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Movie isthe inter medium which expresses the hidden content or thought to the audience.Deep thinking and entertainment are the two continuums of the movie genres, theformer induces the删掉吧
people tocontemplate, the latter appeases the public. As to which one is preferable, Ithink highly of the former one（替换为serious movie）
because the serious movie（替换为it） can tell us right from wrong, alert thesecular to keep conscious and broaden our horizon.（首段表明立场的时候，清楚最为重要，所以做了一些替换。并且，我很少看见首段就把所有理由段都捎带提过的，这种做法我不能确定）
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To begin with, serious movies can tell us rightfrom wrong. These movies emphatically advocate the justice and castigate theevil so that they can help pass the ancestor’s lofty flag to his or heroffspring. Our generation has never suffered less than our forefathers, but wecan still touch the soul of Schindler’s list. The 6 million jury(jews,犹太人吧)were prosecuted in the holocaust. This catastrophe is well expressed by blackand white scene contrast （that？？）when a girl with a red flower come（came） into the camp, and then she is（was） shot, the corpse was carriedby the wagon and the red flower wasstill within her hands,（.） we can’t never tell whether this flower isred or the blood tints. (本句话的语法结构，我似乎没明白，改的只是代表我的一些想法，还望不吝赐教)Anyhow the justice exist forever, it istouching that the once greedy (似乎不太合理)merchant Schindler who had everbeen greedy are(were)willing to devote all his possession to save 2,000 jury. This movie got highestacclaim all over the world due to its honest depiction of the dark time andtelling us right from wrong.
（在讲述电影情节的时候是否应该使用过去式啊？）

Meanwhile, the serious movies can alert thesecular to keep conscious, and never to infringe the boundary of the humanity.Human beings should honor the environment and the otherspecies, and live harmoniously within the community. The Avatarreally makes us eye-opening, it（it指代什么呀，可以用被动时态Pandora’s Box was open） opens the Pandora’s Box and lead us totravel in an adventurous planet. While when the avarice rival the humanity toexploit the wealth, the earth set off machines to conquer the aborigines, thehistory repeats again when the colonist found the new world centuries ago, andkilled all the local people which were the last translator to the Mayacivilization. Fortunately, the Pandora’s creatures defeat the human to avoidplight again.


Last but not least, the serious movies can alsobroaden our horizon. These movies are exquisitely directed with systematicscope and encyclopedia content. The BBC documentary of planet earth can beranked into such movies. These movies impart the public the real living worldfrom the largest northern forest Taiga tundra to the most splendid volcanoeruption. People are stunned by such engaging pictures, some of them may neverrealize our planet so beautiful and miraculous until such movies come to us.1 \: U5 Z' ]. |# x$ Y*
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In sum, I totally agree that it is better toappreciate the meaningful movie than the entertainment movies. The good moviesare good friends and amiable teacher who can enlighten our wisdom,purify our soul, stimulate our imagination and impartthe knowledge.

作者的用词很厉害，但是，感觉作文模板不够抢眼。还有，如果理由段之间能够建立更加紧密的逻辑关系是最好了。
因为我本身水平有限，如有不妥之处，敬请原谅。

bearjeanUID：2825915

10-08作文（独立+综合）
楼主麻烦改下我的作文哦~~

bearjeanUID：2825915

10-09独立写作

generalidUID：2824377

2010年10月11日 周一
独立：
14 体育 旅游   Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Sports teach people lessons about life..08.12.05（预测题）


Sports are not only tools that help strengthen the physical and metal ability of the athletes, but also mirrors that reflect the soul of the players. Some people think sports can teach people lessons about the life, but some one think that the former saying is exaggerating, and the sports are only helpful to the health. In my opinion, the sports have already traversed the scope of the body exercise, they are the real teachers who impart the lesson, wisdom to us, because of below reasons.

To begin with, sports advocate the teamwork in the fields which is the essence of the modern society. We’ve been long away from the Rome arena where people appreciated the individual hero who could kill the rival on the play ground,  in contrast, teamwork has replaced the part of the egoism to the main stream of this world. This spirit was well indicated in the football world cup this year. The Spanish team has no super star who possesses the same fame as C. Ronado in Portugal or Messi in Argentina. The secret they won the battle was that, every kicker defensed positively, offensed aggressively and  watched attentively, every member could sacrifice his strongpoint if the team needed them to do so. Teamwork is the ultimate key to open the door of success.

In addition to the teamwork, sports also expose the flaw of the humanity to the public. Champion may mean everything for some players, wealth, fame, reputation and so on, so they would try all methods to reach the success, even the cordial which is always being forbidden. It was the extraordinary astonishing that the couple of Montgomery and Jones were accused of cordial abuse. They both were the Olympic gold medal winner of the 100 meter run, and Montgomery was also a world record holder and then became engaged together. They were invincible on the track ground, received flowers and acclaims all around the world just one minutes before the scandal, and then rapidly collapsed and fell to the hell of prison. Everyone should be honest to oneself, never to infringe the boundary of the morality.

Last but not least, sports always inspire the brave never give up, just keep at it. Sports not only challenge the physical ability, also mould the indomitable spirit., Lance Armstrong was diagnosed of a fatal testicle cancer when 22 years old, the chemotherapy almost torture this young man 50 year old. We are more likely to believe that he was going to end this sports career, and die soon because even his doctor confessed that less than 1 patient in 10 can survive from this disease. Guess what happened to this Texas cowboy, he defied the destiny, fight with himself and the fate. 10 years later, he had been the most powerful cyclist of tour of France, a legendary 7 times winner of such game.

In sum, sports are the common language among the human being, and they're playing a increasingly important part in our life, full of every aspects of the world.  We taste the happiness of success, also sorrow of lose; we experience the proud of victory, and shame of cheat; we participate in the sports, and sports tells lesson to us.

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改晚了~~

jessamine_ysqUID：2767264

10.11修改by 西子霓裳飞
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Sports are not only tools that help strengthen the physical and metal ability of the athletes, but also mirrors that reflect the soul of the players. Some people think sports can teach people lessons about the life, but some one(one省略) think that the former saying is exaggerating, and the sports are only helpful to the health. In my opinion, the sports have already traversed the scope of the body exercise, and they are the real teachers who impart the lesson, wisdom to us, because of the below reasons., w  U$ ?1 X4 `8 ?7 t
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To begin with, sports advocate the teamwork in the fields which is the essence of the modern society. We’ve been long away from the Rome arena where people appreciated the individual hero who could kill the rival on the play ground;  in contrast, teamwork has replaced the part of the egoism to the main stream of this world. This spirit was well indicated in the football world cup this year. The Spanish team has no super star who possesses the same fame as C. Ronado in Portugal or Messi in Argentina. The secret they won the battle was that, every kicker defended  positively, offended aggressively and  watched attentively, every member could sacrifice his strongpoint if the team needed them to do so. Teamwork is the ultimate key to open the door of success.5 r% E5 i( Y! n' ~1 Z

8 Y' S+ M) d6 }  G; tIn addition to the teamwork, sports also expose the flaw of the humanity to the public. Champion may mean everything for some players, wealth, fame, reputation and so on, so they would try all methods to reach the success, even the cordial which is always being forbidden. It was the extraordinary astonishing that the couple of Montgomery and Jones were accused of cordial abuse. They both were the Olympic gold medal winner of the 100 meter run, and Montgomery was also a world record holder and then became engaged together. They were invincible on the track ground, received flowers and acclaims all around the world just one minutes before the scandal, and then rapidly collapsed and fell to the hell of prison. Everyone should be honest to oneself, never to infringe the boundary of the morality.$ J3 K$ f) ^' z" k% {* D

# I# E1 Y# L0 p' m) fLast but not least, sports always inspire the brave never give up, just keep at it. Sports not only challenge the physical ability, also mould the indomitable spirit., Lance Armstrong was diagnosed of a fatal testicle cancer when 22 years old, the chemotherapy almost torture this young man 50 year old. We are more likely to believe that he was going to end this sports career, and die soon because even his doctor confessed that less than 1 patient in 10 can survive from this disease. Guess what happened to this Texas cowboy, he defied the destiny, fight with himself and the fate. 10 years later, he had been the most powerful cyclist of tour of France, a legendary 7 times winner of such game.0 v. E$ B1 K9 \2 @+ ?$ W5 _

, w7 K, y2 Y' DIn sum, sports are the common language among the human being, and they're playing a increasingly important part in our life, full of every aspects of the world.  We taste the happiness of success, also sorrow of lose; we experience the proud of victory, and shame of cheat; we participate in the sports, and sports tells lesson to us.

很不错~~~

gamyUID：2748678

学习了你的作文
用词和例子强大的一米，还有排比句，第一次见人用这么好的排比句！
受教～谢谢！~

fengyanhongUID：2941762

谢谢帮我改作文~意见很有价值，希望以后路过常来指点