0606G同主题写作第六期——Argument145

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Outlines in Chinese:
开头段：复述原文的基本假设、证据、结论、建议和推理路线。指出其中的逻辑错误。
1)        原文假设许多打鼾的人都有间歇性呼吸停顿，来支持结论。但是关于许多这个词，关键的统计信息缺失了。
2)        睡眠呼吸停顿不一定是人们睡眠问题的唯一原因。例如，打鼾一般是由神经系统疾病引起的，神经系统疾病才是主要原因。
3)        大多数人甚至都感觉不到的睡眠呼吸停顿又怎么能引起使得人第二点缺乏精力呢？可能会有其他原因：比如被同屋睡觉的人打搅。
4)        即时上边的假设都成立，建议因打鼾精神不好的人用多运动甚至少吃的方法控制体重，这样可能对健康不好。
结论段：重新强调原文的逻辑缺陷，并且给出修改意见。

Outlines in English:
Introduction Paragraph: Reclaim the basic assumption, evidence, conclusion, recommendation and reasoning line of the statement above. Point out that the statement has logic fallacies as below:
1)        The statement uses the assumption that many people who snore also stop breathing frequently during the night as an evidence to support the conclusion. However, key information about that survey on snore person has not been provided.
2)        Sleep apnea, which is caused by breath interruption, may not be the only reason for a people’s sleeping problems, a lot of people with nervous system illness.
3)        If the sleep apnea is goes so unnoticed that most people cannot even feel it, how can it be so serious to get people exhausted for the next day’s activities? There may be some other reason of it, for example disturbing by other people who sleep in the same room.
4)        Even given the assumption that snoring people will get very tired in the morning, the recommendation of taking more exercise even eat less to avoid putting on weight is not suitable in the consideration of a human being’s health.
Conclusion Paragraph: Reemphasize the logical fallacy of the statement and give a little advice for improvement.