7.29 作文贴

flywindingUID：2547694

文章写得挺好，自愧不如啊，别忘了看我文章哈

flywindingUID：2547694

你写的太好了，都能当范文了，我得留着好好品品

flywindingUID：2547694

看这个吧 品了一遍 又看到点小错误

zyxr90UID：2679193

楼主可以直接去考了，不用练了

hove1111UID：2571450

8.12Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life

In the burgeoning era of information and technology, a vast majority people are competing for the same goal--a desirable life and a decent salary. To achieve remarkable success in life, most people hold the opinion that people should expose their strength and fulfillment in front of people, especially the influential people or your employers, to get the chance to be successful. The others think the opposite. I firmly support the former opinion; people should let others know their strength and abilities in order to get their potential opportunities and fume, to gain recommendation from the elites, and to build confidence.

The most important method towards success is to demonstrate you in order to get potential opportunities and fume for the further development. People can not know you are able to do a good job and accomplish a tough task if you hide yourself. We can hardly imagine that the successful football player Messy did not perform well in the football match that could earn the prize of the best football player, or J.k.Rowling did not promote her work in the television and in bookstores that Harry Porter could rank the top of the booklist. And even the Beatles did not hold the concert to share the music with audience, we could not know it did a gorgeous music band existed. All the people have a desire to make what their works meaningful, if they are not going to talk or even exhibit their accomplishments. The job lost the meaning itself, they could not earn money to make a living as well. Thus proper expression is almost an essential part for everyone who wants to succeed.

In addition, knowing and recognizing your abilities by influential people or your employers can give you important recommendation for your job hunting and leading you to success easily. It seems elites have a lager influence in a lot of things than others, if you are appreciated by influential people or your employers, leaving them a good impression. Maybe that experience would give you unexpected chances. One case in point involving my sister, Zoe, a normal student majored in French; she gave a fabulous lecture when the president of France visited her school. The president appreciated her fluency French and recommended her join a French university in Paris for further study. People can attain success by hard working; however, your smart presentation may help you achieve your goal more easily.

Furthermore, praises and complements from others can give you confidence. Confidence makes you trust yourself and spurs you do a better job next time. It is human nature to get confirmation form others. Detailed judgments from others can help people to revise their behaviors. If you put all strengths and accomplishments in front of people, they can give you an objective opinion of the merits and deficiency of your works, to help you avoid doing unnecessary jobs and going the wrong direction, which positively affect people's further developments.

In conclusion, the help of influential people or your employers who recognize your strengths and accomplishments is very crucial to people who want to get successful.

FannieHsuUID：2861996

改好了~

hove1111UID：2571450

8月14日
09.08.07NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them

The issue of whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenage children arouses much controversy among people with different perspective and background. Some hold opinion that the statement is legitimate because children are not mature and have not enough experiences to determine the optimal choice. However, in my opinion, no one should control other's life, including parents; people should be responsible for their own behaviors and determine their lives.

The most important reason for me to choose the position is children have their own ideas and thoughts. The fact that children are lack of experiences and not perfect in logical does not mean their parents have right to determine their decision without considering the children's intentions. it is helpful to allow children make decisions by themselves, perhaps they will make a lot of errors on the way, while this will teach the child to live with the consequence of a wrong decision and also to ponder future choices more carefully. Take my sister, Zoe, she picked another one that sounds more interesting initially, but she came to loathe immediately. This experience will be invaluable when the child grows up and has to find a real job.

In addition, sometimes parents will make the bad decisions for children that may hamper the children's development. In the era OF rapid social and technological changes leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, the good decision in parents' time would be out of data. For example, when parents help their children to choose major of university, parents based on their knowledge to suggest children involve in chemistry, however, the chemistry changes quite a lot these years, the graduates are not easy to find a decent job. Thus, parents' suggestions may not be appropriate in any occasion.

Furthermore, the job of parents is not to make decision for their children, but to help them to choose. Parents can engaging in dialogue and provide them with all the necessary information. Children have ability to judge and recognize the best option, parents should trust and respect their children can do that very well. Not only will they prevent their children from wrong decision, but the self-confidence gained from this experience will make children easier to decision in the future.

In conclusion, I posit firmly teenage should make decisions by themselves. Admittedly, parents are good advisers to help their children choose the best decision.

wendychuengUID：2811319

8月14日 修改by wendy
      Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.
      The issue of whether parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenage children arouses much controversy among people with different perspective and background. Some hold opinion that the statement is legitimate because children are not mature and have not enough experiences to determine the optimal choice. However, in my opinion, no one should control other's life, including parents; people should be responsible for their own behaviors and determine their lives.
      The most important reason for me to choose the position is children have their own ideas and thoughts. The fact that children are lack of experiences and not perfect in logical does not mean their parents have the right to determine their decision(future) without considering the children's intentions. it is helpful to allow children make decisions by themselves, perhaps they will make a lot of errors on the way, while this will teach (the) children to live with the consequence of a wrong decision and also to ponder future choices more carefully.这不是支持相反的观点了么，应该改一下侧重点，或者说就算犯了错误，个人也应该为自己的选择付出代价 Take my sister, Zoe,for example, she picked another one that sounds more interesting initially, but she came to loathe immediately. 不明白你这个了例子说明了什么This experience will be invaluable when the child grows up and has to find a real job。
   In addition, sometimes parents will make the bad decisions for children that may hamper the children's development. In the era OF rapid social and technological changes leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, the good decision in parents' time would be out of data.（i  don't think it's a good idea） For example, when parents help their children to choose major of university, parents based on their knowledge to suggest children involve in chemistry, however, the chemistry changes quite a lot these years, the graduates are not easy to find a decent job. Thus, parents' suggestions may not be appropriate in any occasion. Furthermore, the job of parents is not to make decision for their children, but to help them to choose. Parents can engaging in dialogue and provide them with all the necessary information. Children have ability to judge and recognize the best option, parents should trust and respect their children can do that very well. Not only will they prevent their children from wrong decision, but the self-confidence gained from this experience will make children easier to decision in the future.
     In conclusion, I posit firmly teenage should make decisions by themselves. Admittedly, parents are good advisers to help their children choose the best decision.

一点建议：如果能选择更好的例子就好了，再就是加强词汇和句式的运用。结尾还不够完善。

白菜学英语UID：2731720

改好啦~

hove1111UID：2571450

When it comes to television and telephone, an issue that has been discussed for several years emerges in my mind: whether the telephone has had a greater influence on people’s lives than the television has. Some hold the opinion that telephone plays a more significant role than television does. While others claim that the merits of television should not be minimal. In my opinion, however, both are essential to change and improve our lives.

It can not be denied that the telephone has many convenient uses, especially in the field of communication. Telephone is increasingly mobilized; it eases the communication within people. Our connections are no longer controlled by the place and time. Making a telephone call allows people to be in contact with their families or friends even in remote places. However, the television is just located in the dining room of the house. When we feel happy or sad, the television could not talk with us, and even if not sitting in front of television, we could not enjoy television programs. However people spend quite a lot of time outside. Occasionally we want to watch news and favorite movies on the subway, in the office, or in a long waiting line, the telephone can be utilized in every situation above to meet our needs. The television can be replaced by the computer, or DVD player, but we can not imagine living in a world without the telephone, or we can say telephone becomes a necessity almost for everyone. In addition, the telephone plays an important role in some emergencies. For example, in some kidnapping cases, people were ultimately saved by having the chance to call the police, which allowed the police to locate them by receiving signals from the telephone. So think about those conveniences that telephone brings, it seems telephone is better than television sometimes.

Nonetheless, in other occasions, televisions are very crucial to some people. For the elders, they are alone at home; their daughters and sons are working far away from them, the televisions, relieving their loneliness and tedious, are the closest friends in daily lives. And watching television is their main form of recreation. Maybe they have telephones, but the benefits from telephones can not be compared to the happiness and warmness gained from televisions. Moreover, for a lot of adults, they are exhausted when arriving at home. The most relaxing recreation is sitting in the sofa and watching soap operas and programs like 24 hours, Moonlighting, and Gossip Girl. The diverse television programs release the pressure and fatigue from their jobs. People do not need to think too much or to talk with television, just listening and watching can relax the whole body and mind. Furthermore, by watching television, people can gain a large amount of information outside. In contrast, the telephone can not provide such convenience to people. On this level, I believe that television has had a much greater impact on people’s lives.

In conclusion, I treat the equal importance of the television and the telephone. They are both the implement to level the quality of our lives. We could not live without either one of them. Thus, It is too hard to distinguish which is more influential.

肖婷~UID：2740510

已经改好了，具体见附件~