treasure it conveys, like the literature and art, and the distinct thinking system. Translation seems to be a comfort for some, but it does not help a lot, whatever kind of translation loses some beauty of the original work.  According to some surveys,  two languages die out on average every week, this trend will not only ruin the language ecosystem, but also damage the diversity of cultural ecosystem.



There is no doubt that people's awareness(我想用的是“意识”这个词，realization 名词常用的意思确实是实现，所以就换了一个） and care of the grave situation of their mother language or original language can save the endangered language directly,but individual exposed to the speeding process of globalization seems like bewildered（可以改成one individual will bewildered by the rapid evolution of globalization）,and it is the government's responsibility to wake them up and gather them under the banner of protecting intangible cultural heritage(gather ...under the banner,英语里有这个用法，牛津里写的：
(idm 习语) under the banner (of sth) claiming to support (a particular set of ideas) 声称拥护（某套主张）: She fought the election under the banner of equal rights. 她打着平等的旗号参加了竞选.
）There is a lot the government can do,for example establishing a language museum,and setting up specialty fund rewarding those who study the nation's lesser-known languages. Once the people's awareness is evoked, the transmission of the language will go more smoothly through generations.According to the above, the government's appeal and promotion is essential and effective to guide people and gather their dispersive energy(分散的力量), though it is eventually the people's awareness and joint effort that rescue the endangered local languages.



Considering the vital role language played in inheriting the cultural system for its people and preserving the diversity of language ecosystem for the whole world, the rescuing action and governmental  instruction is rewarding and urgent.Rather than take the extinction of lesser-known languages for granted in globalization or wait for others' help, the government should take a positive and active attitude in this issue and then do what could be done to inspire its people to participate in this rescue.

zmjxf2008UID: 2597395

1。The world tend to be a global village where most people speak the unified language and own the same thinking system which was originally composed of various...语法是没什么问题，但读起来，不知道which代指的是啥？
the world，不知道是不是有什么问题？
但不知道的这么读起来很像指代的system啊

2.mature 有比较级形式，不能前面加more吧，这个事韦氏里查的：
1ma·ture 1    adj.

Pronunciation:	mə-'tu̇r, -'tyu̇r also -'chu̇r
Function:	adjective
Inflected Form:	ma·tur·er ; -est
Etymology:	Middle English, from Latin maturus ripe; akin to Latin mane in the morning, manus good
Date:	15th century

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