谢了你的修改,关于你说的英语把重要的内容先表达出来,我觉得是对的。从句里面的意思一般都是修饰限定,主句才是主要逻辑和主要内容。你把many things which are more important than teaching people how to keep health should be accomplished by local government。 改成many things are more important to be accomplished than to teach people how to keep…..,去掉了从句,句子结构简化了,而且把主要想表达的意思放在主句里表达了。
In common people would not browse the webpage of government if they want to have a good nutrition.
这句话是想说,政府网站上有很多别的事情,没有关于营养和健康的,所以人们都不去政府网站上搜集相关信息。或许可以改成
In common, people would not browse the webpage of government if they want to learn some news about good nutrition.
这个意思就是你写的是两句独立的话,但是中间却直接用逗号,这是不对的。一种选择是都用句号,一种选择是中间加连接词,比如so, but, 一类很简单的词都可以,但一定要有。
比如今天的作文中“I mean, each one are eager for A, there would be a fierce competition between you and your competitors.” "each one are eager for A"和“there would be...”就是独立的句子,不能只有一个逗号,而要加连接词so等等。
网址什么我说不上来,你注意一下写完看看是否有这种情况就好。