issue147 [OB小组] 第11次作业 传统与现代

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题目：ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
字数：553          用时：00:55:04          日期：2007-7-23 下午 10:51:43
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What's the relationship between tradition and modernization,  are they incompatible? The author agree that they cannot exist at the same time and one must choose between them. However, in my view, both the tradition and modernization function in the society.---

To begin with, it's true that tradition is something that always functions in our mental development. There're numerous races in the world and each of them has their own characteristic and custom, which come down year by year. These customs and characteristics of each race help develop their unique ways of thinking and doing things, on both mentally and physically. For instance, there're several races of which people never eat pork, since they treat pigs as jinni. Instead, they eat beef and mutton. Thus, if we are not familiar with their tradition and treat them with pork dishes, it leads to very serious result, just like the christian offenses the Christ. Hence, tradition has its special function when help with our mental development.

Undeniable, tradition is very important. However, we're living in the 21st century, how can a man always live by following a past ways of life. In the modern society, the world is changing at an unimaginable speed, in which sometimes the tradition does not always work. In some circumstance, we should follow the latest thoughts and facts in order to follow the pace of the developing society. For example, there're some races in China which has such a custom: after the olds died, the younger ones must stay at home to memorize and protect the olds' for as long as months. I am not complaining that it's wrong, however, nowadays it's not possible for someone to stop everything of his life just to stay at home. Younger people have the responsibility to memorize the olds, but they are able to keep it in mind instead of staying at home and doing nothing at all except memorizing. Thus, sometimes people need to make some small changes in tradition in order to keep in pace with the modern society.

Moreover, adding credibility to my position is the fact that tradition also develops as time goes by. On one hand, the world is changing every day while the traditions should make some adjustment to adapt to the modern society. For example, bonze is a crowd of people which we are not familiar with. In past views, they are always staying in the temples and pattering all days. However, it's a little bit surprising that they are stepping out of the temples to learn some new technologies and conceptions gradually, even to surf the internet to get information. On the other hand, modernization is also based on the traditions. We see the cities are developing very quickly and skyscrapers are built everywhere, however, we can still see those buildings with traditional styles. They represent both the modernization and the tradition of the city.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that modernization is one of the themes of the modern world; however, traditions also plays a very important role in helping people memorizing our past days and keep our traditional customs. Thus in final analysis, only when we making a right combination of tradition and modernization can we live a better live in the modern society.

[ 本帖最后由 phillipsarea 于 2007-7-24 13:03 编辑 ]

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What's the relationship between tradition and modernization,  are theyincompatible? The author agree that they cannot exist at the same timeand one must choose between them. However, in my view, both thetradition and modernization function in the society.---
开头不错

To begin with, it's true that tradition is something that alwaysfunctions in our mental development. （这个中心句和下面的论证有些对不上）There're numerous races in theworld and each of them has their own characteristic and custom, whichcome down year by year. These customs and characteristics of each racehelp develop their unique ways of thinking and doing things, on bothmentally and physically. For instance, there're several races of whichpeople never eat pork, since they treat pigs as jinni. Instead, theyeat beef and mutton. Thus, if we are not familiar with their traditionand treat them with pork dishes, it leads to very serious result, justlike the christian offenses the Christ. Hence, tradition has itsspecial function when help with our mental development.（并没有说让我们有mental development，我们养成...的习惯，形成....的思维并不是mental development。）

Undeniable, tradition is very important. However, we're living in the21st century, how can a man always live by following a past ways oflife. In the modern society, the world is changing at an unimaginablespeed, in which sometimes the tradition does not always work. In somecircumstance, we should follow the latest thoughts and facts in orderto follow the pace of the developing society. For example, there'resome races in China which has such a custom: after the olds died, theyounger ones must stay at home to memorize and protect the olds' for aslong as months. I am not complaining that it's wrong, however, nowadaysit's not possible for someone to stop everything of his life just tostay at home. Younger people have the responsibility to memorize theolds, but they are able to keep it in mind instead of staying at homeand doing nothing at all except memorizing. Thus, sometimes people needto make some small changes in tradition in order to keep in pace withthe modern society.
这一段论证的不错。

Moreover, adding credibility to my position is the fact that traditionalso develops as time goes by. On one hand, the world is changing everyday while the traditions should make some adjustment to adapt to themodern society. For example, bonze is a crowd of people which we arenot familiar with. In past views, they are always staying in thetemples and pattering all days. However, it's a little bit surprisingthat they are stepping out of the temples to learn some newtechnologies and conceptions gradually, even to surf the internet toget information. On the other hand, modernization is also based on thetraditions. We see the cities are developing very quickly andskyscrapers are built everywhere, however, we can still see thosebuildings with traditional styles. They represent both themodernization and the tradition of the city.
最后的一小部分和这一段的论点有一些不对应。这一段的论点应该还要加上 tradition and modernization共存 就好了，然后再多在这方面论述一下。要不然首段里的这个论点的论述就太少了

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw ourconclusion that modernization is one of the themes of the modern world;however, traditions also plays a very important role in helping peoplememorizing our past days and keep our traditional customs. Thus infinal analysis, only when we making a right combination of traditionand modernization can we live a better live in the modern society.
每一段的论证比较清楚，呵呵大家进步都很快！希望注意一下段与段之间的关系

phillipsareaUID: 2318537

谢谢,我看看~

pesticideUID: 2359145

What's the relationship between tradition and modernization,  are they incompatible? The author agree that they cannot exist at the same time and one must choose between them. However, in my view, both the tradition and modernization function in the society.---

To begin with, it's true that tradition is something that always functions in our mental development. There're numerous races in the world and each of them has their own characteristic and custom, which come down year by year. These customs and characteristics of each race help develop their unique ways of thinking and doing things,(action) on (不用on吧)both mentally and physically. For instance, there're several races of which people never eat pork, since they treat pigs as jinni. Instead, they eat beef and mutton. Thus, if we are not familiar with their tradition and treat them with pork dishes, it leads to very serious result, just like the christian offenses the Christ. Hence, tradition has its special function when help with our mental development.

Undeniable, tradition is very important. However, we're living in the 21st century, how can a man always live by following a past ways of life. In the modern society, the world is changing at an unimaginable speed, in which sometimes the tradition does not always work. In some circumstance, we should follow the latest thoughts and facts in order to follow the pace of the developing society. For example, there're some races in China which has such a custom: after the olds died, the younger ones must stay at home to memorize and protect the olds' for as long as months.I am not complaining that it's wrong,however, nowadays it's not possible for someone to stop everything of his life just to stay at home. Younger people have the responsibility to memorize the olds, but they are able to keep it in mind instead of staying at home and doing nothing at all except memorizing. Thus, sometimes people need to make some small changes in tradition in order to keep in pace with the modern society.

Moreover, adding credibility to my position is the fact that tradition also develops as time goes by. On one hand, the world is changing every day while the traditions should make some adjustment to adapt to the modern society. For example, bonze is a crowd of people which we are not familiar with. In past views, they are always staying in the temples and pattering all days. However, it's a little bit surprising that they are stepping out of the temples to learn some new technologies and conceptions gradually, even to surf the internet to get information. On the other hand, modernization is also based on the traditions. We see the cities are developing very quickly and skyscrapers are built everywhere, however, we can still see those buildings with traditional styles. They represent both the modernization and the tradition of the city.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that modernization is one of the themes of the modern world; however, traditions also plays a very important role in helping people memorizing our past days and keep our traditional customs. Thus in final analysis, only when we making a right combination of tradition and modernization can we live a better live in the modern society.


总体论述不错，只是modernization 的论述似乎少了点。

[ 本帖最后由 pesticide 于 2007-7-24 19:28 编辑 ]

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谢谢!

ldongxpUID: 2311083

题目：ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
字数：553          用时：00:55:04          日期：2007-7-23 下午 10:51:43
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What's the relationship between tradition and modernization,  are they incompatible? [good] The author agree that they cannot exist at the same time and one must choose between them. However, in my view, both the tradition and modernization function in the society.

To begin with, it's true that tradition is something that always functions in our mental development. There're numerous races in the world and each of them has their own characteristic and custom, which come down year by year. These customs and characteristics of each race help develop their unique ways of thinking and doing things, on both mentally and physically. For instance, there're several races of which people never eat pork, since they treat pigs as jinni. Instead, they eat beef and mutton. Thus, if we are not familiar with their tradition and treat them with pork dishes, it leads to very serious result, just like the christian offenses the Christ. Hence, tradition has its special function when help with our mental development. [不知是不是表达问题，例子ms跟mental development不大联系]

Undeniable [过渡可以更紧密些] , tradition is very important. However, we're living in the 21st century, how can a man always live by following a past ways of life. In the modern society, the world is changing at an unimaginable speed, in which sometimes the tradition does not always work. In some circumstance, we should follow the latest thoughts and facts in order to follow the pace of the developing society. For example, there're some races in China which has such a custom: after the olds died, the younger ones must stay at home to memorize and protect the olds' for as long as months. I am not complaining that it's wrong, however, nowadays it's not possible for someone to stop everything of his life just to stay at home. Younger people have the responsibility to memorize the olds, but they are able to keep it in mind instead of staying at home and doing nothing at all except memorizing. Thus, sometimes people need to make some small changes in tradition in order to keep in pace with the modern society. [ 不错的说理]

Moreover, adding credibility to my position [that …] is the fact that tradition also develops as time goes by. On one hand, the world is changing every day while the traditions should make some adjustment to adapt to the modern society. For example, bonze is a crowd of people which we are not familiar with. In past views, they are always staying in the temples and pattering all days. However, it's a little bit surprising that they are stepping out of the temples to learn some new technologies and conceptions gradually, even to surf the internet to get information. On the other hand, modernization is also based on the traditions. We see the cities are developing very quickly and skyscrapers are built everywhere, however, we can still see those buildings with traditional styles. [这个例子不怎么好] They represent both the modernization and the tradition of the city.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that modernization is one of the themes of the modern world; however, traditions also plays a very important role in helping people memorizing our past days and keep our traditional customs. Thus in final analysis, only when we making a right combination of tradition and modernization can we live a better live in the modern society.
[注意下过渡句子会更好，另外注意紧扣中心]

phillipsareaUID: 2318537

谢谢!