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As a general rule, different people have different views when they observe the same object. While different people view the rose, for a philosopher it merely means a flower as an objective thing; for a girl it means beauty and love; and for a merchantman it means profit. But for a cow it just a kind of food. The rose is just the same rose. It is red and sweet-scented flower. This is purely objective observation. In fact, there is being purely objective observation.

In this world, it is hard for purely objective observation as limited by the lever of technology, tools and instrument, research method and etc while it is actually existent. What is purely objective observation? It should reflect objective truth. For instance, while the scientific and technological level is very low the geocentric system of astronomy
was undisputed until Copernicus. In Copernicus’s time, a notch or two higher in scientific and technological level, he sum up predecessors’ experience and dive into forerunner’s theory, as well as through long period observe
then he put forward the heliocentric system in his “De revolutionibus orbium coelestium”. In his theory he discuss that the earth whirls on its axis; the moon revolves around the earth; the earth and other planet go round the sun. During hundreds years people verify that it reflect objective truth. So, the observation of revolution of earth, the moon, and the sun by Copernicus is purely objective observation. In contemporary society with high degree of human civilization developed, we also consider this theory is right as it reflect objective truth. Therefore, we can reach purely objective observation when we utilize scientific method, advanced instrument with rigorous attitude.

As purely objective observation is actually existent, it is obviously wrong claim all observation is not objective but rather subjective. Although in artistic circles it is more subjective observation because activated imagination is the most important thing for artist. But especially in the nature scientific world it places more emphasis on objective observation. For nature science should reflect the law and fact of the objective things in the nature. Besides in the legal circles correct reasoning and justice must base on the objective observation. So for a fair judge when he or she makes out correct justice his observation should be objective observation. And the same for political areas it should take objective observation first then make policy. The great statesman Mao Zedong says “To proceed from reality and seek truth from facts”. “To proceed from reality” means carry through objective observation. To sum up, in our lives, there is not subjective observation only also objective observation actually existent.

In a word, according to author’s assertion, there are no such things as truth and we cannot truly know anything. However, this think runs against scientific discoveries and knowledge in human history. Thus, purely objective observation is actually existent and not all observation is subjective.

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As a general rule, different people have different views when they observe the same object. While different people view the rose, for a philosopher it merely means a flower as an objective thing; for a girl it means beauty and love; and for a merchantman it means profit. But for a cow it just a kind of food. The rose is just the same rose. It is red and sweet-scented flower. This is purely objective observation. In fact, there is being purely objective observation.（这句话感觉上有问题，为什么用being ?还是对于你的开头提点小小的建议把，a strong and good thesis should be specific，如果我没有理解错的话，最后一句话是你的主旨句吧，感觉上这样是很难说服别人的，在开始的时候你说的是different people view things differently, 然后举了例子告诉我们的确是不一样的，让我的感觉是你要写没有purely observation的，然后你笔锋一转，说the red and scented flower 就是purely observation,变成了是有，让人有点混乱，可能是我理解的不好~~~。毕竟，我也做的不好~~）

In this world, it is hard for purely objective observation as limited by the lever of technology, tools and instrument, research method and etc （小标点，挑点小刺哈）while it is actually existent. What is purely objective observation? It should reflect objective truth. For instance, while the scientific and technological level is very low the geocentric system of astronomy
was undisputed until Copernicus. In Copernicus’s time, a notch or two higher in scientific and technological level, he sum up predecessors’ experience and dive into forerunner’s theory（赞一下这样的表达!）, as well as through long period observe
then he put forward the heliocentric system in his “De revolutionibus orbium coelestium”. In his theory he discuss that the earth whirls on its axis; the moon revolves around the earth; the earth and other planet go round the sun. During hundreds years people verify that it reflect objective truth. So, the observation of revolution of earth, the moon, and the sun by Copernicus is purely objective observation.(这句话和上面的一句是重复的) In contemporary society with high degree of human civilization developed, we also consider this theory is right as it reflect objective truth. （我觉得这里有点循环论证的感觉，我们认为他是正确的因为他是客观的事实？他问什么事客观的事实，因为他是正确的？我觉得这个例子似乎不是很适合这样的话题的）Therefore, we can reach purely objective observation when we utilize scientific method, (and)advanced instrument with rigorous attitude.(赞一下这句话，我觉得这样的话很不错，这样的话也是很好的thesis statement, 你可以将这样的话用在开头啊~~~)

As purely objective observation is actually existent, it is obviously wrong claim all observation is not objective but rather subjective. Although in artistic circles it is more subjective observation because activated imagination is the most important thing for artist. But especially in the nature scientific world it places more emphasis on objective observation. For nature science should reflect the law and fact of the objective things in the nature. Besides in the legal circles correct reasoning and justice must base on the objective observation. So for a fair judge when he or she makes out correct justice his observation should be objective observation（in my opinion, 这里和上句有些重复，还是我没有看出来?）. And the same for political areas it should take objective observation first then make policy. (我觉得这里你更多的是在说重要性，只有objective observation, a fair judge and policy 才可以be made.)The great statesman Mao Zedong says “To proceed from reality and seek truth from facts”. “To proceed from reality” means carry through objective observation. To sum up, in our lives, there is not subjective observation only also objective observation actually existent.（呃，我自己的感觉，和上文的文风有些不是很像，具体的我说不上来，但还是觉得一篇文章里，最好只使用一种文风的，这样才连贯。可能我没有理解到，我觉得这里和你的论证和前面的论证似乎很大程度上是一样的, 就拿你的summary来说 there is not subjective observation only also objective observation actually existent，和你上段的论证是一样的呀，我还是不是很了解你的这个分论点， 你是不是要说not all observation is subjective？和上段的objective observation exist 的区别在哪呢？可能最近考专业考的人糊了，看不出来了~~55）
In a word, according to author’s assertion, there are no such things as truth and we cannot truly know anything（我觉得而这里似乎有些突兀）. However, this think runs against scientific discoveries and knowledge in human history. Thus, purely objective observation is actually existent and not all observation is subjective.
总评：和改你的第一篇相比，我觉得你的语言进步了很多，真的，在用词，句子上面真的进步了很多（恩，我的还是老样子，汗一个，楼主用了什么样的方法啊？分享分享~~）我觉得你如果在逻辑上，在结构上更加清楚的话，会更好些.(小女子浅见，自己的都一大堆问题，再次擦汗~~). 我们一起努力哈！

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As a general rule, different people have different views when they observe the same object. While different people view the rose, for a philosopher it merely means a flower as an objective thing; for a girl it means beauty and love; and for a merchantman it means profit. But for a cow it just a kind of food. The rose is just the same rose, which is a red and sweet-scented flower. This is purely objective observation. In fact, there is being purely objective observation.（用这样的例子当作开头，需要冒险的哦，呵呵，在开头没有完全交待清楚的观点）
In this world, it is hard for purely objective observation as limited by the lever of technology, tools and instrument, research method and etc，while it is actually existent. What is purely objective observation? It should reflect objective truth. For instance, while the scientific and technological level is very low the geocentric system of astronomy
was undisputed until Copernicus. During Copernicus’s time, a notch or two higher in scientific and technological level, he sum up predecessors’ experience and dive into forerunner’s theory （as well as前面不要加逗号）as well as through long period observe ， then he put forward the heliocentric system in his “De revolution bus orbium coelestium”. In his theory he discuss that1)the earth whirls on its axis; 2)the moon revolves around the earth;3) the earth and other planet go round the sun. During hundreds years people verify that it reflect objective truth. So,（so可以换成其他比较好表示结果的词语如as a consequence等等，而且一般不建议将so放在句首而且后面也不建议加逗号） the observation of revolution of earth, the moon, and the sun by Copernicus is purely objective observation. In contemporary society with high degree of human civilization developed, we also consider this theory is right as it reflect objective truth. Therefore, we can reach purely objective observation when we utilize scientific method, advanced instrument with rigorous attitude. 你这段话的主要目的是去论证什么是purely observation吧，但是你结论却是说当我们运用科学方法和先进的仪器以及严谨的态度，我们就可以达到纯粹客观的观察，应该论证我们可以运用科学方法和先进的仪器以及严谨的态度去证明一个观察反应的是一个客观的事实，我们就可以达到纯粹的客观）

As purely objective observation is actually existent, it is obviously wrong claim all observation is not objective but rather subjective. Although in artistic circles it is more subjective observation because activated imagination is the most important thing for artist. But especially in the nature scientific world it places more emphasis on objective observation. For nature science should reflect the law（法律不属于自然科学吧？） and fact of the objective things in the nature. Besides in the legal circles correct reasoning and justice must base on the objective observation. So for a fair judge when he or she makes out correct justice his observation should be objective observation. （法律一般都是保护绝大多数人的利益，只是一个相对的公平，虽说要做到客观公正）Similarly，political areas it should take objective observation first then make policy. The great statesman Mao Zedong says “To proceed from reality and seek truth from facts”. “To proceed from reality” means carry through objective observation. To sum up, in our lives, there is not subjective observation only also objective observation actually existent.这段话的论证我觉得很牵强，只用了一些领域的例子来论证客观的观察是存在的
In a word, according to author’s assertion, there are no such things as truth and we cannot truly know anything. However, this thought runs against scientific discoveries and knowledge in human history. Thus, purely objective observation is actually existent and not all observation is subjective.


我觉得语言方面还需要加强，一些句型还需要多斟酌一下，而且很多句型都有点头重脚轻，英语一般讲究头轻较重吧，把一些补充语往句子后面放，标点符号的使用也要注意，我感觉你知识面好宽，好会用例子啊 我就不行了，半天憋不出一个例子来，加油。

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re：和改你的第一篇相比，我觉得你的语言进步了很多，真的，在用词，句子上面真的进步了很多（恩，我的还是老样子，汗一个，楼主用了什么样的方法啊？分享分享~~）
飙⊙﹏⊙b汗中~~写的时候没注意呢~~~如果真说有方法。。就是上次改了好几篇作文~~面对别人的问题思考思考~~

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As a general rule, different people have different views when they observe the same object. While different people view the rose, for a philosopher it merely means a flower as an objective thing; for a girl it means beauty and love; and for a merchantman it means profit. But for a cow it just a kind of food. The rose is just the same rose, which is a red and sweet-scented flower. This is purely objective observation. In fact, there is being purely objective observation and it is obviously wrong claim all observation is not objective but rather subjective.

In this world, purely objective observation is actually existent while it is hard for purely objective observation as limited by the lever of technology, tools and instrument, research method and etc. For instance, while the scientific and technological level is very low the geocentric system of astronomy was undisputed until Copernicus. In Copernicus’s time, a notch or two higher in scientific and technological level, he sum up predecessors’ experience and dive into forerunner’s theory as well as through long period observe, then he put forward the heliocentric system in his “De revolution bus orbium coelestium”. In his theory he discuss that the earth whirls on its axis; the moon revolves around the earth and the earth and other planet go round the sun. During hundreds years, the science technology is developing, people observe the stellar revolution through astronomical telescope and verify that Copernicus’ theory reflect objective truth. As a consequence, the observation of revolution of earth, the moon, and the sun by Copernicus is purely objective observation. In contemporary society with high degree of human civilization developed, we also consider this theory is right as it reflect objective truth. Therefore, we can reach purely objective observation when we utilize scientific method, advanced instrument with rigorous attitude.

As purely objective observation is actually existent, it is obviously wrong claim all observation is not objective but rather subjective. Different area has different situation. Although in artistic circles it is more subjective observation because activated imagination is the most important thing for artist. But especially in the nature scientific world it places more emphasis on objective observation. For nature science should reflect the law and fact of the objective things in the nature. Besides in the legal circles correct reasoning and justice must base on the objective observation. For a fair judge when he or she makes out correct justice his observation should be objective observation. Similarly，political areas it should take objective observation first then make policy. The great statesman Mao Zedong says “To proceed from reality and seek truth from facts”. “To proceed from reality” means carry through objective observation. To sum up, in our lives, there is not subjective observation only also objective observation actually existent.

In a word, according to author’s assertion, there are no such things as truth and we cannot truly know anything. However, this thought runs against scientific discoveries and knowledge in human history. Thus, purely objective observation is actually existent and not all observation is subjective.