issue同主题写作第五类 8月20-21日

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issue 104/107
To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
我选择用第二种方式构建框架，从不同角度说明。

I totally agree that a public official leader who wants to be effective needs to maintain the highest ethical and moral standards. People having high moral and ethical standards tend to be more successful and disciplinary because when considering about something, there always are doctrines of humanity and disciplines of working knock them to plan and arrange anything in order and in a justified way. Moreover, sticking to high ethical and moral standards help them in their private life.
TS1：It’s the key that maintaining the highest ethical and moral standards to prevent the public official from corruption, reducing much unnecessary trouble.
e.g. Chief Xi in China takes many measures to beat the corruption and is strict with officials, especially those officials who have strong power. And after his striking on corruption and power using, the whole system of China improves in implements of policy and development of economy.
TS2: Those leader officials with high standards for themselves can set a good example for their subordinates.
e.g. A group is like a tree, the leader is trunk and the workers are branches. Only the leader has a good disciplines to correct and regulate their own leadership, the core strength can be strong and gather the group towards a clear direction to make achievements. Subordinates can learn from their leader as an example so that they can be of unity.
TS3: People always follow the high criterions to work are likely to treat their life strictly and principled.
e.g My mentor is a woman who makes an importance both on efficiency and quality in researches and study. After I know more about her life, I recognize that she is a principle person in everything and she put anything whatever is about work or life in order, which, helps her do anything effectively.

范文连贯性分析
Without being tested by demands for leadership, people often assume leadership positions by demonstrating strong communication skills that are important for dealing with situations in which they have to lead others to solve problems. In the field of academic researches, for example, senior researchers have to communicate their research findings and the vision about how the discipline would advance clearly and persuasively to the fellow researchers in order to take up leadership positions such as editors of top journals and chairpersons of the academic societies. They also need to demonstrate their willingness to listen to other members of the research community and understand their ideas and concerns about the field.  Such strong communication skills would enable them to become leaders in the field and help others to meet the challenges.  

点评46楼

1）提纲的框架是否合理？
合理
2）提纲所用的例子是否合适？
第二个点下边的例子我没有看太懂，我能大概猜到你的意思。但是我觉得可能不是很好地支持论点。
3）开头段语言方面有哪些问题？
没有