Issue64 45分钟完成的，D组战友过来拍拍

fhxyweiUID: 157384

64. "Many people know how to attain success, but few know how to make the
best use of it."
很多人懂得如何去获得成功，但是很少有人知道如何最好的去利用成功。


It is a fact that in modern society with a rapid pace of work and life people are struggling for the so- called success: higher social status, a larger amount of money or a more popular fame. However, few ones know how to make the best use of their success attained just like the statement above referred. Actually, a wise person should not know only how to attain success, but learn to enjoy it and serve the society further as well.

On the one hand, the best utilization of success available is to enjoy, cherish and appreciate it. In today's society with high work pressure, most people try to work day and night to strive for a higher promotion, more money even at the expense of their health. A research indicates that some white collars who have stepped into the administration class in their companies passed away in their working process because they devote too much time and energy to their works for a further promotion. And nowadays, there is an increasing number of such kind of people who have owned a certain social status and fame but don't know how to relax and entertain themselves at all. Some ones eventually become millionaires through their desperately hard work, however, after that, they cannot enjoy and utilize their success again due to their bad health resulted from their exhaustion. Thus, such kind success makes no sense at all to them and even the society.

Furthermore, some evidence in the marriage can further support that few ones know how to cherish their success. Many young men go all out to court some kind, graceful and beautiful girls and devise many plots to touch their hearts. After they attained the success: the marriage, however, many ones don't love their wives as they did before. They don't know how to sustain their success, which means how to maintain their marriage in long time. Actually, more important is the devotion to their lovers after their marriage rather than the court before the success of touching their heart.

On the other hand, scarcely less important than enjoying and cherishing the success is furthering it by serving our society. However, only a few people with wisdom know how to reward their society that has helped their success. There are only a few business moguls and pop barons know to contribute some money to their society by funding some charities. Most of them, however, just know to spend a tremendous amount of money in buying many luxuries cars, villadoms which they cannot fully use at all. Someone even indulged themselves in drugs and some other crazy lifestyles. It is a pity that they are unwilling to feedback their society by allocating a small sum of their revenues to the public welfare, which is the best way to use their success.

In sum, it is not very difficult for people to attain success in any human endeavors, however, how to make the best use of it really needs true wisdom, which is more significant than any success themselves.

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-11 at 15:58 ]

if_lotusUID: 175616

你的视角很独特阿，这篇文章。

尤其B1、B2。不知道  关注健康/恋爱与结婚  算不算是“利用成功”呢？
怎么会想到这两个方面去呢？有意思，呵呵~

B3中规中矩。


要是我的话，我大概正文部分都会写B3这种层面的。
因为GRE作文的论证层面/例子 感觉还是要有深度一点，跟TWE不一样。
不过像你B1/B2这样的角度倒是比较新颖。

时间比较紧，只是粗看了一下，别介意阿

commhcUID: 192491

不错呵。其实可以写大一点，吧政治写进去，although some sagacious politicans can sucessfully achieve their politician goals, they fails to fully utilize both their fame and position to benefit the society and in some extreme cases they even harm the well-beings to the masses.  我也是7.28，多指点。

fhxyweiUID: 157384

1,呵呵，现在大家时间都比较紧，能看一下就不错了！谢谢if-lotus，期待你的大作


2，我也想过写政治，但是讲不清楚什么怎样利用成功，commhc你可以尝试一下


3，我现在已经进入了一个瓶颈期，一时半会突破不了了，而且习惯了只写两个层面：
on the one hand, on the other hand, 一些句法结构都比较固定，老是那几个，搞不出什么新意呢！

leo_chenUID: 206840

It is a fact that in modern society with a rapid pace of work and life people are struggling for the so- called success: higher social status, a larger amount of money or a more popular fame. However, few ones know how to make the best use of their success attained just like the statement above referred. Actually, a wise person should not know only how to attain success, but learn to enjoy it and serve the society further as well.

On the one hand, the best utilization of success available available  success is to enjoy, cherish and appreciate it. In today's society with high work pressure, most people try to work day and night to strive for a higher 去掉 promotion, more money even at the expense of their health. A research indicates that some white collars who have stepped into the administration class in their companies passed away 这个词太重了，用consumed如何 in their working process because they devote too much time and energy to their works for a further promotion. And nowadays, there is an increasing number of such kind of people who have owned a certain social status and fame but don't know how to relax and entertain themselves at all. Some ones eventually become millionaires through their desperately hard work, however, after that, they cannot enjoy and utilize their success again due to their bad health resulted from their exhaustion. Thus, such kind success makes no sense at all to them and even the society.

Furthermore, some evidence in the marriage can further support that few ones know how to cherish their success. Many young men go all out to court some kind, graceful and beautiful girls and devise many plots to touch win/capture their hearts. After they attained the success: the marriage, however, many ones don't love their wives as they did before. They don't know how to sustain their success, which means how to maintain their marriage in long time. Actually, more important is the devotion to their lovers after their marriage rather than the court before the success of touching their heart.

On the other hand, scarcely less important than enjoying and cherishing the success is furthering it by serving our society. However, only a few people with wisdom know how to reward their society that has helped their success. There are only a few business moguls and pop barons know to contribute some money to their society by funding some charities. Most of them, however, just know to spend a tremendous amount of money in buying many luxuries cars, villadoms which they cannot fully use at all. Someone even indulged themselves in drugs and some other crazy lifestyles. It is a pity that they are unwilling to feedback return/reward their society by allocating a small sum of their revenues to the public welfare, which is the best way to use their success.

In sum, it is not very difficult for people to attain success in any human endeavors, however, how to make the best use of it really needs true wisdom, which is more significant than any success themselves.

写得不错，有新意，有说服力

fhxyweiUID: 157384

谢谢修改，你最近写的哪篇？152写了没有？共同讨论一下