感觉这篇写的不好（issue112），请大家指出！
112"Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."I agree with the speaker on the assertion that educational systems aiming at the emphasis on both the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking and the ability for exploring students' own emotions will bring more benefit to the students. Therefore, an organic combined cultivation of these two faculties will be required in the educational systems for the purpose of educating all-round students.
Reasoning and logical thinking ability plays a paramount role in the students' latter professions and future development, thus school education should offer some courses and trainings or other means to cultivate students this skill. Rational and logical thinking can help students think deeply concerning themselves, others and the exterior world, which really conduces to their future development and improvement by overcoming their own deficiencies and exerting their advantages, by actively communicating with others and assimilating others’ merits, and by fully employing the natural sources. Unfortunately, today's educational systems put less emphasis on students' thinking skills. Whether you believe or not, today's teachers always tend to stuff rigid and monotonic facts, disciplines, and formulae into students' mind. This is why the educational system often is called as an isolated ivory tower. No one, no matter parents or teachers, would like to see their children become the passive receptacle but rather the active reagent in their study. Moreover, an inspection of the present-day occupational fields will also well justify the necessity and reasonability of the reasoning and logical thinking education. Those only possess professional knowledge without any logical and reasoning capacities are unwelcome in the job market for the reason that they have difficulties to analyze the origins, natures, and the solving methods of some problems they confront. So it is more urgent to ask for school education to indoctrinate students' rational and logical thinking skills.
Does the reasoning logical thinking alone can automatically warrant informative and all-round students? Definitely, it does not. Only through the assistance of the emotional instruction, can the educational system complete its mission. The emotional education is of tantamount importance as compared with the thinking skills. Were students deprived of the capacity of controlling their emotions, they would confront the danger of psychological and mental disarrangement. What education needs to do, however, is to instruct students how to control their feelings and emotions. To encourage students to explore their emotions will require them carefully and seriously thinking over the following problems: What is my character? What should I do when confronting difficulties and dilemma? How can I best dispose of interpersonal relationships? Then it is also the education’s responsibility to take some ways to mold their personality and to adapt differing emotions in different situations, such as opening some classes about heroes and celebrities, training student’s field survival skills etc.. Thereafter, they will learn how to persist on their undertakings and how to tolerate others' flaws and so forth. Consequently, the emotional education can help students keep psychological and mental health, and help them become active, passionate, indomitable, and amendable ones.
Overall, from the above analysis we can go no far to draw a conclusion that only by way of best combination of thinking education and emotional one can student benefit most. The former equips students with the insightful and incisive perspectives to themselves, others and physical world, while the latter guarantees students' mental wholesomeness and prompts students' to achieve higher success.
feier看过来，我帮你看了一段issue112
112"Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."I agree with the speaker on the assertion that educational systems aiming at the emphasis on both the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking and the ability for exploring students' own emotions will bring more benefit to the students. Therefore, an organic combined cultivation of these two faculties will be required in the educational systems for the purpose of educating all-round students.（Balance ）
Reasoning and logical thinking ability plays a paramount role in the students' latter professions and future development, thus school education should offer some courses and trainings or other means to cultivate students this skill. Rational and logical thinking can help students think deeply concerning themselves, others and the exterior world, which really conduces to their future development and improvement by overcoming their own deficiencies and exerting their advantages, by actively communicating with others and assimilating others’ merits, and by fully employing the natural sources. （这里Rational and logical thinking已经促进了未来的发展，但这些发展又by…所改善，似乎两边强调结果摸不到重点） Unfortunately, today's educational systems put less emphasis on students' thinking skills. Whether you believe or not（这里改如你所见会不会好些呢）, today's teachers always tend to stuff rigid and monotonic facts, disciplines, and formulae into students' mind. This is why the educational system often is called as an isolated ivory tower. No one, no matter parents or teachers, would like to see their children become the passive receptacle but rather the active reagent in their study. （People, no matter parents or teachers, hope their children would be active in their study but be a ossified, passive receptacle.）Moreover, an inspection of the present-day occupational fields will also well justify the necessity and reasonability of the reasoning and logical thinking education. Those only possess professional knowledge without any logical and reasoning capacities are unwelcome in the job market for the reason that they have difficulties to analyze the origins, natures, and the solving methods of （solutions of ）some problems they confront. So it is more urgent to ask for school education to indoctrinate（cultivate可能适当些） students' rational and logical thinking skills.（rational and logical thinking skills的重要性)
你的文章没法回复啊，我只好回在这了，
还有我这只菜鸟改改，希望feier别介意 :D
不好意思，时间实在太晚了（太早了？*_*），我只先看一段，还有，如果我有讲错不要骂我啊…
feier你的issue112设置了Email通知，所以人家就没法reply了，修改稿在此
远距神疗I agree with the speaker on the assertion that educational systems aiming at the emphasis(emphasizing, aim at 有点多余了) on both the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking and the ability for exploring students' own emotions will bring more benefit to the students. Therefore, an organic combined cultivation（combine在这里不舒服，要改） of these two faculties will be required in the educational systems for the purpose of educating（*redundance*尽量不要重复，当然也不强求） all-round students.
Reasoning and logical thinking ability plays a paramount role in the students' latter professions and future development, thus school education should offer some courses and trainings or other means to *cultivate students this skill* （？）建议写成school should offer… in that…, 和后边联系更紧密. Rational and logical thinking can help students think deeply concerning themselves, others and the exterior world, which really conduces to their future development and improvement by overcoming their own deficiencies and exerting their advantages, by actively communicating with others and assimilating（？） others’ merits, and by fully employing the natural sources. Unfortunately, today's educational systems put less emphasis on students' thinking skills. Whether you believe or not, today's teachers always tend to stuff rigid and monotonic facts, disciplines, and formulae into students' mind. This is why the educational system often is called as an isolated ivory tower. No one, no matter parents or teachers, would like to see their children become the passive receptacle（好） but rather（？） the active reagent in their study. Moreover, an inspection of the present-day occupational fields will also well justify the necessity and reasonability（reasonableness） of the reasoning and logical thinking education. Those only possess professional knowledge without any logical and reasoning capacities are unwelcome in the job market for the reason that they have difficulties to（difficulty in doing） analyze the origins, natures, and the solving methods of some problems they confront. So it is more urgent to ask for school education to indoctrinate students' rational and logical thinking skills. 除了个别词句有待改进，总体好。
（加个yet however之类的）Does the reasoning logical thinking alone （can） automatically warrant informative and all-round students? Definitely（, it does） not. Only through the assistance of the emotional instruction, （为什么你和happyman都喜欢在这里加个comma?!!Only can 语气很强烈的倒装你们不觉得逗号很破坏气氛吗？）can the educational system complete its mission. The emotional education is of tantamount importance as compared with the thinking skills. Were students deprived of the capacity of controlling their emotions, they would confront the danger（the endanger themselves by还是with …） of psychological and mental disarrangement. What education needs to do, however, is to instruct students how to control their feelings and emotions. To encourage students to explore their emotions will require them carefully and seriously thinking over the following problems: What is my character? What should I do when confronting difficulties and dilemma? How can I best dispose of interpersonal relationships? （好）Then it is also the education’s responsibility to take some ways to mold their personality and to adapt differing emotions in different situations, such as opening some classes about heroes and celebrities, training student’s field survival skills etc..(好) Thereafter（是这么用的么？）, they will learn how to persist on their undertakings and how to tolerate others' flaws and so forth. Consequently, the emotional education can help students keep psychological and mental health, and help them become active, passionate, indomitable, and amendable ones.前后照应和段落中心再突出一些就更好了。
Overall, from the above analysis we can go no far to draw a conclusion that only by way of best combination of thinking（reasoning或rationale） education and emotional one can student benefit most. The former equips students with the insightful and incisive perspectives to themselves, others and physical world, while the latter guarantees students' mental wholesomeness and prompts students' to achieve higher success.
很精致的一篇文章。 第二段来啰…
Does the reasoning logical thinking alone can automatically warrant informative and all-round students? Definitely, it does not（不要it does了吧，强调语气短些）. Only through the assistance of the emotional instruction, can the educational system complete its mission. The emotional education is of tantamount importance as compared with the thinking skills. Were students deprived of the capacity of controlling their emotions, they would confront the danger of psychological and mental disarrangement. What education needs to do, however, is to instruct students how to control their feelings and emotions. To encourage students to explore their emotions will require them carefully and seriously thinking over the following problems: What is my character? What should I do when confronting difficulties and dilemma? How can I best dispose of interpersonal relationships? Then it is also the education’s responsibility to take some ways to mold their personality and to adapt differing emotions in different situations, such as opening some classes about heroes and celebrities, training student’s field survival skills etc..（such as 和前面的关系是？看不明白） Thereafter, they will learn how to persist on their undertakings and how to tolerate others' flaws and so forth. Consequently, the emotional education can help students keep psychological and mental health, and help them become active, passionate, indomitable, and amendable ones.（这段不错啊）
Overall, from the above analysis we can go no far to draw a conclusion that only by way of best combination of thinking education and emotional one can student benefit most. The former equips students with the insightful and incisive perspectives to themselves, others and physical world, while the latter guarantees students' mental wholesomeness and prompts students' to achieve higher success.
不错的文章啊 :)
唉…哪时小弟我才可以写的像你一样….555 试试，我没有设置什么啊？奇怪！？ screw 你太谦虚了！写的和批改的都那么好，还.....
谦虚大了就是骄傲哦，^_^
such as 是指前面的学校教育 some ways，太靠后了，造成了指代不明。 谢谢imong， 呵呵，我也不知道你们怎么回复不了？
only 倒装中间没有逗号，我记住了！习惯老是改不了。 是不是需要说一说education的本质和目的这样回更好的论证主题,毕竟你第3段说到了…………完成教育的任务。
有写词语重复的没有必要，象paramount,显然是可以换其他的啊
combination好象文章里并没有提到
第3段的论证有写乱了，好象没有什么头绪。是不是emotion enhacement好处太多了啊呵呵
总体还不错啊，语言挺好的 我对emotions的阐述是这样：如果我来写，我会指出人生并不仅仅在于知识（reasoning and logical thinking），而在于体验，包括对于欢乐、哀愁、幸福、痛苦的体验，也包括在进行逻辑思考时获得的对“智慧”的体验。除却体验的知识是可悲的，人生仿佛空有宝藏而不能亲眼看见，体验的缺席是巨大的憾事。
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