COMEON作文小组------jiwasun 11月12日作业

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People will spend less time in cooking or preparing food in twenty years.（07.11.24）

Whether or not the general public will spend less time in the cooking and preparing food in the following twenty years is a complex issue which has generated a heated debate. The proponents claim that the time cost on the preparation of food will not decrease because cook is an art. As far as I am concerned, contrary to many people, the time spent in the cooking food will decrease tremendously due to the technological development.

The first reason to support my point is that the preparation of the raw food materials will be much more convenient than before. It is a fact that when we are dealing with a dinner, we have to buy the raw food materials from the market first, clean them, and then cook them. It is a time-consuming task that we cannot complete them all in just one hour. However, these raw food materials will be packaged in the boxes after careful selection and well cleaning. All the things we need to do is to go to a supermarket to buy them directly. Apparently, compared to the time we spent on the raw food material preparation, it is be much less in the near two decades.

It constitute another cause for my argument that the cooking process will be much shorter than before. Human beings have been using the traditional cooking method that takes advantages of the fire to heat the pots and pans for hundreds of thousands of years. Certainly, it is an effective way in the cooking to make the food change from the raw materials to the delicious dishes. However, people nowadays are becoming more and more reluctant to tolerate this cooking method in that it is definitely time-consuming. Whilst, the truly new invented ovens, such as microwave oven, has turned the time measured by minutes, rather than by hours when in the utilization of the fire. Therefore, more this kind of appliances will be eqipped in the kitchen in the following twenty years, and the time to finish this process will further less.

In sum, from the discussion above, we can reach the conclusion that less time will be spent in cooking or preparation food in the near two decades.

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Whether or not the general public will spend less time in the cooking and preparing food in the following twenty years is a complex issue which has generated a heated debate. The proponents claim that the time cost on the preparation of food will not decrease because cooking is an art. As far as I am concerned, contrary to many people, the time spent in the cooking food will decrease tremendously due to the technological development.R
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The first reason to support my point is that the preparation of the raw food materials will be much more convenient than before. It is a fact that when we are dealing with a dinner, we have to buy the raw food materials from the market first, clean them, and then cook them. （It is a time-consuming task that we cannot complete them all in just one hour. 这类it is ...that...的结构用得太多了吧，而且这句还不知道是强调还是同位语从句。）However, these raw food materials will be packaged in the boxes after careful selection and well cleaning. All the things we need to do is to go to a supermarket to buy them directly. Apparently, compared to the time we spent on the raw food material表达食材可以有很多方法啊，ingredient 比较好一点preparation, it is be much less in the near two decades.bK `z$wFEq/@#t
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It constitutes another cause for my argument that the cooking process will be much shorter than before. Human beings have been using the traditional cooking method that takes advantages of the fire to heat the pots and pans for hundreds of thousands of years. Certainly, it is an effective way in the cooking to make the food change from the raw materials to the delicious dishes. However, people nowadays are becoming more and more reluctant to tolerate this cooking method in that it is definitely time-consuming. Whilst这个词一般用于文学作品，放在这里有点过了, the truly new invented ovens, such as microwave oven, has turned the time measured by minutes, rather than by hours when in the utilization of the fire. Therefore, more this kind of appliances will be eqipped in the kitchen in the following twenty years, and the time to finish this process will further less.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAv3a0AyO9iHM
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In sum, from the discussion above, we can reach the conclusion that less time will be spent in cooking or preparation food in the near two decades.
第二次看楼主的作文了，看来模板用得很熟练嘛。。。呵呵
我跟lz的思路有点不同，我认为时间减少的原因是人们生活方式的改变而不愿意去做饭，所以整个写下来思路也很不一样。
看lz的结构还是不错，但是词汇还有句法用的有些地方很牵强，看起来有些奇怪了。不一定非要用到那些所谓的又长又华丽的东西。逻辑上应该更清晰一点就好了。。。
一点点小建议，互相学习！有空帮我改改吧！:handshake

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谢谢楼主点评，这周六就要考了，一点底都没有，所以还要努力，时间紧张，回来一定帮楼主改