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ISSUE157 - "There is no such thing as purelyobjective observation. All observation is subjective; it is always guided bythe observer's expectations or desires."



On the issue that there is no such thing as purely objective observation, it makes sense that people when making some decisions or judging some things before observation are strongly impacted by the personal experience, knowledge, beliefs and so on. According to some history or facts in the society, however, isn't all observation more or less subjective? Is there anything such as purely objective observation?
It is critical and difficult to define "objective", while in this issue we'll regard objective observation as the one which is not guided by the observer's expectations or desires. So in some circumference, unconscious observation can also be called objective observation such as some inspiring from a glance in phenomena.
To begin with, the statement actually insofar has some merits for contending that no such observation exists in the form of pure objective description. As a matter of fact, there is no absolute criterion for evaluating objectivity since every conclusion is drawn by ourselves, human beings. No matter how "objective" it is claimed, there always lies some subjective elements in his or her emotion. For example, when appreciating certain masterpiece such as “the Smile of Mona Lisa”, some people think the beauty lie in his charming eyes, while others
argue that Mona Lisa’ expression attracted most. Next, even such absolute criterion of objectivity is decided, under different circumstances-varied times, places, aims-or alike, what expected objective observation always brings one error or two. For instance, many observers over the world have claimed that they saw UFO or other surreptitious sights at least once, however, the majority of these observations turned out to be fictive because those observers failed to provide enough evidence for proving what they said.

Furthermore, adding all blames to the observer's expectations or desires is unfairly for interpretating the cause and accordingly obeys the essence of objectivity. First, it is crucial to distinguish observation process and observation result before formulating the final generaion. Common scene tells us, observation process and observation result are completely two different matters. The former as a searching effort for the solution to some specific problems is always taken out objectively ,while the latter including uncertain factors such as the interpretating means of the reporter often looks subjective. Secondly, with the development of science and technology, observation are not necessarily carried out by human beings since there are many "auto-observers" can handle the job as well. A fitting example of which is electrical-camera used in “one hundred dash”. The auto-probe sends back the data it observed then computers had the data analyzed and displayed the result precisely almost at the same time. How can you deny this process is indeed an objective observation excluded with human’s desire? Thirdly, science is the objective rules of the nature and its progresses all are achieved through people’s hard work. If all observations are not objective, it will not conduce to the development of science and our society as a result cannot see any real progress.

However, emphasizing objective observation does not mean it absolutely refuse observers’ expectations or desires to participate in the observation activity. Consider, if we do not abide by this law, what the world will eventually like? -----Certainly it will turn out to be a turbid, chaotic world, no truth, no reality. Webster gives us a good definition about objective, which means expressing or dealing with facts or conditions as perceived without distortion by personal feelings, prejudices, or interpretations. Yes, if Watt did not observe the boiling tea-pot objectively, he could not made fundamental improvements in the steam engine which resulted in the modern, high-pressure steam engine patented in 1769 and accelerated the process of the Industrial Revolution; Also if there was no objective observation, Faraday could never discover electromagneic induction(1983) and propos the field theory later developed by Maxwell and Einstein.

To conclude, it is unnecessary for us to consider that objective observation and people’s subjective expectations or desires as a dilemma. While we go on some observations, we should combine objective laws as well as our helpful expectations.

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ISSUE157 - "There is no such thing as purely objective observation. All observation is subjective; it is always guided by the observer's expectations or desires."



On the issue that there is no such thing as purely objective observation, it makes sense that people when making some decisions or judging some things before observation are strongly impacted by the personal experience, knowledge, beliefs and so on. According to some
（some在这里表示什么意思？不用更好吧？）history or facts in the society, however, isn't all observation more or less subjective? Is there anything such as purely objective observation?

设问的开头挺好的。但是为什么设问之后你不指出自己的观点呢？应该在首段明确你对该主题的主要看法更好吧？

It is critical and difficult to define "objective", while in this issue we'll regard objective observation as the one which is not guided by the observer's expectations or desires. So in some circumference, unconscious observation can also be called objective observation such as some inspiring from a glance in phenomena.

这一段是对你要展开的objective observation做出限定的定义，这样方便你后文的展开，挺好的，但是你应该加一些转接词之类说明清楚，和后文合为一体，要不你写了一段objective的定义，然后突然下一段就是to begin with感觉不是那么的浑然一体。

To begin with, the statement actually insofar has some merits for contending that no such observation exists in the form of pure objective description. As a matter of fact, there is no absolute criterion for evaluating objectivity since every conclusion is drawn by ourselves, human beings. No matter how "objective" it is claimed, there always lies(我觉得用exists更好) some subjective elements in his or her emotion. For example, when appreciating certain masterpiece such as “the Smile of Mona Lisa”, some people think the beauty lie in his charming eyes, while others argue that Mona Lisa’ expression attracted most. Next, even such absolute criterion of objectivity is decided, under different circumstances-varied times, places, aims（三个名词并列，最后一个还是加上and比较好）-or alike, what expected objective observation always brings one error or two. For instance, many observers over the world have claimed that they saw UFO or other surreptitious sights at least once, however, the majority of these observations turned out to be fictive because those observers failed to provide enough evidence for proving what they said.
我总觉得，appreciate masterpiece并不等同于observation，因为appreciation的过程是一个主观情绪占据主导地位的鉴赏过程，和科学意义上和日常生活意义上的observations是完全不同的两回事。所以，你在这举了appreciate “the Smile of Mona Lisa”这个例子，我觉得不是好。

Furthermore, adding all blames to the observer's expectations or desires is unfairly unfair(be后面应该用的是形容词吧？) for interpretating the cause and accordingly obeys the essence of objectivity. First, it is crucial to distinguish observation process and observation result before formulating the final generaion. Common scene tells us, observation process and observation result are completely two different matters. The former as a searching effort for the solution to some specific problems is always taken out objectively ,while the latter including uncertain factors such as the interpretating
(是解释这个单词么？应该是interpreting) means of the reporter often looks subjective. Secondly, with the development of science and technology, observation are
（is）
not necessarily carried out by human beings since there are many "auto-observers" can handle the job as well. A fitting example of which（this） is electrical-camera used in “one hundred dash”. The auto-probe sends back the data it observed then computers had the data analyzed and displayed the result precisely almost at the same time. How can you deny this process is indeed an objective observation excluded with（excluding） human’s desire? Thirdly, science is the objective rules of the nature and its progresses all are achieved through people’s hard work. If all observations are not objective, it will not conduce to the development of science and our society as a result cannot see any real progress.

However, emphasizing objective observation does not mean it absolutely refuse observers’ expectations or desires to participate in the observation activity. Consider, if we do not abide by this law, what the world will eventually like? -----Certainly it will turn out to be a turbid, chaotic world, no truth, no reality. Webster gives us a good definition about objective, which means expressing or dealing with facts or conditions as perceived without distortion by personal feelings, prejudices, or interpretations. Yes, if Watt did not observe the boiling tea-pot objectively, he could not made fundamental improvements in the steam engine which resulted in the modern, high-pressure steam engine patented in 1769 and accelerated the process of the Industrial Revolution; Also if there was no objective observation, Faraday could never discover electromagneic （electromagnetic）induction(1983) and propos the field theory later developed by Maxwell and Einstein.

你举的两个例子都是说明了objective observation的存在，没有说明他们的objective observation如何加入了主观的因素，而这些主观因素如何help objective observation，最后这些observations还是客观的，还是获得成功的。

To conclude, it is unnecessary for us to consider that objective observation and people’s subjective expectations or desires as a dilemma. While we go on some observations, we should combine objective laws as well as our helpful expectations.
总体看来，文章的语法错误不多，句子还是比较通顺的。但是感觉文章的行文上不是那么的连贯和缜密，你的论据和各段的展开不是那么的贴合你的中心论点。