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51, education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.
The speaker claims that education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interest of each student. According to the aim of the education, I basically agree with the claim while take the element study in the consideration.开头没什么大碍!就是在引述作者的观点时忌讳全部重复!希望引起注意,换换几个词就好了!或者换换句型,把陈述句换成疑问句什么的!写的还是不错的!
First of all, let us get down to fundamental, 这句话比较短,可以去掉逗号前后2句连起来!and find out what is the eventual destination of the education. In order to put the education principles into practice, two factors should be take into concern. One is the direct aim--to make student assimilate the knowledge and be nurtured a competence or a thinking mode. The other, an aim linking to future development--to make the competence and principle grow and evolve, and then translated into their own wealth.赞!这一段将教育的目的分析得比较透彻!一个是帮助学生消化知识成为有思想的有能力的人,另一个是考虑长远发展,将能力和知识转化为自身的财富。看下一段怎么深入分析的!;)
Based on this first factor, the most effective way to educate is to cultivate the interest indeed. For one thing, interest lures the curiosity of the student and rouses the most passion to seek into the knowledge. The interest of a geometry book led Einstein into a mathematic world; the phenomena of apple falling enlightened Newton to seek the earth gravitation; the enlightening interest educational pattern is the best way to trigger the intention the plunge into a subject study. 这一段没有偏题!
Meanwhile, interesteducation also benefits the other factor. After gaining the knowledge and leaving the educators and then launching into the society, in the course of career pursuing, student will also maintain this passion and always retain the motivity because of their own interest. After the course of education, there are numerous courses of self-educations while interest, the only spark lead the seeking and urges and inspires the student all the time and thus he/her could hold the faith and success eventually. 这一段已经跑题了!怎么开始谈学生用兴趣做什么什么呢?其实思路没错!但是注意要反过来写,不能正面写学生的兴趣怎么了?而要写教育帮助学生发展他们的兴趣可以使他们怎么了?然后举例证明,最后下结论所以教育应该满足学生的兴趣。
If there is no interest, no individual needs, students will face the same book, the same dogma, and the same experience to be a student, how could they develop their own characters and own competence? The original intention of the education is not to pipeline produce but to distinguish every student in a proper way. Interest endow everyone a path and thus they can walk along their own path to reach their own destination.
Only focusing on the cultivation of interest will go to a extreme, before sending the students into their own path, there are must be a main path to serve as a basic lessons, by which students could learn how to walk. The inculcation of the elements provides the student a ground of soil to sow their own seeds. Choosing the current education system to be an example, we can get this sense easily. In every college, ranging the most famous to the most noteless recognized this principle more than a hundred years ago for this reason. They always present fresh men fundamental subjects; no matter what is the major they have chosen before the enrollment. After a period of study, they are entitled to decide what is the next step all based on their own need and interest, even, they could change their majors if they are attracted by another area. The most effective way to educate is the combining of these two courses.
这2段离开了教育大谈兴趣的好处和重要性!严重偏题了呀!:L
In sum, the most benefit way the education is interest indeed; meanwhile, the fundament elements are also crucial. They relationship between them jus is justlike the relationship between the trunk and ramification.主干和分支,这个比喻不当吧! No ramification could survive without trunk while only trunk will make a tree look bald. The educators should lay emphasis on the two in order to make our education effective and feasible.(588) 1小时
总评:前3段写的都很不错!写到第2点的时候就开始跑题了!好可惜!:) |
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Mencius said,"When heaven is about to confer a great office on any man,it first exercises his mind with suffering, and his sinews and bones with toil.It exposes his body to hunger………….By all these methods, it stimulates his mind, consolidates his character, and increases his efficiency".
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