8.11 2009 作文小组 第一次作业

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Monsan 8.11 2009 作文小组 作业
Agree or disagree with the following statement: it is more important to award students for effort (trying or hard working) than for achievement (good grades);

Teachers and parents are tending to award students for their achievements rather than their efforts, though many students feel unfair about this criterion. As far as I am concerned, I am supportive of the latter opinion that people should give more credits for hard working.

It is understood that achievements are the best awards in any case. Just consider what opportunities standing behind these achievements. In China, scores in the College Entry Examination is the only criterion for college admission. Students with an amazing score will have great chances to attend famous colleges. And Job opportunities only favor graduates with achievements in its research field. In this sense, awards sound like less useful when compared with the huge benefits brought about by the achievement itself. And if it is less useful, why should we judge awards according to it. Maybe awarding students for efforts is just optimal. At least our sympathy requires us to do so for those who work hard but achieve nothing.

Also, award students for achievements can cause potential problems. On the one hand, students getting too much awards are more likely to become self-conceited. Students at this stage are not willing to listen to their peers, sometimes even their teachers` opinions are not highly valued; and they are less likely to ask question though they only have little understanding about it; It seems that asking questions will only make them less excellent. It is no doubt that they will make little progress but get behind in the end. On the other hand, many assignments are group work at school. Awarding for achievements may give students chances for "free ride". Group member who has no contributions to the achievement but still get awards is unfair to other members and other groups. In the long run, they will learn nothing from school when they graduate and cause tense relationships between team members.

Sometimes awarding students for efforts will gain an amazing result. First, the chances for "free ride" are greatly reduced, because everyone`s effort in the group will be evaluated. Generally, people who make achievements are more likely to make an effort; that means we are not doing any damage to the rights of students who make an achievement by giving rewards for efforts. What`s else, it will spur students without achievements to keep on moving. People are of great chance to feel depressed when they achieve nothing after hard working; and they might be in great doubt of their abilities in seriously conditions. But when awards come because of hard working, they will probably rethink about themselves. Correct wrong study method; Try become efficient in time management. And ask for advices to change the status-quo. This power of changing comes from the awards, because people want to live up to expectations from others who award them and they want to prove people the award is a worthwhile. By doing this, poorly-graded students could eventually turn into good-graded students.

After considering the demerits of awarding students for achievement and merits of awarding students for effort, I think it is a great idea to carry out the latter method.

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Teachers and parents are tending to award students for their achievements rather than their efforts, though many students feel unfair about this criterion. As far as I am concerned, I am supportive of the latter opinion that people should give more credits for hard working.

It is understood that achievements are the best awards in any case. Just consider what opportunities standing(stand，宾语从句) behind these achievements. In China, scores in the College Entry Examination is the only criterion for college admission. Students with an amazing score will have great chances to attend famous colleges. And Job opportunities only favor graduates with achievements in its research field. In this sense, awards sound like less useful when compared with the huge benefits brought about by the achievement itself. And if it is less useful, why should we judge awards according to it. Maybe awarding students for efforts is just optimal. At least our sympathy requires us to do so for those who work hard but achieve nothing.

因为奖励本身没有grades或者achievement 有用，所以就不应该奖励了，这个似乎不是很有说服力啊。而且你没有说明为什么奖励没用。因为奖励的东西是不同的，比如说好成绩发了几个作业本当然没什么价值了。不过因为成绩好就去了好学校，发奖学金(这个在美国很重要)，这个就另当别论了。所以与其把打断篇幅证明中国学生高考能去好学校，不如着重说下你所理解的award的含义更好些

Also, award(awarding) students for achievements can cause potential problems. On the one hand, students getting too much awards are more likely to become self-conceited. Students at this stage are not willing to listen to their peers, sometimes even their teachers` opinions are not highly valued; and they are less likely to ask question though they only have little understanding about it; It seems that asking questions will only make them less excellent. It is no doubt that they will make little progress but get behind in the end. On the other hand, many assignments are group work at school. Awarding for achievements may give students chances for "free ride". Group member who has no contributions to the achievement but still get awards is unfair to other members and other groups. In the long run, they will learn nothing from school when they graduate and cause tense relationships between team members.

Sometimes awarding students for efforts will gain an amazing result. First, the chances for "free ride" are greatly reduced, because everyone`s effort in the group will be evaluated. Generally, people who make achievements are more likely to make an effort; that means we are not doing any damage to the rights of students who make an achievement by giving rewards for efforts. What`s else, it will spur students without achievements to keep on moving. People are of great chance to feel depressed when they achieve nothing after hard working; and they might be in great doubt of their abilities in seriously conditions. But when awards come because of hard working, they will probably rethink about themselves. Correct wrong study method; Try become efficient in time management. And ask for advices to change the status-quo. This power of changing comes from the awards, because people want to live up to expectations from others who award them and they want to prove people the award is a worthwhile. By doing this, poorly-graded students could eventually turn into good-graded students.

After considering the demerits of awarding students for achievement and merits of awarding students for effort, I think it is a great idea to carry out the latter method.

你文字驾驭能力很强，证明也很有力度，呵呵～很喜欢三段论，只是由于考试时间太段了，不知道三段论证法能不能写完啊。

谢谢你对我作文的修改，的确我的分段很失败，句子也太长了，不如像你拆成小句子用分号隔开的好～

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关于第一段的评论很是感谢。我一直担心我的idea表达的不清楚，但看起来达到了效果。
呵呵， 感谢你的鼓励！

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8.11 2009 作文小组 第一次作业

Monsan 8.11 2009 作文小组 作业 ; n9 ~' r  ~8 M1 b' v. a# E Agree or disagree with the following statement: it is more important to award students for effort (trying or hard working) than for achievement (good grades); # k/ D2 F3 m- m' F0 e3 p Teachers and parents are tending to award students for their achievements rather than their efforts, though many students feel unfair about this criterion. As far as I am concerned, I am supportive of the latter opinion that people should give more credits for hard working. 5 X: u+ Q: {4 V9 y 7 {) Y# c2 ]: u9 l7 ^$ v$ K3 ? It is understood that achievements are the best awards in any case. Just consider what opportunities standing behind these achievements. In China, scores in the College Entry Examination is the only criterion for college admission. Students with an amazing score will have great chances to attend famous colleges. And Job opportunities only favor graduates with achievements in its research field. In this sense, awards sound like less useful when compared with the huge benefits brought about by the achievement itself. And if it is less useful, why should we judge awards according to it. Maybe awarding students for efforts is just optimal. At least our sympathy requires us to do so for those who work hard but achieve nothing.(你的第一段的观点是不是说，对于努力过而且取得成就的人，他们已经获得了足够的Awards,不需要我们再awards他们了，而对于努力了却失败的人恰恰需要我们的awards。不知道理解的对不对，有点绕啊~~呵呵，如果是这样的话，这段第一句还需再斟酌一下) % b# w: C. t Also, award students for achievements can cause potential problems（感觉这个观点不够完整，最好说award students for achievements can cause potential problems，so we choose to ……把你支持的立场也讲出来）. On the one hand, students getting too much awards are more likely to become self-conceited. Students at this stage are not willing to listen to their peers, sometimes even their teachers` opinions are not highly valued; and they are less likely to ask question though they only have little understanding about it; It seems that asking questions will only make them less excellent. It is no doubt that they will make little progress but get behind in the end. On the other hand, many assignments are group work at school. Awarding for achievements may give students chances for "free ride"（这个例子举得好，有说服力）. Group member who has no contributions to the achievement but still get awards is unfair to other members and other groups. In the long run, they will learn nothing from school when they graduate and cause tense relationships between team members. Sometimes awarding students for efforts will gain an amazing result. First, the chances for "free ride" are greatly reduced, because everyone`s effort in the group will be evaluated. Generally, people who make achievements are more likely to make an effort; that means we are not doing any damage to the rights of students who make an achievement by giving rewards for efforts. What`s else, it will spur students without achievements to keep on moving. People are of great chance to feel depressed when they achieve nothing after hard working; and they might be in great doubt of their abilities in seriously conditions. But when awards come because of hard working, they will probably rethink about themselves. Correct wrong study method; Try become efficient in time management. And ask for advices to change the status-quo. This power of changing comes from the awards, because people want to live up to expectations from others who award them and they want to prove people the award is a worthwhile. By doing this, poorly-graded students could eventually turn into good-graded （感觉这段有点杂，加点概括性的语言统领一下会比较好）.6 Z6 z. n9 v- x( G After considering the demerits of awarding students for achievement and merits of awarding students for effort, I think it is a great idea to carry out the latter method. 写的好长啊，呵呵。当然考场上如果也能写这么多就非常好了~~~

记得点评我的哦~~~谢谢啦~~