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题目：ISSUE11 - "All nations should help support the development of a global university designed to engage students in the process of solving the world's most persistent social problems."

提纲
1.很多问题是全球的
2.global university将各国的力量联合起来，更可能解决问题
3.还有很多实际的问题需要解决

The course of globalization and the technological enhancements bring on not only convenient and modern life but also more complex problems than ever before, or even crises, which gestates the opinion of developing a global university in order to sole the world's most persistent social problems. To serve the inward purpose, the university will also have a long way to go--forming, storming, norming and eventually performing.

It is the global nature of the problems that put forward the requirement that all the countries in the world should cooperate with each other--probably in the form of a university--to settle the impediments which we are in face of. An increasing number of international problems have become so serious that they have been threatening the evolution or even the survival of human beings and other innocent species, such as the environmental pollution, the energy crisis, the warming up of the climate, the depletion of the atmospheric ozone, the intimidation of the terrorism, to name a few. At present, in order to achieve and maintain a place in the furious competition, more and more business take a global strategy, which means enlarging their proportion of the limited market and reducing the cost by taking advantage of the labor forces, skills, energy and technologies all over the world. Any fluctuations in political policies, the legal system, and the macro economy can poses pressure and risk to the multinational corporation and other nations. Whichever country will feel incompetent and feeble in face of these tough tasks.

As the problems are global, the solutions should also be global. Aside from the ameliorations and improvements of our daily life, the scientific discoveries and technological advancements also produce more intricate and terrible problems, the treatment of the AIDS or cancers, the procedures to better control the nuclear-power and disposition of the pollutants like plastic exhausted from the everyday life. A global university can bring together the excellent experts and academicians, the finite funds, along with the diverse ideology and methodology. With the blurred boarders of cultures, nationalities and races, the most advanced technologies and discoveries can be gathered and work together for the good of the earth as a whole, and the absolutely different visual angle and thought way may become an especial inspiration of the research. The assertion that the most terrible danger is produced by man is somewhat reasonable. Taking the conflicts and wars between nations and cultures for example, only with mutual understanding and toleration can we reduce the possibility of the replay of that kind of catastrophes? The university may be a good place to provide the environment for cultivating this international spirit from the young.

Before it can serve its purpose functionally, the university would encounter a substantial amount of threatens and temptations for its own sake. The diversity, whether political, religious, cultural or lingual will promise some conflicts and impediments that may even jeopard the existence of the university itself. The decisions about which area is more important or which problem is more urgent may be influenced by the politics, and then the university may become a tool serving the most powerful country in the world. As the lesson of the genetic industry in the Soviet Union in the Stalin era tells, the science hardly functions as well as it should under the direct interruption of the government. These practical concerns heavily undermine the realization of the idea to build a global university.   

Although the global university can create and provide the environment and conditions needed to do some scientific research, there is no guarantee to the solutions, let alone the implementation. As the experience tells, the major purpose of college education is to improve the comprehensive diathesis of the students and to help them shape their own system of values and cognition concerning the world and life. Thus, the determinant in the process of solving the persistent global problems may be the enhancement of the international cognitions and reinforce the coordination of the whole human being. To that global university, if can be constituted one day, universalism should be one of the basically scientific guidelines, which indicates that the authenticity of scientific knowledge must be judged by the impersonal criteria of the scientific method, not by criteria related to the race, nationality, religion ,gender or political ideology.
   

[ 本帖最后由 iq28 于 2007-6-26 02:05 编辑 ]

luky0616UID：2296288

改的很好的，有很多地方我一直想到怎么写合适，感谢啊

luky0616UID：2296288

先谢过，慢慢看

luky0616UID：2296288

改得很好啊，刚刚开始写，所以问题还很多，希望能多提意见，呵呵

有几个问题解释一下
1.第一段里首先说人类的进步带来了很多问题（第二段论证），这些问题需要全人类来解决（第三段），但建立大学还有很多困难（第四段）我没用过I agree.....之类的，觉得是太明显的restate，不过看来还是要有些标志词的

2.我第二段是想说问题是全球的，第三段想说问题的解决也要依靠世界各国的力量，但总觉得写出来会有所重叠。而且是半夜赶出来的，当时的思路真是。。。。。第三段里面我从两方面来说如何来依靠世界的力量，一个是学术方面可以带来很多新技术，新理论，和思维方式，另一个是社会问题，可以通过文化的融合减少民族冲突。

3.我结尾里面第一句是一个全文的总结，因为我觉得这些问题在全文都有详细论述，无论怎样改写都会看起来枯燥，没内容，我后面就没再讲这三个问题，而是展开了一下，先说大学并不是解决问题的根本办法，决定因素在于各民族的相关理解和宽容（其实想说是由政治因素决定，只是政治不好不敢发明评论，呵呵）最后说了一下要想建好这个大学就要本着一个原则（universalism)，忠于事实，不受种族， 国籍，文化，政治的干扰

差不多这样子

PS：我有时写着写着就会偏离自己想的，有时很难用英文说清楚自己确定想说的，不能切中要害，自己也觉得一直在打擦边球，但就是不知道该怎么表达。

不过看了笑看红尘的修改收获不小，正在打算大改一下

欢迎高人指点，呵呵