更新一下,ETS 绝对官方说的,作文错误,我就截取其中的句子部分。
too many passive sentences.
too many long sentences
too many short sentences
ton many sentences beginning with coordinating conjunctions
段落部分
Does each of your main ideas begin with a topic sentence.由此可见第一句话必须写啥
use your topic sentence to prepare the reader for understanding what is written in the essay.
use topic sentences to connect two paragraphs or two main ideas.