laurie:
好的,拿到题目以后我还是愣了5分钟的,因为没有准备的太充分,是讲实用主义和理想主义的题目,ISSUE186
" Practicality is now our great idol, which all powers and talents must serve. Anything that is not obviously practical has little value in today's world." [05/21; 06/0]
实用主义是我们现在主要的追求,一切的力量和才智都必须为其服务。任何并非显著实用的东西在当今世界几乎是没有价值的。(当务之急和长远大计的关系)
laurie:
恩,同样是MASLOW的观点,人还有更高层次的多种需求。
最后,现实中的困难要求我们必须要有乐观的态度,以理想主义者的坚定来面对许多现实问题,比如解决贫困等。
最后的结尾段写的匆忙,但是肯定我最后用的是个问句,类似“Since human beings have always been dreaming about a brighter or even ideal future, why do we stop wishing now?"
laurie:
可以不要写具体的例子,比如说解决贫困问题,就可以说it is not practical to believe that poverty could be eliminated in the near future, yet we can work together towards that idealistic goal。强调关键词,把IDEAL和PRACTICAL这样的关键词写出来就好。自己的专业知识和网上的论据总结。而且我提纲列的比较详细,并且能把不大相关的例子扯成相关的。这点对于这次满重要的,因为我拿到I还是紧张的头脑空白了5分钟。
laurie:
恩就说这个好了
38.The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high,
people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school
and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid, a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil, as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
laurie:
开头段一句话概括作者的观点,不列具体论据The arguer professes that in order to prevent colds and lower absenteeism, the daily use of Ichthaid should be recommended in West Meria. Basted on a study in East Meria that links the fish consumption with the frequency of doctor treatment for colds, the fact that colds are the major reason for absences from school and work, and the expected effects of Ichthaid, the argument is well presented with detail information but is still far from satisfactorily reasons. 另外用一句话指出错误,不用废话
A threshold problem involved in the argument is the arguer's unfair assumption that frequency of visiting the doctor for treatment of colds is a substantiated and the only indicator of people's health in East Meria.
论证段落开始,第一句一般我都会用个逻辑错误的名称,比如unfair assumption之类,加上具体的错误。而且因为网络上first, second, last这样的结构用的太烂,我就不用了,靠内在的逻辑支持段落间的转折与联系。