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作者: seepqin    时间: 2010-4-13 00:02:50     标题: seep 4.12作业

When it comes to the issue of chooseing the way to travel whether take it in group or just feel it alone.people always take their sides over another,despite having no idea about the subject.Were it up to me to make a decision,the statement that travel in a group led by a tour guide,would enjoy the priority as my optimum choice. With respect to my side on this topic hereupon come numerous reasons.

The point of pinnacle importance for my response focuses on the significant of safety. Generally speaking,safety,the key factor to an triumph in any circumstance,has played an essential role during the travel days. An individual without the promise of safety,many of us believe,will become the unfortunate victim of adverse conditons,deprived of the prefect oppotunities. Therefor,being a number in a travel group,with a lead guide ,will bring not only the safety,but also a  wonderful memory.

With the first point comes the second demonstrating the value of sharing. To be frank,when you travel alone,you eat with yourself,palying with yourself,and smile where there is no one could share your pleasant. What's more,the only thing you could do during your own travel may just to express your ideas though the dairy you might write.In brief,with the company of the group,sharing what you see and what you think,is an indispensable thing during travelling.

Impressive as the above points are,the third enjoys the same value,stating that through explaination by the travel guide,we can be evevtually familier with the customery among the local citizens.The results of this case again emphasized the merit of travelling in a group led by a guide.

In light of the above,we sense that it may be wiser for us to travel in a group.Were people to recognize this point,they would know how to improve the quality of travelling .
作者: shengyan1988    时间: 2010-4-13 20:47:01

When it comes to the issue of chooseing the way to travel(去掉) whether take it(a travel)in group or just feel it alone.people always take their sides over another,despite having no idea about the subject.Were it up to me to make a decision(什么意思?是虚拟语气吗?没有必要用虚拟),the statement that travel in a group led by a tour guide,would enjoy the priority as my optimum choice. With respect to my side on this topic hereupon come numerous reasons.

The point of pinnacle importance for my response focuses on the significant of safety. Generally speaking,safety,the key factor to an triumph in any circumstance,has played an essential role during the travel days. An individual without the promise of safety,many of us believe,will become the unfortunate victim of adverse conditons,deprived of the prefect oppotunities. Therefor,being a number(member) in a travel group,with a lead guide ,will bring not only the safety,but also a  wonderful memory.(这段只说了safety,没有提及womderful memory).
With the first point comes the second demonstrating the value of sharing. To be frank,when you travel alone,you eat with yourself,palying with yourself,and smile where there is no one could share your pleasant. What's more,the only thing you could do during your own travel may just to express your ideas though the dairy you might write.In brief,with the company of the group,sharing what you see and what you think,is an indispensable thing during travelling.

Impressive as the above points are,the third enjoys the same value,stating that through explaination by the travel guide,we can be evevtually familier with the customery(customer) among the local citizens.The results of this case again emphasized the merit of travelling in a group led by a guide.

In light of the above,we sense that it may be wiser for us to travel in a group.Were people to recognize this point,they would know how to improve the quality of travelling .

(观点还是比较清晰的,但是语法错误太多了,中式英语太明显)




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