Issue47 sisong2003－－Hamming小组第四周作业

sisong2003UID: 2154005

47"Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
WORDS: 440         TIME: 2:12:00          DATE: 2006-12-15

The speaker asserts that the society does not place enough emphasis on intellect such as reasoning and cognitive skills. Though I agree with this assertion, there is more need to be emphasized than intellect, which are emotions.

Admittedly, intellect is often not enough emphasized by the society, especially reasoning and cognition. After recovering the college entrance examination of China in 1978, tests become a more and more important means of distinction of intellect. In almost all the high schools in china, students are cultivated by copying the knowledge from the textbook for high marks in the examinations rather than expansion of reasoning and cognitive skills. Thus, it is very common to consider a high-school student as high-mark but low-intellect. Even as to the solution of a mathematics question, a student can easily do a question that is similar to the example in the textbook, but while facing a new question they may fail because of lacking abilities of reasoning and cognition. Observably, the school should emphasize the intellect, which will be a great help not only for the examination but also the development of the society.

However, excessive emphasis on intellect and overlooking emotion will carry negative, harmful, even dangerous consequence. There are many examples to support this. The famous scientist of physics, Newton, discovered several important theories of physics discipline, and was never doubted for his intellect, but wrote a lot of works to prove the god was real in his old time. This may be caused by his unable further explanation of his theories, but eventually attribute to the lost of control of his psychology. And there are several suicides in my college every year. These suicide committers are often very excellent students, but due to some common reasons like failure in love, failed in a test they commit suicide. And this mainly because their lack of abilities for tolerance of hit. Thus, by encouraging and cultivating certain emotions such as tolerance-society clearly benefits a lot from it.

On the contrary, over emphasizing emotions and de-emphasizing intellect may lead to even worse consequences for the society. If more and more people lack the ability of reasoning and cognition, the discoveries in the science and technology would be less. We may not be able to enjoy the convenience generated by the human intellect. And the development of society would be slower, what’s the worse, the racial discrimination and sex discrimination which seem caused by emotions can not be reduced or solved by the intellectual thinking.

In sum, emotions and intellect are both important to the development of our society. Thus, intellect should be placed enough emphasis, so are emotions.

rt860113UID: 2256886

The speaker asserts that the society does not place enough emphasis on intellect such asreasoning and cognitive skills. Though I agree with this assertion, there is more need to be emphasized than intellect, which are emotions.

Admittedly, intellect is often not enough emphasized by the society, especially reasoning and cognition. After recovering the college entrance examination of China in 1978, tests become amore and more important means of distinction of intellect. In almost all thehigh schools in china, students are cultivated by copying the knowledge fromthe textbook for high marks in the examinations rather than expansion ofreasoning and cognitive skills. Thus, it is very common to consider ahigh-school student as high-mark but low-intellect. Even as to the solution of a mathematics question, a student can easily do aquestion that is similar to the example in the textbook, but while facing a newquestion they may fail because of lacking abilities of reasoning and cognition.（这句话我觉得有一些问题，a new question的范围含义不明，是表示完全new, 还是题型和解题思路基本不变，只是数据不同，请再考虑一下）Observably, the school should emphasize the intellect,which will be a great help not only for the examination but also the development of the society.（关于这段的例子，运用中国高考模式来支持主题句，只能从教育这个方面（社会的一个方面）来反映，可以考虑再从别的方面在补充一下，这样会更加充实。而且最后一句总结的和本段的主题句范围不太相附，可以再斟酌一下）

However, excessive emphasis onintellect and overlooking emotion will carry negative, harmful, even dangerousconsequence. There are many examples to support this point of view. The famous scientist of physics, Newton, discoveredseveral important theories of physics discipline, and was never doubted for hisintellect, but wrote a lot of works to prove the god was real in his old time(考虑一下late years). This may becaused by his unable further explanation of his theories, but eventuallyattribute to the lost of control of his psychology. And there are severalsuicides in my college every year. These suicide committers are often very excellent students（excellent用在这里有一些问题，应该指明是学习方面或智力方面比较优秀）,but due to some common reasons like failure in love, failed in a test（考虑改成one如何） they committed suicide. And this mainly because (caused by)their lack of abilities for tolerance of hit. Thus, by encouraging and cultivating certain emotions such as tolerance-society clearly benefits a lot from it.

On the contrary, over-emphasizing emotions and de-emphasizing intellect may lead to even worseconsequences for the society. If more and more people lack the ability ofreasoning and cognition, the discoveries in the science and technology would beless. We may not be able to enjoy the convenience generated（created如何intellect不能主动产生，需要创造性的工作） by the human intellect. And the development of society would be slower, what’s the worse, （可考虑改为What’s worse , the development of society would be slower ）the racial discrimination and sex discrimination which seem(to be) caused by emotions can not be reduced or solved by the intellectual thinking.

In sum, emotions and intellect are both important to the development of our society. Thus, intellect should be placed enough emphasis, and so are emotions.
总体来说，文章的基本结构还需要再理一下，具体的例子还需要加强，尤其是在针对性和准确性上，词语的把握上还需要斟酌。其实这些都是我们的共同问题，一起努力吧！
加油！

sisong2003UID: 2154005

thank u very much,ISSUE 怎么写，一点概念都没有，救命啊！

graduate06UID: 2223299

摹写北美吧，这样最快，而且大多数人都不好找外教改文章。
加油！！
每周都要把这类的提纲整理出来，没写的是低频自己看看，列提纲。