同主题ARGUMENT65 =August Rush=小组第2次作业 by Mason.PD

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

65.The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."

很多年来我们的所有连锁店都储备了很多种类的国产奶酪和进口奶酪。然而去年，我们的最新店里五种销量最高的奶酪都是威斯康星出产的cheddar奶酪。而且，最近一次由Cheese of the World杂志所举行的调查显示，其订阅者对于国产奶酪的倾向性越来越高。由于我们公司可以通过限制库存来减少开支，在我们所有连锁店增加盈利的最好方式就是停止贮备很多进口奶酪而主要集中于国产奶酪。

破题点

1.错误类比。在新开店的国产奶酪热销不等于全国国产奶酪的热销。

            同样，热销的情况不能代表公司的高利润，可能是折价让利。

            也没有证据说明这种热销势头会一直持续。

2调查样本模糊，杂志权威性不知，抽样方法未给。订阅杂志的人不一定是真正买奶酪的人。

3减少存货可能使产品数量减少，并不一定使利润增加。

Mason.PDUID: 2592013

TOPIC: ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
WORDS: 396
TIME: 01:59:05
DATE: 2009/5/23 14:34:32

In the argument, the author recommends to stop stocking imported cheese and concentrate on domestic cheeses to improve profits. To bolster the conclusion, the author quotes the new store's sell condition and the survey conducted by Cheese of the World magazine. At the first glance, the author's argument appears to be somehow appealing, while a close examination will reveal how groundless it is.

To begin with, the author commits a mistake of false analogy. He points out the sale condition of the newest store in last year that five best-selling cheeses are domestic chesses, whereas he does not mention the status of other stores. It is possible that the domestic cheeses in other stores are not as same popular as in the newest one. Also, the best-selling does not mean great profits. Even if the domestic cheeses can sell like hot cakes, they may not bring the profits improved. What is more, assuming the real gains from domestic chesses are great, no evidence has showed that the high sale trendy can last in the future.

In addition, the survey quoted is too vague to be informative. How about the authority of Chesses of the World magazine? How about the procedures for random sampling? The test fails to offer us something vital, which may leads to the doubt whether the survey is scientific and whether the sample is representative enough. Even we accept the result of the survey, the preference of the subscribers can not represent the real purchaser of cheese.

Last but not the least, the author does not provide any evidence about the benefits of limiting inventory, which means, he oversimplifies the relationship between reducing expenses and improving profit. It is known to all that the profit is the subtraction between the cost and the income. Limiting inventory means the cutting of the expenses, but it also reduces the amount of the sales. It is possible that the size of buyers who like both cheeses will decrease. And it may does harm to improving the profits.

To sum up, based on what has analyzed above, it is clear that the argument is invalid and misleading. To make it more believable, the author should prove the domestic cheese can bring real big profit in all stores in the long term, and rule out other feasible ways to improve profit, as well as the necessary to stop stocking imported cheese.
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wisleUID: 2578616

In the argument, the author recommends to stop stocking imported cheese and concentrate on domestic cheeses to improve profits. To bolster the conclusion, the author quotes the new store's sell condition and the survey conducted by Cheese of the World magazine. At the first glance, the author's argument appears to be somehow appealing, while a close examination will reveal how groundless it is.（前面提出作者的Supports）
To begin with, the author commits a mistake of false analogy. He points out the sale condition of the newest store in last year that five best-selling cheeses are domestic chesses, whereas he does not mention the status of other stores. It is possible that the domestic cheeses in other stores are not as same popular as in the newest one. Also, the best-selling does not mean great profits. Even if the domestic cheeses can sell like hot cakes, they may not bring the profits improved. What is more, assuming the real gains from domestic chesses are great, no evidence has showed that the high sale trendy can last in the future.
In addition, the survey quoted is too vague to be informative. How about the authority of Chesses of the World magazine? How about the procedures for random sampling?
（可以尽量展开，细说，既可以使得论证充分，又可以使得字数上升J）The test fails to offer us something vital, which may leads to the doubt whether the survey is scientific and whether the sample is representative enough. Even we accept the result of the survey, the preference of the subscribers can not represent the real purchaser of cheese.

Last but not the least, the author does not provide any evidence about the benefits of limiting inventory, which means, he oversimplifies the relationship between reducing expenses and improving profit. It is known to all that the profit is the subtraction between the cost and the income. Limiting inventory means the cutting of the expenses, but it also reduces the amount of the sales. It is possible that the size of buyers who like both cheeses will decrease. And it may does harm to improving the profits.（这段分析很好！）

To sum up, based on what has analyzed above, it is clear that the argument is invalid and misleading. To make it more believable, the author should prove the domestic cheese can bring real big profit in all stores in the long term, and rule out other feasible ways to improve profit, as well as the necessary to stop stocking imported cheese.
组长的两篇文章可以说是短小精悍，假如你能将问题展开的话，字数就可以上来，也许你写作时没时间，呵呵。文章的整体结构和让步式攻击做得很好，很欣赏！

尾羽UID: 2482591

TOPIC: ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
WORDS: 396
TIME: 01:59:05
DATE: 2009/5/23 14:34:32

In the argument, the author recommends to stop stocking imported cheese and concentrate on domestic cheeses to improve profits. To bolster the conclusion, the author quotes the new store's sell condition and the survey conducted by Cheese of the World magazine. At the first glance, the author's argument appears to be somehow appealing, while a close examination will reveal how groundless it is.

To begin with, the author commits a mistake of false analogy. He points out the sale condition of the newest store in last year that five best-selling cheeses are domestic chesses, whereas he does not mention the status of other stores. It is possible that the domestic cheeses in other stores are not as same popular as in the newest one. Also, the best-selling does not mean great profits. Even if the domestic cheeses can sell (be sold) like hot cakes, they may not bring the profits improved(这句话我不懂哎~hot cake说明了什么？). What is more, assuming the real gains from domestic chesses are great, no evidence has showed that the high sale trendy can last in the future.(这里似乎应该对“what is more”这句话的观点继续展开论述一下~感觉说了一半)

In addition, the survey quoted is too vague to be informative. How about the authority of Chesses of the World magazine? How about the procedures for random sampling? The test fails to offer us something vital, which may leads (lead) to the doubt whether the survey is scientific and whether the sample is representative enough. Even we accept the result of the survey, the preference of the subscribers can not represent the real purchaser of cheese（还可以展开。。。）

Last but not the least, the author does not provide any evidence about the benefits of limiting inventory, which means, he oversimplifies the relationship between reducing expenses and improving profit. It is known to all that the profit is the subtraction between the cost and the income. Limiting inventory means the cutting of the expenses, but it also reduces(may also reduce) the amount of the sales. It is possible that the size of buyers who like both cheeses will decrease. And it may does harm to improving the profits.(这段的观点~我没有想到~好！)

To sum up, based on what has analyzed above, it is clear that the argument is invalid and misleading. To make it more believable, the author should prove the domestic cheese can bring real big profit in all stores in the long term, and rule out other feasible ways to improve profit, as well as the necessary to stop stocking imported cheese.

绿色是好的！红色是修改
我也觉得哆啦的文章很精练,很好!我要学习!但就是有的地方没来的及展开。大概时间问题吧~~