0910G [Just do it] Issue13 by houpei0126

houpei0126UID: 2643060

写的比较烂，一直都没有思路。很郁闷。希望大家可以多指点指点
Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kind of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known language are being lost recent years.
There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new island, European began their conquest to build many colonization. In this process, they brought their language, culture and science to the colony. On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods is the natives are influenced
by the immigrants’ language, culture, thus, leading to a amalgamation of two nation, and their languages become very similar, not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language.
An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language can’t administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumber people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, for each of them may meet the need of the historical epoch, we can enjoy the rapid progress of civilization.
At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart the full capabilities and limits of mind. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with master some languages could have a better understanding of the human’s history and treat some problems with a wilder insight.
Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I considered that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or as they accepted some new language, then they found their previous language can’t express their idea correctly or the previous language systems can’t meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. Again, like some small tribes in Africa, they all have their own language, and different tribes will have really different languages but have no their own script. If in order to protect these languages, and then increase the number of active speakers, it must be a difficult process but at the same time, to take measures are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit the development of human beings.
Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection have a great mean to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endanger languages.
Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged. Having decided which languages to protect, and then make full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.

dodoluluUID: 2641270

Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kinds of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known languages are losing recent years.
There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new world新大陆, European began their conquest to build many colonies殖民地. In this process, they brought their languages, culture and science to the colony. On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods is the natives are influenced
by the immigrants’ language, culture, thus, leading to a amalgamation of two nations, and their languages become very similar, not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language这句也该用现在式吧.
这段过渡一下吧，太突兀An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language can’t administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumber people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, for each of them may meet the need of the historical epoch, we can enjoy the rapid progress of civilization.这句话的因果关系有点牵强吧
At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart? the full capabilities and limits of mind这句看不懂. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with master some languages could have a better understanding of the human’s history and treat some problems with a wider insight.
Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I considered that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or as they accepted some new language, then they found their previous language can’t express their idea correctly or the previous language systems can’t meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. Again, like some small tribes in Africa, they all have their own languages, and different tribes will have really different languages but have no their own script. If in order to protect these languages, and then increase the number of active speakers看不懂呀script，active speakers, it must be a difficult process but at the same time, to take measures are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit the development of human beings.
Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection has a great mean to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endangering languages.
Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged很好的比喻. Having decided which languages to protect, and then make full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.

写的真多呀，思路也很清晰，考虑的面面俱到，加强一下句子间链接和关键词的使用，加油！

houpei0126UID: 2643060

Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kinds of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known languages are losing recent years.
There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new world, European began their conquest to build many colonies. In this process, they brought their languages, culture and science to the colony. On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods is the natives are influenced by the immigrants’ language, culture, thus, leading to a amalgamation of two nations, and their languages were becoming very similar, not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language.
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language can’t administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumber people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, and each of them may meet the need of the historical epoch, like the invention of  print technology and electricity which all contribute to humans’ development, thus we can have the opportunity to enjoy the rapid progress of civilization.
At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart the full capabilities and limits of mind. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with master some languages could have a better understanding of the human’s history and treat some problems with a wider insight.
Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I considered that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or as they accepted some new language, then they found their previous language can’t express their idea correctly or the previous language systems can’t meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. Again, like some small tribes in Africa, that different tribes will have really different languages but haven’t their own script. If in order to protect these languages, and then increase the number of local speakers, it must be a difficult process and at the same time, to take steps are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit for the development of human beings.
Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection has a great mean to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endangering languages.
Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged. Having decided which languages to protect, and then make full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.

chill_lyUID: 2640200

3# houpei0126

Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kinds of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known languages are losing recent years.

There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. Since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new world, European began their conquest to build many colonies. In this process, they brought their languages, culture and science to the colony. On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods is that the natives are influenced by the immigrants’ language, culture, which lead to a amalgamation of two nations, and their languages were becoming very similar, and not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language. (缺少连词,句子结构要精简下,我改的可以参考下)

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language cannot (ETS似乎不允许can’t) administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumbers people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity of languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, each of which may meet the need of the historical epoch, like the invention of  print technology and electricity which all contribute to humans’ development, (thus) we can have the opportunity to enjoy the rapid progress of civilization. (注意句子结构,不太容易看懂,考虑改成短句)

At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart (觉得不太恰当) the full capabilities and limits of mind. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with master(这样不对,考虑mastering或with a master of) some languages could have a better understanding of the human history and treat some problems with a wider insight.

Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I consider that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or if they accept some new language, (then) they will find their previous language cannot express their idea correctly or the previous language systems cannot meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. (不知道你为什么要用过去时,都给你改了,另外改了下结构,参考下) Again, like some small tribes in Africa, (that去掉,不然就不是句子了,再者非限制性定语从句引导词也应是which) different tribes will have really different languages but do not have their own script. If forced to (in order to在这里不恰当) protect these languages, and then increase the number of local speakers, it must be a difficult process and at the same time, to take steps are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit for the development of human beings.

Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection has a great mean (可能不能这么写) to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endangering languages.

Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged. Having decided which languages to protect, and then making (make肯定不对,and前后是平等的,我这么改可能也不太合适,你再斟酌下) full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.

思路很清晰
写长句子的时候一定要注意结构,错了就得不偿失了
加油

houpei0126UID: 2643060

Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kinds of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known languages are losing recent years.

There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. Since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new world, European began their conquest to build many colonies. In this process, they brought their languages, culture and science to the colony. On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods is that the natives are influenced by the immigrants’ language, culture, which lead to a amalgamation of two nations, and their languages were becoming very similar, and not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language.
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language cannot administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumbers people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity of languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, each of which may meet the need of the historical epoch, like the invention of  print technology and electricity which all contribute to humans’ development, thus we can have the opportunity to enjoy the rapid progress of civilization.

At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart the full capabilities and limits of mind. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with a master of some languages could have a better understanding of the human history and treat some problems with a wider insight.

Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I consider that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or if they accept some new language, then they will find their previous language cannot express their idea correctly or the previous language systems cannot meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. Again, like some small tribes in Africa, different tribes will have really different languages but do not have their own script. If forced to protect these languages, and then increase the number of local speakers, it must be a difficult process and at the same time, to take steps are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit for the development of human beings.

Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection has great meaning to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endangering languages.

Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged. Having decided which languages to protect, and then making full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.
很感谢chilly细心地批改，有的地方确实写的很不妥当。稍微修改了一下

greenxsUID: 2529289

Human are proud of their diversified languages for many years. There’s no doubt that a language can represent a culture, and the difference between each culture can also inspire people to open their eyes and accept different kinds of ideology and history. However, many of the world’s lesser-known languages are losing recent years.

There are plenty number of factors that bring about this factors, which include many aspects like economy, politics and history, etc. Since the development of seafaring technology and the famous adventurer Columbus discovered the new world, European began their conquest to build many colonies. In this process, they brought their languages, culture and science to the colony. 要指明它剥夺了哪的native language On the other hand, the native languages, cultures were destroyed. What’s more, 这两个词不具备递进on the other hand可以不要 through human history, when the emperors occupied a new realm, some people from the other places are forced to immigrate to the new demesne in order to have a strength and well management. The result of this methods是单数 is that the natives are influenced by the immigrants’ language, culture, which lead to a amalgamation of two nations, and their languages were becoming very similar, and not for a long time, the natives’ language disappeared or became a lesser-known language.


Nowadays, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that a single language cannot administer to the whole society’s development, for it almost represents the same ideology and cumbers people’s imagination. Through human’s history, because the diversity of languages represent many different kinds of thinking modes and understanding of the nature and science, each of which may meet the need of the historical epoch, like the invention of  print technology and electricity which all contribute to humans’ development, thus we can have the opportunity to enjoy the rapid progress of civilization.

At the same time, with an enormous number of languages, philosophers, scientists, and linguists can chart the full capabilities and limits of mind. For instance, an authority that specialized in history with a master of some languages could have a better understanding of the human history and treat some problems with a wider insight.

Now, it’s generally accepted that human should take measures to protect the lesser-known languages. As for me, I consider that we should respect the inevitability of historical development, for it must be some local residents’ own choice, or if they accept some new language, then they will find their previous language cannot express their idea correctly or the previous language systems cannot meet local residents’ need to improve their living condition. Again, like some small tribes in Africa, different tribes will have really different languages but do not have their own script. If forced to protect these languages, and then increase the number of local speakers, it must be a difficult process and at the same time, to take steps are unnecessary because they have been proved not fit for the development of human beings.

Whether we act to prevent lesser-known languages or not and which languages to protect改成how to protect会不会好一些 is a serious topic. In my part, we should think about which one’s protection has great meaning to us and which one is unnecessary. For these unnecessary ones, we can just document them in terms of its grammar and its local traditions (songs, stories). As for the other part, local governments can cooperate with some language communities through political, community, public and educational means to make more citizens know these languages and encourage them to communicate in these endangering languages.

Every language, every culture is like the star in the nocturne, without which the beauty will be much damaged. Having decided which languages to protect, and then making full use of the whole society’s power, it will be a big wealthy not only for us, but also for our offspring.
需要改的地方不多啦，有的指代不明需要仔细再检查一下~


5# houpei0126