issue125 限时，但第三段来不及展开了，请多指教！
Issue125 "The past is no predictor of the future."After careful and objective analysis about the issue that whether the past can serve as a predictor of the future, I find my view principally consistent with the author's. In my opinion, the past fails to be the predictor of the future, however, studying and analyzing the history can be conducive to the current development of the human society. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.
In the first place, the history of human society serves as a road map that lead us to where we are now, we can benefit a lot from the experience of former people. We have inherited plenty of precious heritages from our ancestor, including the culture and technology. Some of these can still be applied to nowadays society and exert great effect on the development of the field they belong to. We need look no further than the Art of War by Suntz's lasting significance to see the truth of my view. Suntz has finished the Art of War for almost two thousand years; it is one of the most outstanding military works in China. Though it mainly deals with the war of the past, it was widely read by people not only in China but also all over the world, ranging from military officials to businessmen, for its ideas and strategies can still be applied in much of today's various field, such as the military and business field.
In the second place, although learning history cannot predict what will happen in the future, we can prevent some negative events from happening again after analyzing the reason of our previous failure or mistake. Mistake is inevitable in human society, it is not shameful to err, and however, what we should ensure is that we must not make the same mistake repeatedly. A glance at our history can bring us to a world full of mistakes which we ever made, fortunately, a profound study about their reasons can make you confident that the world can be better, for you will be able to guarantee that such terrible mistakes will not reappear. For example, people have experienced two world wars, which brings the whole world into the swamp of suffering. However when we retrospect the reason of such stupid blunders, we impute it to the ambition of a handful of politician and the insufficiency of the communication and negotiation between nations. So we have learned from the mistake which each of us cannot afford again that we should seek for a more peace and effective way to solve the conflict between countries for the good of all.
In the final analysis, however, there are indeed something which just emerged we have no counterpart in the past and then have no related material as reference. I think the environment pollution can serve as a good example.
To sum up, I agree with the author with no reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that though the past is no predictor of the future, we can resort to our history to consult the experience of success and reason of the failure. Issue125 "The past is no predictor of the future."
After careful and objective analysis about the issue that whether the past can serve as a predictor of the future, I find my view principally consistent with the author's. In my opinion, the past fails to be the predictor of the future, however, studying and analyzing the history can be conducive to the current development of the human society. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.这一段读的爽，很流畅
In the first place, the history of human society serves as a road map that lead应为leads us to where we are now, 少一个连词we can benefit a lot from the experience of former people. We have inherited plenty of precious heritages from our ancestor, including the culture and technology. Some of these can still be applied to nowadays society and exert great effect on the development of the field they belong to. We need look no further than the Art of War by Suntz's lasting significance to see the truth of my view. Suntz has finished the Art of War for almost two thousand years; it is one of the most outstanding military works in China. Though it mainly deals with the war of the past, it was widely read by people not only in China but also all over the world, ranging from military officials to businessmen, for its ideas and strategies can still be applied in much of today's various field, such as the military and business field此句后半句稍显罗嗦.
In the second place, although learning history cannot predict what will happen in the future, we can prevent some negative events from happening again after analyzing the reason of our previous failure or mistake. Mistake is inevitable in human society, it is not shameful to err, and however, what we should ensure is that we must not make the same mistake repeatedly此句这么说好不好：Mistakes are inevitable in human society,however,it is not shameful to err,and what we should ensure is that we ..... A glance at our history can bring us to a world full of mistakes which we ever made, fortunately, a profound study about their reasons can make you confident that the world can be better, for you will be able to guarantee that such terrible mistakes will not reappear. For example, people have experienced two world wars, which brings the whole world into the swamp of suffering. However when we retrospect the reason of such stupid blunders, we impute it to the ambition of a handful of politician and the insufficiency of the communication and negotiation between nations. So we have learned from the mistake which each of us cannot afford again that we should seek for a more peace应该用形容词 and effective way to solve the conflict between countries for the good of all.
In the final analysis, however, there are indeed something which just emerged we have no counterpart in the past 我认为此句有问题，如果把we have换成with更好，个人观点and then have no related material as reference. I think the environment pollution can serve as a good example.
To sum up, I agree with the author with no reservation是没有保留吗？我觉得作者在题目的观点基础上有了进一步的合理的扩展，因此这一句我觉得太绝对了. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that though the past is no predictor of the future, we can resort to our history to consult the experience of success and reason of the failure.
本文行文流畅，而且举出了很有说明力的例子，很棒
思路也十分清晰，而且思路在第一段就都展现给读者了，后面依次展开，很有说服力。
可惜第三段没有展开，可能时间不够用了，但已经写的很好了！建议楼主在写作时注意分配一下时间，兼顾一下各段：） dezhi多谢你的宝贵意见和鼓励，说得很有道理，呵呵，我是说你的意见。
顺便问一句，你一般都什么时候发文章上来，我也帮你改改，现在我还有二十甜就考试了，但还是觉得思路不够开阔，互相帮助一下，呵呵 中午12点或者晚上10：30，呵呵，这两天有些别的事，所以没有写Issue，提纲也没来得及做，从今天开始，要继续努力了：） After careful and objective analysis about the issue that whether the past can serve as a predictor of the future, I find my view principally consistent with the author's. (为什么在WORD里是绿线？)In my opinion, the past fails to be the predictor of the future, however, studying and analyzing the history can be conducive to the current development of the human society. In the following discussion, I will show my evidence to substantiate my view.
In the first place, the history of human society serves as a road map that lead us to where we are now, we can benefit a lot from the experience of former people. We have inherited plenty of precious heritages from our ancestor, including the culture and technology. Some of these can still be applied to nowadays society and exert great effect on the development of the field they belong to. We need look no further than the Art of War by Suntz's lasting significance to see the truth of my view. Suntz has finished the Art of War for almost two thousand years; it is one of the most outstanding military works in China. Though it mainly deals with the war of the past, it was widely read by people not only in China but also all over the world, ranging from military officials to businessmen, for its ideas and strategies can still be applied in much of today's various field （fields）, such as the military and business field (这里和上面那句ranging from不是重复了么？).
In the second place, although learning history cannot predict what will happen in the future, we can prevent some negative events from happening again after analyzing the reason of our previous failure or mistake. Mistake is inevitable in human society, it is not shameful to err, and however, what we should ensure is that we must not make the same mistake repeatedly. A glance at our history can bring us to a world full of mistakes which we (have) ever made,(;) fortunately, a profound study about their reasons can make you confident that the world can be better, for you will be able to guarantee that such terrible mistakes will not reappear. For example, people have experienced two world wars, which brings (brought) the whole world into the swamp of suffering. However when we retrospect the reason of such stupid blunders, we impute it to the ambition of a handful of politician and the insufficiency of the communication and negotiation between nations. So we have learned from the mistake which each of us cannot afford again that we should seek for a more peace and effective way to solve the conflict between countries for the good of all.
In the final analysis, however, there are indeed something which just emerged we have no counterpart in the past and then have no related material as reference. I think the environment pollution can serve as a good example.
To sum up, I agree with the author with no reservation. Through the discussion mentioned above, we can easily reach the conclusion that though the past is no predictor of the future, we can resort to our history to consult the experience of success and reason of the failure.
呵呵，观点一致！逻辑很明确，看起来很顺。
我认为第三段可以写：如果历史可以预言将来，那未来不就是一个确定值吗？相信这一论断可能导致人们创造未来积极性的丧失。
总观点：历史不能预言将来，但我们可以以史为镜，同时积极的创造将来。 呵呵，那个绿线我也不知道是什么意思，谢谢楼上的补充，以史为镜，又想法。 4-4.5
many grammatical mistakes
I feel a little tied when reading because there are few impressive sentences and shining ideas.
Your last phrase is unnecessary because it has not been developed.
You want to display your integrity in thinking ,but the result is counterproductive.
It seems that I pay more attention to your flaw unconsciously.
I am sure that it will decrease you score .Delete it.
After all,a well-developed argument is much more desirable than a well-rounded,but undeveloped one.
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