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[a习作temp] Argument56【Triple Week】第3次练习by newletter2002 [复制链接]

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In this argument, the arguer concludes that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create ancient life-size clay statues.To support this conclusion, the speaker points out that the conclusion mentioned upside can explain why Kalinese miniature statues were abustract and can also interpret why few ancient Kaliness sculpting tools have been found. At first glance, the argument might be somehow reasonable, but close scrutiny reveals that is contains several might unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.



In the first place, the argument claims that we can conclude that ancient Kalinese artists use molds to create statues due to the discovery of molds of hunman heads and hands, and automatically assumes that these artists did not use sculpting tools and techniques. However, this might not be the case. The arguer obviously overlooks other possible explanation for this phenomennon. For example, perhaps ancient artists used both molds and sculpting tools and techniques, or perhaps they used other similar techniques to finish their work. Without ruling out such possibilities, I cannot accept the conclusion.



Second, even assuming that the ancient artist used molds of actual bodies to create ancient, the speaker unfairly indicates a causal relation between the changeable style of miniature statues and the only use of molds for life-size sculptures. There could be many other factors, such as different miniature states were created by different artists,different kinds of statues were used in different way and the artists wanted to reflect their inward world by miniature statues.Without accounting for all other explanations, the arguer cannot reasonably conclude that the abstract and different style of miniature statues is responsible for the only use of molds for life-size sculptures.



Third, even I concede that the only use of molds for life-size statues is attributable to the changeable style of miniature statues, the arguer fails to consider the result of few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found.


For instance, most of sculpting tools got destroyed natural and man-made


calamities or there were seldom sculpting tools at that time since maybe its expensive price.



Finally, the speaker assumes that the life-size sculptures would decrease in value and the miniatures would increase in value because of the different style and processing technic. Actually the arguer fails to consider other possible cause.Maybe there were more miniatures than life-size statues or the life-size statues were much more significant, perhaps they stood for monarch while miniatures represent nothing.



In sum up, the arguer's conclusion about the miniatures and life-size sculptures is not well supported as it stands. To bolster it, the author must provide more evidence, such as there were really many sculpting tools before and some annals shows the manufacturing process of statues.Without thinking about these facts, we cannot accept the argue's verdict.

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发表于 2009-7-17 14:21:47 |显示全部楼层
In this argument, the arguer concludes that the ancient Kalinese artists used molds of actual bodies, not sculpting tools and techniques, to create ancient life-size clay statues.To support this conclusion, the speaker points out that the conclusion mentioned upside can explain why Kalinese miniature statues were abustract and can also interpret why few ancient Kaliness sculpting tools have been found. At first glance, the argument might be somehow reasonable, but close scrutiny reveals that is contains several might unconvincing assumptions and is therefore unpersuasive.(Argument的结论实际上应该是,life-size clay statues应该降价,而miniatures应该升值,这个没有点明!)

In the first place, the argument claims that we can conclude that ancient Kalinese artists use molds to create statues due to the discovery of molds of hunman heads and hands, and automatically assumes that these artists did not use sculpting tools and techniques. However, this might not be the case. The arguer obviously overlooks other possible explanation for this phenomennon. For example, perhaps ancient artists used both molds and sculpting tools and techniques, or perhaps they used other similar techniques to finish their work. Without ruling out such possibilities, I cannot accept the conclusion.(恩,不错)

Second, even assuming that the ancient artist used molds of actual bodies to create ancient, the speaker unfairly indicates a causal relation between the changeable style of miniature statues and the only use of molds for life-size sculptures. There could be many other factors, such as different miniature states were created by different artists,different kinds of statues were used in different way and the artists wanted to reflect their inward world by miniature statues.Without accounting for all other explanations, the arguer cannot reasonably conclude that the abstract and different style of miniature statues is responsible for the only use of molds for life-size sculptures.(恩,不错)

Third, even I concede that the only use of molds for life-size statues is attributable to the changeable style of miniature statues, the arguer fails to consider the result of few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found.(这句写的有些问题)For instance, most of sculpting tools got destroyed natural and man-made calamities or there were seldom sculpting tools at that time since maybe its expensive price.

Finally, the speaker assumes that the life-size sculptures would decrease in value and the miniatures would increase in value because of the different style and processing technic. Actually the arguer fails to consider other possible cause.Maybe there were more miniatures than life-size statues or the life-size statues were much more significant, perhaps they stood for monarch while miniatures represent nothing.

In sum up, the arguer's conclusion about the miniatures and life-size sculptures is not well supported as it stands. To bolster it, the author must provide more evidence, such as there were really many sculpting tools before and some annals shows the manufacturing process of statues.Without thinking about these facts, we cannot accept the argue's verdict.

写的不错。只是有些平淡,每个点都是以列举他因来反驳,可以尝试使用其他方法来写。

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嗯  谢谢点评

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