issue99[AWER小组]第2次作业

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issue 99
[size=+0][size=+0]topic：In any realm of life - whether academic, social, business, or political - the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simper, more immediate opinions.

Should we choose the way of taking a pratical approachs to be succeed in any realm of life instead of an idealistic ones. In
some cases, I agree with the point for the limitations of people's capability. But idealistic views could provide motivation
to the man who earnestly pursue success.

In realm of life practical approachs which banlance all the interests for obtaining the success could point out a short way
to the goal for you. Practical behaviors, comparing to the idealistic ones, are more close to the facts. While the success in
realm life is based on the very facts. It could be understood easily for the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing needs the supports of public and so forth. In another
aspect, practical approachs is that the views for finding the shortest way to the target on considering circumstances
concernd with the process to success. Take the issue of hunting a job for example, if you only want to find a good job you
may abandon some abilities' practising which you want to have but the company does not concern.

The way to success in realm of life is a long term that the pursuers may abandon during the process. However the idealistic
views could give you an persistent power that practical ones could not. In everyday-life, there are many obstacles as living
stress, emotion problems and so forth prevent you from succeeding. We may be broken down if we don't have a dream for
obtaining the success that makes you fell in the summit of the mountain. Many scientiests' stories conform it. Siguang Li, a
Chinese geologists, has a dream that to find oil in China for in that time all the needs of oil in China must depend on
import. But int the process of searching the source of oil he must face many difficulties like eauipments and materials
lacking, terrible weather and complex data computing. However, his idealistic views help him insist on and then assure the
location of oil well in China.

Practical and idealistic approachs are both very vital for the success in realm life. Practical views could help you take all
the aspects that may affect the result into account. For solving the problem of lacking of long term's motivation,
idealistic views, like pure dreams, could give you a strong belief for obtaining success. The two weapons could beat all the
enemies .If you have both, then the success is not yet far from you.

In sum, the assertion that only way to succeed is to take a practical in realm life is too extreme. We should possess the
ability of treating issues in both practical and idealistic ways if we want to win the success.

coolfirewaterUID: 2284809

Should we choose the way of taking a pratical approachs to be succeed in any realm of life instead of an idealistic ones. In
some cases, I agree with恩hold the point也可以只是给你提供个选择呵呵 the point for the limitations of people's capability. But idealistic views could provide motivation
to the man who earnestly pursue success.

In realm of life practical approachs which banlance嘿嘿笔误了吧这个词考试记得拼写注意点噢 all the interests for obtaining the success could point out a short way
to the goal for you. Practical behaviors, comparing to the idealistic ones, are more close少个r哦closer to the facts. While the success in
realm life is based on the very facts. It could be understood easily for the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing election needs the supports of public and so forth. In another
aspect, practical approachs is that the views for finding the shortest way to the target on considering circumstances
concernd with the process to success. Take the issue of hunting a job for example, if you only这里only感觉换个词或者换个用法弄个倒装啥的，多点花样嘛 want to find a good job you
may abandon some abilities' practising which you want to have but the company does not concern.

The way to success in realm of life is a long term that the pursuers may abandon during the process. However the idealistic
views could give you an persistent power that practical ones could not. In everyday-life能用连字符吗我不知道噢告诉我，听新东方说用标点种类多有好处的呢, there are many obstacles as加个such比较好 living
stress, emotion problems and so forth 叫我学会了个短语呵呵我只会and so on prevent you from succeeding. We may be broken down if we don't have a dream for
obtaining the success that makes you fell in the summit of the mountain. Many scientiests' stories conform it是不是用conform ti短语更好. Siguang Li, a
Chinese geologists, has a dream that to find oil in China for in that time all the needs of oil in China must depend on
import. But int注意拼写啊兄弟 the process of searching the source of oil he must face many difficulties like eauipments哈哈！！！ and materials
lacking, terrible weather and complex data computing. However, his idealistic views help himhelp后面要加to do吧好像 insist on and then assure the
location of oil well in China.

Practical and idealistic approachs are both very vital for the success in realm life. Practical views could help you take all
the aspects that may affect the result into account. For solving the problem of lacking of long term's motivation,
idealistic views, like pure dreams, could give you a strong belief for obtaining success. The two weapons could beat all the
enemies .If you have both, then the success is not yet是不是去掉yet看着更舒服点 far from you.

In sum, the assertion that only way to succeed is to take a practical in realm life is too extreme.应该不是偏激而是不完整吧换个词好些？ We should possess the
ability of treating issues in both practical and idealistic ways if we want to win the success.


观点平衡，详略得当

多注意点细节方面的问题就更好！！！！

loulanshredUID: 2202169

Should we choose the way of taking a pratical approachs(a+singular ,approach) to be succeed in any realm of life instead of an idealistic ones(one). In
some cases, I agree with the point for the limitations of people's capability. But idealistic views could provide motivation
to the man who earnestly pursue success.

In (the) realm of life practical approachs(plural---approaches) which banlance(balance) all the interests for obtaining the success could point out a short way
to the goal for you(the chaser, 注意，在学术性的议论文中，最好不要用we,you,people, xdf讲义上说的是“非人称主语原则”。我不是很懂，但好像用泛指的确更学术一些。). Practical behaviors, comparing(貌似compared更顺一些) to the idealistic ones, are more close(closer) to the facts. While the success in realm life (in the realm of life 好像用得频繁了，何不试试 in any region of life) is based on the very facts. It could be understood easily for the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing(election) needs the supports of public and so forth. In another
aspect, practical approachs(approach) is that the views(view) for finding (换个in order to find,觉得你文中for的频率最高喽。呵呵)the shortest way to the target on considering circumstances
concernd(concerned) with the process to success. Take the issue of hunting a job for example(instance, 最好不要一词常用，呵呵), if you (不用you,用one更有说服力)only want to find a good job you
may abandon some abilities' practising which you want to have but the company does not concern. （合楼上意思，用个倒装—only by abandoning parctising other abilities which the one is interested in,but not the employers’, could the one hunt a good job.）

The way to success in realm of life(in the realm of life 换成 in most fields of life) is a long term that the pursuers may abandon during the process. However(,)the idealistic
views could give you an persistent power that practical ones could not. In everyday-life, there are many obstacles as living
stress, emotion problems and so forth prevent you from succeeding. We ( you,we显得太不学术了，自己斟酌的换吧。用one,he/she都可)may be broken down if we don't have a dream for
obtaining the success that makes you fell in the summit of the mountain. Many scientiests' stories conform it. Siguang Li, a (one of )
Chinese geologists, has(had) a dream that to find oil in China for in that time all the needs of oil in China must depend on
import. But int(in) the process of searching the source of oil he must face many difficulties like eauipments and materials
lacking, terrible weather and complex data computing. However,(Yet,换个说法，好像赞一些) his idealistic views help(helped) him insist on and then assure(assured) the
location of oil well in China.

Practical and idealistic approachs(means,methods,ways,accesses) are both very vital for the success in realm life(换换relating to almost all the areas of life). Practical views could help you take all
the aspects that may affect the result into account. For solving the problem of lacking of long term's motivation,
(衔接过渡，最好用个词，at the same time, on the other hand, while)idealistic views, like pure dreams, could give you a strong belief for obtaining success. The two weapons could beat all the
enemies .If you have both, then the success is not yet far from you.

In sum, the assertion that only way to succeed is to take a practical in realm life is too extreme(切忌学术文章用感情色彩过浓的词汇，不妨用subjective,broad,或是换成in any fields of life is unreasonable,  unpursuasive). We should possess the
ability of treating issues in both practical and idealistic ways if we want to win the success.

拼写是得改进，这么挑刺你别骂我噢。呵呵
1，        楼主的思路是对的。但例子单薄，有望能就一点深入的剖析，而不是举空洞的例子（for the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing(election) needs the supports of public and so forth）
2，        还是老话，学术型文章，最好不要用you ,we people, 常用的是第三人称。I 常用于开头和结尾段。
3，        ，加油！-----Nightingale 32638396仅供参考

loulanshredUID: 2202169

不好意思，刚才的忘了改颜色这回补上---洗澡澡去喽。
Should we choose the way of taking a pratical approachs(a+singular ,approach) to be succeed in any realm of life instead of an idealistic ones(one). In
some cases, I agree with the point for the limitations of people's capability. But idealistic views could provide motivation
to the man who earnestly pursue success.

In (the) realm of life practical approachs(plural---approaches) which banlance(balance) all the interests for obtaining the success could point out a short way
to the goal for you(the chaser, 注意，在学术性的议论文中，最好不要用we,you,people, xdf讲义上说的是“非人称主语原则”。我不是很懂，但好像用泛指的确更学术一些。). Practical behaviors, comparing(貌似compared更顺一些) to the idealistic ones, are more close(closer) to the facts. While the success in realm life (in the realm of life 好像用得频繁了，何不试试 in any region of life) is based on the very facts. It could be understood easilyfor the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing(election) needs the supports of public and so forth. In another
aspect, practical approachs(approach) is that the views(view) for finding (换个in order to find,觉得你文中for的频率最高喽。呵呵)the shortest way to the target on considering circumstances
concernd(concerned) with the process to success. Take the issue of hunting a job for example(instance, 最好不要一词常用，呵呵), if you(不用you,用one更有说服力)only want to find a good job you
may abandon some abilities' practising which you want to have but the company does not concern.（合楼上意思，用个倒装—only by abandoning parctising other abilities which the one is interested in,but not the employers’, could the one hunt a good job.）
The way to success in realm of life(in the realm of life 换成 in most fields of life) is a long term that the pursuers may abandon during the process. However(,)the idealistic
views could give you an persistent power that practical ones could not. In everyday-life, there are many obstacles as living
stress, emotion problems and so forth prevent you from succeeding. We ( you,we显得太不学术了，自己斟酌的换吧。用one,he/she都可)may be broken down if we don't have a dream for
obtaining the success that makes you fell in the summit of the mountain. Many scientiests' stories conform it. Siguang Li, a (one of )
Chinese geologists, has(had) a dream that to find oil in China for in that time all the needs of oil in China must depend on
import. But int(in) the process of searching the source of oil he must face many difficulties like eauipments and materials
lacking, terrible weather and complex data computing. However,(Yet,换个说法，好像赞一些)his idealistic views help(helped) him insist on and then assure(assured)the
location of oil well in China.

Practical and idealistic approachs(means,methods,ways,accesses)are both very vital for the success in realm life(换换relating to almost all the areas of life). Practical views could help you take all
the aspects that may affect the result into account. For solving the problem of lacking of long term's motivation,
(衔接过渡，最好用个词，at the same time, on the other hand, while)idealistic views, like pure dreams, could give you a strong belief for obtaining success. The two weapons could beat all the
enemies .If you have both, then the success is not yet far from you.

In sum, the assertion that only way to succeed is to take a practical in realm life is too extreme(切忌学术文章用感情色彩过浓的词汇，不妨用subjective,broad,或是换成in any fields of life is unreasonable,  unpursuasive). We should possess the
ability of treating issues in both practical and idealistic ways if we want to win the success.

拼写是得改进，这么挑刺你别骂我噢。呵呵
1，    楼主的思路是对的。但例子单薄，有望能就一点深入的剖析，而不是举空洞的例子（for the examples like good marks needs sufficient
reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing(election) needs the supports of public and so forth）
2，    还是老话，学术型文章，最好不要用you ,we people, 常用的是第三人称。I 常用于开头和结尾段。
3，    加油！-----Nightingale 32638396仅供参考

陈星君UID: 2416582

issue99 In any realm of life - whether academic, social, business, or political - the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superseded by simper, more immediate opinions.

Should we choose the way of taking a practical approachs to be succeed in any realm of life instead of an idealistic ones.[?] In some cases, I agree with the point for the limitations of people's capability. But idealistic views could provide motivation to the man who earnestly pursue success.[But是否太强了点,下面的第二,三段的字数差不多哎,即practical approachs...与idealistic approachs...同等重要,来个however让步如何?纯个人观点]

In realm of life practical approachs which banlance all the interests for obtaining the success could point out a short way to the goal for you.[是否例举一些for obtaining 的practical approachs,下面的第二,三句话好象又在重叙]  Practical behaviors, comparing to the idealistic ones, are more close to the facts. While the success in realm [of] life is based on the very facts. It could be understood easily for the examples like[去like换that] good marks[去s] needs sufficient reviewing, companies' thriving needs enough money, winning the electing needs the supports of public and so forth. In another aspect, practical approachs is[are] that the views for finding the shortest way to the target on considering circumstances concernd with the process to success. Take the issue of hunting a job for example, if you only want to find a good job you may abandon some abilities' practising which you want to have but the company does not concern.[太笼统了,尽管我知道你要说什么,但老米未必能看懂你的心思.hunting a job for example,再具体一点,跟上你的分论点]

The way to success in realm of life is a long term that the pursuers may abandon during the process. However the idealistic views could give you[the pursuers]  an persistent power that practical ones could not. In everyday-life, there are many obstacles as living stress, emotion problems and so forth[that] prevent you[people] from succeeding. We[They] may be broken down if we[they] don't have a dream for obtaining the success that makes you[them] fell in the summit of the mountain. Many scientiests' stories conform it. Siguang Li, a Chinese geologists, has[had] a dream that[去that] to find oil in China for[去for]in that time [because] all the needs of oil in China must depend on import. But in the process of searching the source of oil he must face many difficulties like eauipments and materials lacking, terrible weather and complex data computing. However, his idealistic views help[ed] him insist on and then assure[d] the location of oil well in China.

Practical and idealistic approachs are both very vital for the success in realm life. Practical views could help you take all the aspects that may affect the result into account. For solving the problem of lacking of long term's motivation, idealistic views, like pure dreams, could give you a strong belief for obtaining success. The two weapons could beat all the enemies .If you have both, then the success is not yet far from you.

In sum, the assertion that only way to succeed is to take a practical in realm life is too extreme. We[people] should possess the ability of treating issues in both practical and idealistic ways if we[they]want to win the success.[后面两段是否可放于一段中,都是总结性的话语.纯个人观点]


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