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作者: ClaretZ 时间: 2014-10-16 01:07:29 标题: 14年秋季提纲互改小组-Argument 19

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作者: ClaretZ 时间: 2014-10-16 01:25:07

一、分析题目中的Argument，列出claim、data并解释连接claim和data的warrant。
Claim:
The station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs.
Data:
(1) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast’
(2) Since that time, WCQP’s share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly.
(3) A nationwide survey indicated that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs.
Warrant:
(1) 两年前，WCQP增加了call-in advice programs，并且从那以后市场份额增加，那么增加了call-in advice programs则是导致市场份额增加的原因；
(2) 全国调查说明观众喜欢call-in advice programs，因此如果ＫＩＣＫ增加call-in advice programs，观众数会增加；
(3) ＷＣＱＰ的经历和全国调查的结果对ＫＩＣＫ所在地具有借鉴意义，因此为了获得更多市场份额，ＫＩＣＫ应该增加call-in advice programs。

二、根据题目的要求列出提纲以及描述要讨论的主要内容。
思路：我分别从ＷＱＣＰ的改革、市场份额改变、全国调查三个方面，对ＷＱＣＰ改革细节、Rockville人口变动、调查权威性进行质疑。
（Thesis statement）If the recommendation is to be accepted, three questions about the detailed change of radio station WCQP’s broadcast schedule, the change of population in Rockville during the two years, and the nationwide survey are still in desperate need to be answered.
(TS1) First of all, the details of the change in radio station WCQP’s broadcast schedule are needed to be provided, in order to judge what influence the addition of call-in advice programs has made compared to other changes. For example, if the radio station WCQP increased the number of call-in advice programs while decreased the number of other boring programs such as advertising, the deletion of other programs might be the reason why its share of the radio audience has increased. It is also possible that there was some other programs, which was added into the schedule together with call-in advice programs, attracted the audience.
(TS2) What is more, the question that how population changed in Rockville during the two years remains to be answered. If one of WCQP’s programs attracts a specific group of people, and many people of the specific group migrated to Rockville in the last two years, then the WCQP’s increasing share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area is not connected with the addition of call-in advice programs. For instance, if a new university was built in Rockville two years ago and many students has come to study, the learning programs of WCQP might have attracted more audience, which lead to the increase of its share of radio audience in the Rockville.
(TS3) The last but not the least, the question about the details of nationwide survey needs to be answered. There is possibility that the survey asked people to choose the more interesting one between call-in advice program and advertising program. If more people chose the call-in advice program, the conclusion that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs was drawn. It is transparently clear that the conclusion drawn in this way is not convincing, so that more details about how the survey was done are of great significance.

作者: tesolchina 时间: 2014-10-16 21:35:40

本帖最后由 tesolchina 于 2014-10-16 23:07 编辑

ClaretZ 发表于 2014-10-16 01:25
一、分析题目中的Argument，列出claim、data并解释连接claim和data的warrant。
Claim:
The station ma ...

19) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

一、       分析题目中的Argument，列出claim、data并解释连接claim和data的warrant。
Claim:
The station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs.
Data:
(1)       Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast’
(2)       Since that time, WCQP’s share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly.
(3)       A nationwide survey indicated that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs.
Warrant:
(1)       两年前，WCQP增加了call-in advice programs，并且从那以后市场份额增加，那么增加了call-in advice programs则是导致市场份额增加的原因；
(2)       全国调查说明观众喜欢call-in advice programs，因此如果ＫＩＣＫ增加call-in advice programs，观众数会增加；
(3)       ＷＣＱＰ的经历和全国调查的结果对ＫＩＣＫ所在地具有借鉴意义，因此为了获得更多市场份额，ＫＩＣＫ应该增加call-in advice programs。

二、根据题目的要求列出提纲以及描述要讨论的主要内容。
思路：我分别从ＷＱＣＰ的改革、市场份额改变、全国调查三个方面，对ＷＱＣＰ改革细节、Rockville人口变动、调查权威性进行质疑。
（Thesis statement）If the recommendation is to be accepted, three questions about the detailed change of radio station WCQP’s broadcast schedule, the change of population in Rockville during the two years, and the nationwide survey are still in desperate need to be answered.

in desperate need  这个表达好夸张:O  整个TS平行结构不错写得不错内容看后面的点评

(TS1) First of all, the details of the change in radio station WCQP’s broadcast schedule are needed to be provided, in order to judge what influence the addition of call-in advice programs has made compared to other changes. For example, if the radio station WCQP increased the number of call-in advice programs while decreased the number of other boring programs such as advertising, the deletion of other programs might be the reason why its share of the radio audience has increased. It is also possible that there was some other programs, which was added into the schedule together with call-in advice programs, attracted the audience.

我觉得你这里说得有点隐晦，不如直接说We need to ask if the introduction of the call-in advice program is the direct cause of the increase of listeners in WCQP
后面几个可能导致听众增加的因素都可以写的时候不用掺合call-in program进去

(TS2) What is more, the question that how population changed in Rockville during the two years remains to be answered. If one of WCQP’s programs attracts a specific group of people, and many people of the specific group migrated to Rockville in the last two years, then the WCQP’s increasing share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area is not connected with the addition of call-in advice programs. For instance, if a new university was built in Rockville two years ago and many students has come to study, the learning programs of WCQP might have attracted more audience, which lead to the increase of its share of radio audience in the Rockville.

the question about好像好些
我觉得这里的重点不应该是Rockville的人口变化因为KICK在Medway 而你整段不提KICK 会脱离这道题的主旨评估关于KICK的建议

(TS3) The last but not the least, the question about the details of nationwide survey needs to be answered. There is possibility that the survey asked people to choose the more interesting one between call-in advice program and advertising program. If more people chose the call-in advice program, the conclusion that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs was drawn. It is transparently clear that the conclusion drawn in this way is not convincing, so that more details about how the survey was done are of great significance.

其实这里的重点是national survey对象与KICK听众群的相似性如果人口结构不一样 national survey的结果就不是用于KICK的听众了另外 survey里表示有兴趣不代表一定会去听嘛还取决于时间段是否有空以及有没有更有趣的节目

另外Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.这个题目要求一定要记得不断的回应

作者: lisa_C 时间: 2014-10-29 15:20:08

19) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio

audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey

indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice

programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are

reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
相关argument：无

ClAIM
The station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.

DATA/REASON
1. Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast
3. Since WCQP included more call-in advice programs,its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly
2. A nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs

WARRANT
1和2说明WCQP推出更多call-in advice program后观众变多，KICK可以复制成功经验从而扩大份额
调查表明听众对这类节目有兴趣，说明KICK提供更多这类节目后会吸引这些有兴趣的观众，从而扩大份额

题纲：

主旨句：

In the memo, the station manager of KICK recommends that KICK should include more call-in advice programs to gain a larger audience share in its listening area. But to make his recommendation reliable, questions about what caused WCQP's success in attracting more audience in last two years, whether KICK can copy WCQP's strategy,whether the survey provide any helpful information for KICK and the feasibility this measure need to be answered in order to evaluate the recommendation.

Ts1: To begin with, one key question we should know is that what causes the increased audience share of WCQP in past two years.
关于什么导致WCQP听众份额变大的问题需要回答。
（推出更多call-in programs或许根本就不是WCQP听众变多的最主要原因。也许是因为WCQP两年前引进了一个著名的主持人，导致听众变多。也许是因为WCQP在节目中选择的话题紧跟社会热点，听众们更喜欢听这些话题于是导致WCQP的听众变多。因而完全有可能是节目的质量而非数量起到决定性的作用，在清楚什么导致WCQP听众之前，KICK贸然复制WCQP的经验未必能收到听众增加的效果）

Ts2: Even though increased number of call-in advice programs is the main factor leading to WCQP's success in gaining larger audience share in Rockville, we need to know more about whether KICK can copy WCQP's strategy to achieve its anticipated goal.
关于KICK和WCQP是否类似，KICK是否可以借鉴WCQP的经验这个问题需要回答
（也许KICK和WCQP的受众非常不同，KICK主打时政评论而WCQP主打情感类节目。这样的话，WCQP推出更多call-in advice prorgam是合理的，因为情感类节目中互动比较能调动观众积极性；但是KICK推出call-in advice类的节目听众也许就并不买帐，他们只是想听时事评论而已。还有KICK在Medway而WCQP在Rockville，Rockville的听众也许喜欢这类节目而Medway的听众未必需要。）

Ts3:Moreover, questions about reliability of the survey and whether the survey can provide effective reference for KICK's decision in call-in advice programs should also be answered.
关于全国性的调查能不能对KICK在是否引进call-in advice节目提供有效的决策参考这个问题需要回答。
（一方面，该调查是全国性的，Medway的听众偏好是不是跟全国的普遍情况一致，会不会Medway的生活节奏快很少有听众参与到这类互动节目中来，这就涉及到之前提到的地域性问题；另一方面，提供的信息只表明听众对这类节目有兴趣，却没有回答这类节目的市场是不是已经饱和，如果已经有太多广播公司提供这类节目，KICK想要抢占市场份额无疑是很难的，也就难以达到预期目标）

Ts4: Finally, the question about the feasibility this measure also cannot be neglected.（不知是否可以，如果可以的话感觉这点万能啊）
关于是否可行的问题需要回答
（也许call-in advice这类节目需要巨额的前期投入，如买设备和版权，KICK目前的财政状况也许不足以支撑它增加call-in advice节目的数量）

作者: tesolchina 时间: 2014-10-29 20:01:30

lisa_C 发表于 2014-10-29 15:20
19) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice ...

19) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

ClAIM
The station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.

DATA/REASON
1. Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast
3. Since WCQP included more call-in advice programs,its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly
2. A nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs

WARRANT
1和2说明WCQP推出更多call-in advice program后观众变多，KICK可以复制成功经验从而扩大份额
调查表明听众对这类节目有兴趣，说明KICK提供更多这类节目后会吸引这些有兴趣的观众，从而扩大份额

题纲：

主旨句：

In the memo, the station manager of KICK recommends that KICK should include more call-in advice programs to gain a larger audience share in its listening area. But to make his recommendation reliable, questions about what caused WCQP's success in attracting more audience in last two years, whether KICK can copy WCQP's strategy,whether the survey provide any helpful information for KICK and the feasibility this measure need to be answered in order to evaluate the recommendation.

reliable或许改成persuasive 或者 convincing更合适
feasibility of 漏掉一个介词要小心

Ts1: To begin with, one key question we should know is that what causes the increased audience share of WCQP in past two years.

question 不能和know 一起用要用ask 或者investigate
另外你提的这个问题需要和整道题的中心结合起来
One key question we need to ask is whether the introduction of more call-in advice programs is the main cause of the increase of audience share of WCQP

关于什么导致WCQP听众份额变大的问题需要回答。
（推出更多call-in programs或许根本就不是WCQP听众变多的最主要原因。也许是因为WCQP两年前引进了一个著名的主持人，导致听众变多。也许是因为WCQP在节目中选择的话题紧跟社会热点，听众们更喜欢听这些话题于是导致WCQP的听众变多。因而完全有可能是节目的质量而非数量起到决定性的作用，在清楚什么导致 WCQP听众之前，KICK贸然复制WCQP的经验未必能收到听众增加的效果）

Ts2: Even though increased number of call-in advice programs is the main factor leading to WCQP's success in gaining larger audience share in Rockville, we need to know more about whether KICK can copy WCQP's strategy to achieve its anticipated goal.

注意这里应该用even if
这里说能否复制策略和后面TS4说的feasibility会不会有点重复

关于KICK和WCQP是否类似，KICK是否可以借鉴WCQP的经验这个问题需要回答
（也许KICK和WCQP的受众非常不同，KICK主打时政评论而WCQP主打情感类节目。这样的话，WCQP推出更多call-in advice prorgam是合理的，因为情感类节目中互动比较能调动观众积极性；但是KICK推出call-in advice类的节目听众也许就并不买帐，他们只是想听时事评论而已。还有KICK在Medway而WCQP在Rockville，Rockville的听众也许喜欢这类节目而Medway的听众未必需要。）

Ts3:Moreover, questions about reliability of the survey and whether the survey can provide effective reference for KICK's decision in call-in advice programs should also be answered.

这里不必质疑调查的可靠性而是重点讨论结果的applicability

关于全国性的调查能不能对KICK在是否引进call-in advice节目提供有效的决策参考这个问题需要回答。
（一方面，该调查是全国性的，Medway的听众偏好是不是跟全国的普遍情况一致，会不会Medway的生活节奏快很少有听众参与到这类互动节目中来，这就涉及到之前提到的地域性问题；另一方面，提供的信息只表明听众对这类节目有兴趣，却没有回答这类节目的市场是不是已经饱和，如果已经有太多广播公司提供这类节目，KICK想要抢占市场份额无疑是很难的，也就难以达到预期目标）

Ts4: Finally, the question about the feasibility this measure also cannot be neglected.（不知是否可以，如果可以的话感觉这点万能啊）
关于是否可行的问题需要回答
（也许call-in advice这类节目需要巨额的前期投入，如买设备和版权，KICK目前的财政状况也许不足以支撑它增加call-in advice节目的数量）

另外还有一点值得注意的是即使当地听众对某个节目感兴趣不代表他们一定会去听这个节目还要看那个时间段有没有其他他们更喜欢听得节目以及他们有没有时间听收音机

作者: tesolchina 时间: 2014-10-29 20:32:55

lisa_C 发表于 2014-10-29 15:20
19) Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice ...

我也写了一篇你看看
https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mo ... age=5#pid1778947277

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