Issue 50 零散板油求互拍～ 有拍必回～

nohevenUID: 2447539

50."In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, allfaculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses theyteach."

outside the academicworld in professions relevant to the courses是OK的,但需注意程度:

1. the quality ofinstruction 意味着什么? -----人文教养,专业素质,求知能力等

Eg. Martin L. King的话

2. to improve thequality of instruction, 就意味着要从以上几点出发:

1)让faculty spend time working outside the academic world in professionsrelevant to the courses they teach 可能可以提高他们对于专业素质的教学水平,以及和市场接轨的能力,但不是全部;

Eg. 医学院的附属医院(+);
建筑师教员忙于业务疏于上课(-)；

2) 人文教养,和求知能力等,需要长期的积累和启发,而教员过多的参与市场,可能会带来急功近利的反作用

3.这样的措施更多的是从就业出发考虑的,但大学教育应该更注重本质:对人的塑造.唯有如此，才能促进整个社会的发展与进步。

Words:580

As an individual in this post industry or co called informationage, one receives large amount of instruction through his whole life. Definitely,instruction shows us how to deal with a lot things. And at this informationtimes, one can get them from newspapers to television program, from parents'talking to classroom study, from internet to magazines. It seems that a collegeis not the only choice to get education. However, people still resist thatcollege and university play an invisible part through one's whole lifeeducation. So, what does education, as a kind of instruction at the college anduniversity level, aim to?

As Martin L. King used to said," education must enable aman to become more efficient, to achieve with increasing facility thelegitimate goals of his life." In other words, that is to say, educationshould give people the quality to achieve it. The quality, including humanity,professional skills, the capability to pursue knowledge, good and love, and soon, works to shape a complete human being. It is the real goal of collegeeducation.

To achieve this goal, college and university should providevariety kinds of course, from computer science to history, from art to businessto enlighten its students; and what is more important is, to create a tolerantand equal environment for communication and thinking. Because the collegecampus maybe is the nearest part to Wonderland in this busy adult world. Ok,now return to the real world. In the campus, faculty are tutors as well asemployees to school, so they should satisfy needs from both of the school,which is depends on the funding from society, and the
academic circle，which calls for more research than labor force. In common sense,"practice makes perfect", so school requires its faculty to spendtime working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the coursesthey teach in order to improve the connection between professional instructionand the requirement of labor force. Actually, it works efficiently in somecertain situation. For instance, medical teachers works in hospital attached tocollege. They could get the first hand information of medical cases and traintheir students how to deal with it. It benefits both of the education asresearch and the training of professional skills. In another case, in somearchitecture college, the professors who are star architects cannot easily tobe seen because of their busy work. To much relevant affairs take the time forteaching, not mention the quality of instruction. To sum up, the relevantaffairs outside the campus may enhance the professional instruction (which isjust a part of college education), but they should be restrained in a properlevel.

In the aspect of other vital parts of college education, suchas humanity, the capability to pursue knowledge, good and love, and so on,there should be accumulation through a long time roll out the influence of utility.In this sense, too much touching the labor force market will not help, or evenmislead. And not the entire faculty is suitable to professional instructors;some of them may more suitable for pure academic research and teaching. Forfurther good and better access, more alternative choices should be supply.

Education is more about to shape a person spirit rather thansome kinds of skills. More attention should be paid to the foundation of it:the perusing of humanity and truths. Only in this way, will the whole societydevelops and grows.

灵感女孩UID: 2224424

先谢谢你拍我~ 有个问题也在我的帖子中想探讨一下 你要是有空麻烦再看看啊~

今天太晚了 明天一定给你回这篇~

灵感女孩UID: 2224424

As an individual in this post industry or co called informationage, one receives large amount of instruction through his whole life. Definitely,instruction shows us how to deal with a lot things. And at this informationtimes, one can get them (them指代什么不明确) from newspapers to television program, from parents'talking (建议parental edification，尽量避免复数s'形式) to classroom study, from internet to magazines. It seems that a collegeis not the only choice to get education. However, people still resist thatcollege and university play an invisible part through one's whole lifeeducation. So, what does education, as a kind of instruction at the college anduniversity level, aim to?

As Martin L. King used to (used to 改成 once )said," education must enable aman to become more efficient, to achieve with increasing facility thelegitimate goals of his life." In other words, that is to say, educationshould give people the quality to achieve it. The quality, including humanity,professional skills, the capability to pursue knowledge, good and love, and soon, works to shape a complete human being. It is the real goal of collegeeducation.

To achieve this goal, college and university should providevariety kinds of course, from computer science to history, from art to businessto enlighten its students; and what is more important is, to create a tolerantand equal environment for communication and thinking. Because the collegecampus maybe is (might be) the nearest part to Wonderland in this busy adult world. Ok,now return to the real world. In the (On) campus, faculty are tutors as well asemployees to school, so they should satisfy needs from both of the school,which is depends (depend是动词) on the funding from society, and the
academic circle，which calls for more research than labor force.In common sense,"practice makes perfect", so school requires its faculty to spendtime working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the coursesthey teach in order to improve the connection between professional instructionand the requirement of labor force. Actually, it works efficiently in somecertain situation. For instance, medical teachers works in hospital attached tocollege. They could get the first hand information of medical cases and traintheir students how to deal with it (them). It benefits both of the education asresearch and the training of professional skills. In another case, in somearchitecture college, the professors who are star architects cannot easily tobe seen because of their busy work. To much relevant affairs take the time forteaching, not mention the quality of instruction. To sum up, the relevantaffairs outside the campus may enhance the professional instruction (which isjust a part of college education), but they should be restrained in a properlevel. (最好段首点明全段中心，感觉这段前面若干语句和这段主题无关。说学校要提供各种各样的课程，教育的宗旨，以及大学可能是距离wonderland最近的地方是为了说明什么？这段论述的是work outside academics的好处和过渡的坏处，之后后面两个例子相关。我觉得in common sense值钱的部分都可以省略。还有一点，好处和坏处最好分两段论述，更具体些)

In the aspect of other vital parts of college education, suchas humanity, the capability to pursue knowledge, good and love, and so on,there should be accumulation through a long time roll out the influence of utility.In this sense, too much touching the labor force market will not help, or evenmislead(感觉mislead是及物动词，要没说be misleading). And not the entire faculty is suitable to professional instructors;some of them may more suitable for pure academic research and teaching. Forfurther good and better access, more alternative choices should be supply. (最好有例子来证明)

Education is more about to shape a person spirit rather thansome kinds of skills. More attention should be paid to the foundation of it:the perusing of humanity and truths. Only in this way, will the whole societydevelops and grows. (最后结论也感觉略显唐突)

作者的语言还要在注意呀~我觉得不少地方都读不太通~ 文章整体立意不错 但结构感觉有些混乱