Issue144 =So What=小组第3次作业 by xwlove

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Issue144 =So What=小组第3次作业 by xwlove


今天修改了一下格式啊^_^

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144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

素材：

1 贺拉斯 Quintus Horatius Flaccus 古罗马著名文艺批评家贺拉斯把文学批评比作“磨刀石”，而把文艺创作比作“钢刀”，文艺批评虽然“自己切不动什么”，但“能使钢刀锋利”。
2 Feminist artists 女性主义艺术家通过艺术呼吁女性参与艺术。
3 李小龙 Bruce Lee 李小龙通过评判传统武术，吸取所有拳种精华，创立截拳道。
4 莎士比亚 Shakespeare 莎士比亚生前只是个普通的剧院编剧，并不为同时代人所重视，直到他死后，他的戏剧作品集才由他的朋友本·琼生编印出来。在他逝世后的一百多年间，虽然肯定他的人不少，但贬抑他的更是大有人在。直到歌德、柯勒律治等人反驳以往对他的不公正看法，给他极高的评价以后，人们才真正认识到莎士比亚的伟大，至今世界各国人们也都认可莎士比亚戏剧是戏剧史乃至文学史上难以企及的高峰，无数普通读者、批评家都在积极研读他的作品。

Issue 144提纲

正：艺术家确实创造社会价值；

（1）促进文化和人文发展，满足精神需求；
（2）在道德和政治方面产生社会影响；

反：批评家也能创造社会价值；

（1）the critic makes the artist reflect and refine on their works
（2）a good artist may be an excellent critic first if he wants to make contributions to society
（3）the critic assists the society with digging out the outstanding artist originally unknown to public

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143"Artists should pay little attention to their critics.* Criticism tends to undermine and constrain the artist's creativity."
*those who evaluate works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.


Issue 143 提纲

关键词：should  
题型判断: 1+1, 因果关系

正：对于一些信心不足或者不谦虚的艺术家，批评可能会破坏和限制他们的创造力。

反：批评某种程度上促进艺术家的艺术创作。
（1）the critic makes the artist reflect and refine on their works
（2）a good artist may be an excellent critic first if he wants to make contributions to society

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Those who don't think highly of critics are convinced that the artists give society something of lasting value through their artwork while the critics are no good. It is seemingly well-reasoned but actually fallacious when we get into speculating about the role of the critics in society.

It's can't be more reasonable to say that the artist contributes to something of lasting value for our society. First, the artist creates works of art which are indispensable for culture and humanity development of our society. In particular, the creations of the artist fulfill the aesthetic demand of the whole society, as indicated in the famous Maslow's theory. Say, they may provide a record of history and culture, or reflect ideology of the time, or bring something pleasant to watch or listen to. The artworks of the artist not only promote culture and humanity development but also influence the society in morality and politics. For instance, western feminist artist managed to make art that reflects women's lives and experiences to improve women's rights and impact on art throughout the 1970s.

On the other hand, the critic also creates lasting value to the society. Above all, the critic makes the artist reflect and refine on their works. Just as the Roman critic Quintus Horatius Flaccus put, the evaluation of a critic is like a grindstone and the creations of the artist a knife. The critic is not capable of cutting, but it sharpens the knife. Moreover, a good artist may be an excellent critic first if he wants to make contributions to society. Take, Bruce Lee, the famous martial artist as an example, his criticism that traditional martial arts techniques were too rigid and formalistic to be practical played an influence in the creation of the eclectic martial art Jeet Kune Do. In addition, the critic assists the society with digging out the outstanding artist originally unknown to public. Shakespeare, an ordinary screenwriter before his death, his work has been studied by the whole society ever since Goethe and Samuel Coleridge found that he is virtually a great writer.   

To conclude, the artist and the critic are both conducive to bringing society something of lasting value. The artist can be a knife that used for cutting, while the critic is a grindstone which sharpens the knife. We can't ignore the value of the critic.

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Those who don't think highly of critics are convinced that the artists give society something of lasting value through their artwork while the critics are no good. It is seemingly well-reasoned but actually fallacious(怎么是argu的调调？个人觉得I是让你亮出自己的观点并论证，不是让你评判作者观点的对错，你可以赞同或反对或平衡观点，但应该不能以批判的态度，否则就是在围绕作者写，而不是表明自己了吧？这里可以探讨一下) when we get into speculating about the role of the critics in society.

It's can't be more reasonable to say that the artist contributes to something of lasting value for our society. First, the artist creates works of art which are indispensable for culture and humanity development of our society. In particular, the creations of the artist fulfill the aesthetic demand of the whole society, as indicated in the famous Maslow's theory. Say, they may provide a record of history and culture, or reflect ideology of the time, or bring something pleasant to watch or listen to. The artworks of the artist not only promote culture and humanity development but also influence the society in morality and politics. For instance, western feminist artist managed to make art that reflects（reflected） women's lives and experiences to improve women's rights and impact on art throughout the 1970s(例子很好，充分论证了上面的小论点).

On the other hand, the critic also（这样可以表示转折吗 ） creates lasting value to the society. Above all（学习了 另一种首先的表示）, the critic makes the artist reflect（用反映这个意思不合适吧？我觉得可以改为improve或者polish，它们和refine混搭比较好） and refine on their works. Just as the Roman critic Quintus Horatius Flaccus（例子学习学习了） put（啥意思？提出？而且与后面的时态不一致）, the evaluation of a critic is like a grindstone and the creations of the artist（少了is like?） a knifee critic is not capable of cutting, but it sharpens the knife. Moreover, a good artist may be an excellent critic first if he wants to make contributions to society（既然是maybe,那也就有可能是
may not be, 你用一个maybe的现象来论证，个人认为不行，因为它本身就暗含着may bot be的意思，就好像你同时也为反方说话了一样。其次，仅仅就 艺术家首先是个评论家 这一观点 来直接论证你这段的ts:  the critic also creates lasting value to the society ,不妥，我觉得你可以再这句前适当加个小论点如 评论家与艺术家有一些交叉的地方，如。。。
ke, Bruce Lee, the famous martial artist as an example, his criticism that traditional martial arts techniques were too rigid and formalistic to be practical played an influence in the creation of the eclectic martial art Jeet Kune Do. In addition, the critic assists the society with digging out the outstanding artist originally unknown to public. Shakespeare, an ordinary screenwriter before his death, his work has been studied by the whole society ever since Goethe and Samuel Coleridge found that he is virtually a great writer（这个例子很恰当 学习了）.
这段的第一和第三分论点都是很有力的也没甚不妥，但第二个实在是有点牵强，不如把第二和第三个换个位置，如果你非得写第二个论点的话
tist and the critic are both conducive to bringing society something of lasting value. The artist can be a knife that used for cutting, while the critic is a grindstone which sharpens the knife. We can't ignore the value of the critic.

love（这名起的。。。真有水平:lol ）童鞋的语言我觉得还是不错的，也有恰当的例子
这篇从整体的提纲结构上来讲也是中规中矩，但首段值得研究，还有几处质疑的地方也是我一家之言，有机会探讨探讨。。。

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4# mqi07
谢谢mqi的修改，真的一语中的，受益匪浅。我要慢慢消化……

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5# xwlove

我也都是自己的意见 有很多是需要求证的 :p