ＩＳＳＵＥ４ ＭＹＴＨ小组第一次作业

杏林有情天UID: 2247728

"No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
The statement asserds that the great advancement of study has to relay on outsiders’ knowledge and experience .As I observe,on the one hand,agree the speaker’s broad assertion that outside culture indeed help a certain field of study development.On the other hand,other elements also affect davancement of a certain subject,such as reserch condition,indivitual talent,or new explorement of study,and so on.In other word,the extrem advancement of field of sudy needs accordance with overall composing element,especially the efforts of a certain subject itself.
Admittedly ,nowadays,human culture -science,technology,religion,ect.-run  into a booming age,in which all field of study are correlated closely and need to mutually develop.Quite a few new advents of hybrid of subjects prove this fact. Considering biochemistry,it arises on the basis of combination between biology and chemistry;or such as astrobiology is supported by the study of astrogeology and biology.Duing to outsiders bringing their knowledge and experience to a certain field of study, cause the dramatic advancements of science subjects,which bring about human culture to a new historic sublime  and explore several brand-new fields.
However,the speaker seriously ignors the signigicantly contributions coming from the explorement of a subjece itself,which is the greatest power pursuing the advancement of study.For example,mathematics as a absolute subject ,also the classtic physics , merely relates to other subjects,which needs purely intellectially mathematic or physics sense.It is look no far away from the occurrences of Newton’s Law of Gravitation and Einstein’s Theory of Relativity ,are utterly genins’ flash of wisdom,little of which is borrowed from other subjects.
Assumeing that the advancement of subject relays on the outsiders’ intelligence,should we stay at home waiting for the appearance of inspiration of outside subject .If overall scientists hold out this appoint, think about that when we obtain the new development of our peciality.
Moreover,as for factors contributing to an academic subjects’ signnificant growth ,they include many apart from sharing the outsiders’ intelligence,such as the long-term academic accumulation,the appropriate social and economic support,the good-timing birth of geniuses and so on.
Long-term academic accumulation provides great supportion to the exploration of subject,meaning we would stand on the shouder of giant to look into subject future.Also the appropriat social and economic support could lead the subject to develop efficiently and broadly.Additionally,created ideas coming from individuals also a essential factor that pursuing the advancement of subjects,which stimulates learners and scientists to be more passion and interesting on their specialities.
In sum, the comprarison between the outsiders and subject specialists –who is provide more contribution to the subject-is unreasonable. Many essential factors deeply influence its exploration.So the significant advancements of subject attribute to effors of all study realms including itself.

phevos_xxUID: 2258006

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The statement asserts that the great advancement of study has to relay on outsiders’ knowledge and experience .As I observe, on the one hand, agree the speaker’s broad assertion that outside culture indeed help a certain field of study development. On the other hand, other elements also affect advancement of a certain subject, such as research condition, individual talent, or new emplacement of study, and so on. In other word, the extreme advancement of field of study needs accordance with overall composing element, especially the efforts of a certain subject itself.

Admittedly, nowadays, human culture -science, technology, religion, etc. -run into a booming age, in which all field of study are correlated closely and need to mutually develop. Quite a few new advents of hybrid of subjects prove this fact. Considering biochemistry, it arises on the basis of combination between biology and chemistry; or such as astrobiology is supported by the study of astrology and biology. Duing to outsiders bringing their knowledge and experience to a certain field of study, cause the dramatic advancements of science subjects, which bring about human culture to a new historic sublime  and explore several brand-new fields.

However, the speaker seriously ignores the significantly contributions coming from the explorement of a subject itself, which is the greatest power pursuing the advancement of study. For example, mathematics as a absolute subject ,also the classtic physics , merely relates to other subjects, which needs purely intellectually mathematic or physics sense. It is look no far away from the occurrences of Newton’s Law of Gravitation and Einstein’s Theory of Relativity ,are utterly genins’ flash of wisdom,little of which is borrowed from other subjects.

Assumeing that the advancement of subject relays on the outsiders’ intelligence, should we stay at home waiting for the appearance of inspiration of outside subject .If overall scientists hold out this appoint, think about that when we obtain the new development of our peciality.

Moreover, as for factors contributing to an academic subjects’ significant growth ,they include many apart from sharing the outsiders’ intelligence, such as the long-term academic accumulation, the appropriate social and economic support, the good-timing birth of geniuses and so on.

Long-term academic accumulation provides great supportion to the exploration of subject,meaning we would stand on the shoulder of giant to look into subject future. Also the appropriat social and economic support could lead the subject to develop efficiently and broadly. Additionally, created ideas coming from individuals also a essential factor that pursuing the advancement of subjects, which stimulates learners and scientists to be more passion and interesting on their specialities.

In sum, the comparison between the outsiders and subject specialists –who is provide more contribution to the subject-is unreasonable. Many essential factors deeply influence its exploration. So the significant advancements of subject attribute to efforts of all study realms including it.

phevos_xxUID: 2258006

The statement asserts that the great advancement of study has to rely on outsiders’ knowledge and experience. As I observe, on the one hand[应该是on one hand], agree the speaker’s broad assertion that outside culture indeed helps a certain field of study development[field of study development?不太对,去掉development比较好]. On the other hand, other elements also affect [the] explorement of a certain subject, such as research condition, individual talent, or new emplacement of study, and so on. In other word, the extreme advancement of field of study needs accordance with overall composing element, especially the efforts of a certain subject itself.

Admittedly, nowadays, human culture -science, technology, religion, etc.[etc一般用于句末,这里用and so on比较合适] -run into a booming age, in which all fields of study are correlated closely and need to mutually develop[换个顺序mutual development is needed 是不是更好一些?]. Quite a few[看着有点别扭,为何不直接用many?] new advents of hybrid of subjects prove this fact. Considering biochemistry, it arises on the basis of combination between biology and chemistry; or such as astrobiology is supported by the study of astrology and biology. Duing to outsiders bringing their knowledge and experience to a certain field of study, cause the dramatic advancements of science subjects, which bring about human culture to a new historic sublime  and explore several brand-new fields. [due to用得有点问题，为何后面还有cause]这段主要用交叉学科为例,说明了很多学科关系密切
However, the speaker seriously ignores[ignore 属于人身攻击，issue里面禁用！] the significantly contributions coming from the explorement[无此词,用exploration或者exploring] of a subject itself, which is the greatest power pursuing the advancement of study. For example, mathematics as an absolute subject, also the classic physics, merely relates to other subjects, which needs purely intellectually mathematic or physics sense. It is look no far away from the occurrences of Newton’s Law of Gravitation and Einstein’s Theory of Relativity, are utterly genius’ flash of wisdom, little of which is borrowed from other subjects.[最后一句读起来怪怪的，utterly这样的绝对词汇尽量少用，说得太绝会产生逻辑漏洞]
这段看似是攻击题目的观点，在 issue里面，可以补充，或是辩驳，但是不宜“攻击”。因此，最好是这样子：但是，某领域的自身的研究及其相应的知识与经验也是很重要的，……。所选取的例子是不错的，但是侧重点不对。应该侧重于数学是如何利用自身的理论来取得重大发展；而不是侧重讲，数学没有外来的介入，也发展得很好。
Assuming that the advancement of subject relays on the outsiders’ intelligence, should we stay at home waiting for the appearance of inspiration of outside subject .If overall scientists hold out this appoint, think about that when we obtain the new development of our specialty.
这段有点让人感觉强辞夺理的感觉。所作的假设没有意义。

Moreover, as for factors contributing to an academic subjects’ significant growth, they include many apart from sharing the outsiders’ intelligence, such as the long-term academic accumulation, the appropriate social and economic support, the good-timing birth of geniuses and so on.
[这段就一句话，可以考虑和下面合并]

Long-term academic accumulation provides great supportion[无此词，用support就行] to the exploration of subject, meaning we would stand on the shoulder of giant to look into subject future. Also the appropriate social and economic support could lead the subject to develop efficiently and broadly. Additionally, created ideas coming from individuals also a essential factor that pursuing the advancement of subjects, which stimulates learners and scientists to be more passion and interesting on their specialties.
[这段的论证比较合适]
In sum, the comparison between the outsiders and subject specialists –who are providing more contribution to the subject-is unreasonable[这个词的意思是“不合理的，不理智的”，整句的意思是要表达两者进行比较是不合理的？]. Many essential factors deeply influence its exploration. So the significant advancements of subject attribute to efforts of all study realms including it.

主要存在的问题
1.        拼写错误太多，语法错误也很多。诸如形容词+ing，名次+ing等等错误比较普遍。常见单词的词性变化也分得不是很清楚。
2.        标点符号后空一格，段间空一行。
3.        ignore这样的人身攻击词汇不能用于issue写作中，另外需要避免把issue写成argument
4.        虽然从最后一段中能了解是要写成平衡观点，但是在论述时，过于批驳题目的观点。
整个的论证顺序是：题目有道理---但是忽略了什么---假设题目有道理，那么会出现奇怪的事情---更多的论证可以证明题目忽略的东西是多么的重要。