ARGUMENT56 [Smile－C组] 第二次作业，求狠拍！

monica98UID: 2124796

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The arguer predicts that the value of life-size sculptures in Kali Island will decrease and on the contrary that of the miniature will increase. To justify this prediction, the arguer reasons that the discovery of the molds of human heads and hands and few sculpting tools in Kali Island indicates that the life-size sculptures were built by molds. On the other hand, the arguer claims that the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues could not be created by molds. I find this argument logically flawed in several respects.

First, the arguer falsely equates the molds of human heads and hands with those of actual bodies. The arguer fails to provide any credible evidence to support that this is the case. It is entirely possible that the only the hands and heads of these statues were built by molds, but other parts of statues were made by other means instead of by molds. Even if the whole statues were produced by molds of actual bodies, the mere fact that the molds were discovered in Kali Island does not support the conclusion that these statues were built by the molds. Without knowing whether the molds and these statues were created in same ages and matched well or not, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion.

Second, the arguer fails to take into account other possible reasons that are responsible for the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues. Given the fact few ancient sculpting tools were found in Kali Island, it is highly possible the ancient Kalinese artists intentionally used molds to create such abstract and various style to increase the value of works.

Third, the fact that few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found in Kali Island does not necessarily indicate that few sculpting tools have ever been used by the ancient Kalinese artists. Perhaps, with the further exploration in Kali Island more sculpting tools would be discovered. If so, the arguer's claim would be seriously undermined.

Forth, ignoring other possible factors which might have influence on the value of the art works, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The value of sculptures depends on the amount, the integrity, and the quality of the sculptures, etc. Perhaps, the value of a small amount of life-size scultures will increase due to the difficulty of the making of molds of actual bodies.

In sum, the arguement is groundless and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should provide information about the ages and the extent of match of the molds and sculptures. If possible, evidence about the existence of molds of actual bodies, sculpting tools, and a detailed investigation about the life-size and miniature sculptures should be given.

xinxinwUID: 2144273

The arguer predicts that the value of life-size sculptures in Kali Island will decrease and on the contrary that of the miniature will increase. To justify this prediction, the arguer reasons that the discovery of the molds of human heads and hands and few sculpting tools in Kali Island indicates that the life-size sculptures were built by molds discovered recently.更好一些,原来那样说,没有包括原文的主要论据. On the other hand, the arguer claims that the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues could not be created by molds. I find this argument logically flawed in several respects.

First, the arguer falsely equates the molds of human heads and hands with those of actual bodies. The arguer fails to provide any credible evidence to support that this is the case.前两句的表达有问题,找不到the case对应的是什么。建议把equates molds of ... with ...写成一个从句，相对完整一些，跟后面呼应 It is entirely possible that the only the hands and heads of these statues were built by molds, but other parts of statues were made by other means instead of by molds. Even if the whole statues were produced by molds of actual bodies, the mere fact that the molds were discovered in Kali Island does not support the conclusion that these statues were built by the molds. Without knowing whether the molds and these statues were created in same ages and matched well or not, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion.顺序换一下，前面先是承认了手和头是用molds做的，后面又说不是。建议先说不一定用molds做，然后让步，即使是用molds做的，也只发现了头和手

Second, the arguer fails to take into account other possible reasons that are responsible for the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues. Given the fact few ancient sculpting tools were found in Kali Island, it is highly possible the ancient Kalinese artists intentionally used molds to create such abstract and various style to increase the value of works.这是不是跟作者翻了同样的错误？

Third, the fact that few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found in Kali Island does not necessarily indicate that few sculpting tools have ever been used by the ancient Kalinese artists. Perhaps, with the further exploration in Kali Island more sculpting tools would be discovered. If so, the arguer's claim would be seriously undermined.同时反驳了自己的第二段

Forth, ignoring other possible factors which might have influence on the value of the art works, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization.generalization用得不太合适 The value of sculptures depends on the amount, the integrity, and the quality of the sculptures, etc. Perhaps, the value of a small amount of life-size scultures will increase due to the difficulty of the making of molds of actual bodies.

In sum, the arguement is groundless and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should provide information about the ages and the extent of match of the molds and sculptures. If possible, evidence about the existence of molds of actual bodies, sculpting tools, and a detailed investigation about the life-size and miniature sculptures should be given.

hes2000abcUID: 2154084

The arguer predicts that the value of life-size sculptures in Kali Island will decrease and on the contrary that of the miniature will increase. To justify this prediction, the arguer reasons that the discovery of the molds of human heads and hands and few sculpting tools in Kali Island indicates that the life-size sculptures were built by molds. On the other hand, the arguer claims that the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues could not be created by molds. I find this argument logically flawed in several respects.

First, the arguer falsely equates the molds of human heads and hands with those of actual bodies. The arguer fails to provide any credible evidence to support that this is the case. It is entirely possible that the only the hands and heads of these statues were built by molds, but other parts of statues were made by other means instead of by molds. Even if the whole statues were produced by molds of actual bodies, the mere fact that the molds were discovered in Kali Island does not support the conclusion that these statues were built by the molds. Without knowing whether the molds and these statues were created in the same ages（age） and matched well or not, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion. （后半部分感觉与value，关系不大）

Second, the arguer fails to take into account other possible reasons that are responsible for the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues. Given the fact few ancient sculpting tools were found in Kali Island, it is highly possible the ancient Kalinese artists intentionally used molds to create such abstract and various styles to increase the value of works.（牵强，当初创作时不是为了value，换一个词好一些）
Third, the fact that few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found in Kali Island does not necessarily indicate that few sculpting tools have ever been used by the ancient Kalinese artists. Perhaps, with the further exploration in Kali Island more sculpting tools would be discovered. If so, the arguer's claim would be seriously undermined.

Forth, ignoring other possible factors which might have influence on the value of the art works, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The value of sculptures depends on the amount, the integrity, and the quality of the sculptures, etc. Perhaps, the value of a small amount of life-size sculptures will increase due to the difficult process of the making of molds of actual bodies.

In sum, the argument is groundless and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should provide information about the ages and the extent of match of the molds and sculptures. If possible, evidences about the existence of molds of actual bodies, sculpting tools, and a detailed investigation about the life-size and miniature sculptures should be given.（最后应该提一下value，论题）
整体读下来，感觉套词很到位，行文也比较流畅，值得学习。文章的论题应该注意一下，开始说收藏家prize，后来预测value，这方面可能没注意。还有些小错误要注意。

[ 本帖最后由 hes2000abc 于 2006-7-25 20:27 编辑 ]

枫晰UID: 2123661

The arguer predicts that the value of life-size sculptures in Kali Island will decrease and on the contrary that of the miniature will increase. To justify this prediction, the arguer reasons that the discovery of the molds of human heads and hands and few sculpting tools in Kali Island indicates that the life-size sculptures were built by molds. On the other hand, the arguer claims that the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues could not be created by molds. I find this argument logically flawed in several respects.

First, the arguer falsely equates the molds of human heads and hands with those of actual bodies. The arguer fails to provide any credible evidence to support that this is the case. It is entirely possible that the only the hands and heads of these statues were built by molds, but other parts of statues were made by other means instead of by molds. Even if the whole statues were produced by molds of actual bodies, the mere fact that the molds were discovered in Kali Island does not support the conclusion that these statues were built by the molds. Without knowing whether the molds and these statues were created in same ages and matched well or not, we cannot accept the arguer's conclusion.

Second, the arguer fails to take into account other possible reasons that are responsible for the abstract and various styles of the miniature statues. Given the fact few ancient sculpting tools were found in Kali Island, it is highly possible the ancient Kalinese artists intentionally used molds to create such abstract and various style to increase the value of works.有主观的感觉

Third, the fact that few ancient Kalinese sculpting tools have been found in Kali Island does not necessarily indicate that few sculpting tools have ever been used by the ancient Kalinese artists. Perhaps, with the further exploration in Kali Island more sculpting tools would be discovered. If so, the arguer's claim would be seriously undermined.

Forth, ignoring other possible factors which might have influence on the value of the art works, the arguer commits a fallacy of hasty generalization. The value of sculptures depends on the amount, the integrity, and the quality of the sculptures, etc. Perhaps, the value of a small amount of life-size scultures will increase due to the difficulty of the making of molds of actual bodies. (不错)

In sum, the arguement is groundless and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To strengthen it, the arguer should provide information about the ages and the extent of match of the molds and sculptures. If possible, evidence about the existence of molds of actual bodies, sculpting tools, and a detailed investigation about the life-size and miniature sculptures should be given.
总体来说文章把重要的点都攻击了,只是在第二第三段展开还不够,并且第一段例子稍微详细一点
:)个人意见仅供参考