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topic: Do you agree or disagree: It is important to know about what is happening around the world, even if it doesn't affect your personal lives.
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Bertrand Russell once said there are three passions that have governed his life: the longing for love, the search for knowledge, and unbearable pity for the suffering of mankind. Although nowadays a sizable percentage of people claim that they would symphony with a dying squirrel in front of their gate more than those hungry African refugees, I still drove [改成被动语态?]by the passions Russell advocated. We should know what is happening in the[删去 in the] worldwide, even if it has nothing to do with our daily lives, because the hunger for knowledge and care to the suffering of poor people obliged us to be concerned with.
First, knowing what is happening around the world, especially in the undeveloped areas, by reading newspaper or watching television can help us better understanding the meaning of life[觉得主题和下面的拓展似乎有些偏差。下面的论述主要侧重得知这些消息之后我们就帮助他们,中间好像缺了什么,是不是加上“我们本以为平凡的日常生活是多么的宝贵幸福”,对比之下更能体会她们的艰苦,从而帮助他们……]. As an individual, we only had [现在时就行]limited experiences, but with the merits of modern communications media, we can acknowledge that there are countless child laborers in Indonesia, millions of citizens suffering from war in Iraq and billions of Africans who are in the edge of death with the threat of hunger and disease. We may have no family members or friends in these countries, but we can also help them with giving speech or financing them. Bored our horizon by caring for the disadvantage groups will make the world a better place.[这句似乎也有问题]
Besides, the news and political arguments can help us understand the civilization of humans and the spirits democracy deeply, which may have some beneficial [改成名词]in our own life. For example, I like to[删除] the sections about law in the newspaper, some cases about speech freedom with the detailed definition of the Constitutional Amendment taught me how important the criticism of people is valued[这句有语病。]. And when looking back into my life, I realized that I should not turn a deaf ear to the honest advice from my friends. In another word, news is my scholarly mentor and beneficial [印象中通常只用作表语]friend.
As for the latest discoveries in science and technology, we can also know the world deeply and become a versatile person by following the news. In my part time, I devoted a lot of time watching TED, which is short for technology, entertainment and design. Leaders in their own profession will deliver a speech of their findings and how can they be applied in our life in every episode. This is a bridge of theory and application of the modern technology and thoughts. And it enlarged my scope of knowledge and promoted my quality of life.
Knowing what is happening in different realms, cannot make us a fortune right now. But it enlightens us with subjects we [少了be]curious about, and in the same time, remind us to help others.
关于立论什么的基本没有问题了,但是在行文方面还是会有一些明显的语法问题。希望写完之后一定要认真纠一遍错,把这些问题记下来,尽量克制。如果能保证文章没有语病,拿good应该没有问题的。 |
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