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202# lbsophia

TOPIC: ISSUE70 - "In any profession-business, politics, education,government-those in power should step down after five years. The surestpath to success for any enterprise is revitalization through newleadership."
WORDS: 588          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-4-9 11:30:39

In many professions, like politics, government, and business, those inpower should step down after five years, because these enterprises needrevitalization through new leadership. However, this is not the surestpath to success for any enterprise, since there might be requirement ofa leadership who can lead the enterprise to make a plan andcontinuously constructing（这里的constructing是什么意思，好像从语法上说也不太合适）.

（第一段感觉比较平淡，而且转折部分的理由没有说清楚）

I agree that in many professions, like politics, government, andbusiness, those in power should step down after five years, to makerevitalization through new leadership possible for these enterprises.We know that the leaders who have taken power (掌权是take into power/ be in power) for a long time willprobably be restricted to the conserved policies, and unwilling to makechanges because of fearing for taking adventures. If the enterprisedoes not run well and there is no such a policy that those in powershould step down after a term like five years, the situation would beat stake. The leaders may not realize what's wrong with the enterpriseand insist on their policy, thus the enterprise would definetly godown(be definetly worse).  On the contrary, if there is a chance that other individuals canbecome a leader within a not so long time, the enterprise couldpossibly be saved and revitalized by the changes of new leaders (换个人就能立马解决问题吗？). Such aprinciple can be suitable for many professions such as politics andbusiness. Therefore, I think the policy should become a common sensefor many professions that those in power should not hold the power fora long time.

（我明白作者的意思，但是在表达上作者没有把领导换届的好处，和不换届的坏处说透。另外如果有实际的例子就会好的多。比如说举例中国的皇帝，老了不中用了还在当皇帝，国家自然治理不好）

Besides, such a policy can also benefit the enterprise since it canprovide opportunities for new comers（newcomers） to take charge of the enterprise.Such opportunities can form a stimulus for the yong to work hardbecause they know that there is a chance for them to take power of theenterprise and realize their own blueprint of their career. Therefore,the enterprise would be promising because everyone wants to work betterand achieve something. Such morale is the consequence of the democraticpolicy to give everyone a chance by setting the length of a leader'sterm. （能换届并不能说就一定是民主政治）

（这里可以举例，比如有了换届，美国大选奥巴马和麦凯恩才会去努力竞争，民众才会看到希望等等。）

However, we cannot say that the surest path to success for anyenterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Sometimes, it iseven more important for the leader to have enough long time to fulfiltheir plans and constructions of the enterprise. For example, there isa survey once conducted on the average lenghth of terms of a presidentin Harvard University, and the result was 13.9 years. It is much longerthan five years as the topic suggested. This is because in education,the president in a college needs a long time to conduct(lead) an education reformation.Recruiting potential professors and discovering an efficient way oflearning would take a long time. And such a complete plan onconstruction should always be conducted by the same leading group dueto its requirement of integrity. It would cost too much and a long timeto form a new one to take hand of such an uncompleted project. What'smore, in a new term, the president may have his own thoughts and plansabout how to improve the quality of the education of the school, and what has not yet done will becasted away and thus becomes a great loss since no result comes outdespite of the money already spended. Under this situation, therestriction of the lenghth of a leader's term would do harm to theenterprise.

In conclusion, I agree that in some professions such as politics andbusiness, those in power should step down after five years or some. Butthe revitalization is not the surest way to make success since weshould consider the cost and price for an enterprise to adopt newpolicies and plans in a new term of leadership.

建议：能在开头和结尾再下点功夫，特别是开头能更吸引人些。另外，论证的思路再理一理。

RolinWuUID：2625938

"The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus.
words: 588   time:50:00   date:2009-4-8
By analyzing the assertion of the author ,it seems that there is a severe conflict between the pursuit of an ideal and searching for common ground and reasonable consensus in politics. Is that really the case ?I am afraid i can not admit it thoroughly. while i concede that sometimes the present situation（我觉得有了sometimes,再有present就有点怪异，去掉present可能会好一点） is indeed quite far from the one idealistic (建议用句酷搜索要表达的意群）,but it is too extreme （extreme已经是极限，应该不用加too了）and unreasonable to simply give up the ideal, because ideal still plays an enormously important (enormously似乎形容important不妥）role in politics.
To begin with, i would like to introduce a famous argument of a celebrity, "Ideal is the beacon, without ideal there is no secure direction, and without direction there is no life."（如果表述名人名言，不描述此人的背景，似乎引证无效~建议为保险起见，还是把主题句放在段首）
For a politician ,it is necessary to have a ideal keep in mind, not withstanding some thing drift in the air. The ideal just act as a campus（？？）, setting the directions and make the whole system operating within the proper circumscribe. It is not to deny the reality that in some period the whole society would develop in an definitely（a definitely) alternative way even the opposite direction(感觉缺少介词~这句有点奇怪~是不是应该改成IT's not to deny the reality that in some period, the whole society would develop in a definitely alternative way that even in the opposite direction）, because the history tells us ,the way of revolution is quite a suffering road (用road感觉有点chinglish，建议改为process或者用句酷查意群）encountering different trials and obstacles. And I consider it is pretty much the case （建议书面语化一点）why should a politician keep his ideal in mind, just only by stick to it can he regain the right direction and not be confusing by the present stuff.（感觉这一段论证的不是很充分，或者可以考虑再论证得不言自明一点~）
Moreover, it is through the democratic procedure that eventually a politician take the leader place of a government, so it is undoubtedly that he or she will certainly represent the attitude of majority since he or she won the election .It is admitted that the faith of a politician should be nothing else but to organize the whole country efficiently ,improve the social facilities, make the economy flourish and finally enable his people to take advantage of all the good things（还是chinglish了~）. Don't you think （课上老师讲过，尽量不要用you这样的人称代词，要不然考官感觉像被指着鼻子说话一样~可以考虑别的反问方式）this ideal just matches the common ground and reasonable consensus of the ordinary citizens perfectly? Abraham Lincoln was keen on his ideal that all the black slaves should be treated just like the white people equally(equally放到treated后） ,that is just the consensus of majority people in that period .Without the dream of Martin Luther King ,it is possible to have separate zone for black and white in a bus. These facts convince us that only when the ideal of a politician meet the consensus of the majority, （逗号可去掉）can it be supported and realized ultimately.
However, when difference occurs between the ideal and common ground, there should be one side taking a compromise, and that could be either the politician or the common people. It is more obvious in economic business. Several years ago ,the real-estate business flourished very much ,most of the citizens invest their rest money
the into the real-estate market（the是干什么用的~？）, bringing a severe crisis that the price soars without people actually live in..In order to slow down the up rising price ,the government took the control of the market and compressed the price ,which is called government interference ,certainly it was harmful to the common ground trend, but it did secure the stability of our society as well as the healthy developing of the economy.（这个例子似乎并不能证明compromise和ideal之间的关系~）

All in all, the ideal and common ground are both indispensable to secure a society operating in a right direction. T he politician should not given up his faith ,and by solving the coming up problems in time can he or she eventually heat the target step by step.

总体感觉论证还不是很清晰~~
改文有点毒舌，sorry啦~

RolinWuUID：2625938

51# ”Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student.”

Controversy concerned about how courses designed for each student arose at the birth of education. It’s widely believed that education should be rationed based on different needs and interests of each students while some educators argue that if so, effectiveness would be determined.  Design on education calls for a balance in which there are both concern about individual needs and about basic knowledge for adaption of everyday life, yet student-oriented courses needs further development.

Individual interests that generate curiosity, the main activation of study, weigh much in process of education. Students are absorbed more when the courses are designed based on their own need; which, at the same time, means that education is truly effective. Confucius, the great teacher and educator in ancient China, accentuated the importance of individual needs and interests that he once said (and I paraphrase):” One of the neediest qualities that a teacher should have is to know what the students are interested in and then how to guide them further in their favorite domain.” This illustrates the point that education, process of fostering talents to serve for society, is better effective when it considers what the students are interested in and then design based on it.

Unfortunately, traditional teacher-oriented courses often reflect the wrong need of students and eliminate the diversity which is essential in education that could possibly have. The base of teacher-oriented education is the process of imparting what the students should know, assuming by teachers, instead of offering what the students want and would be interested in. Thus, student-oriented courses can most effectively involve individual students in education process. To demonstrate the point obviously, here’s and example that is very convincing. Edison, who was proclaimed inept in study by his teacher in elementary school, later educated individually by his mother who, oppositely, believed that he was a genius. History proves that his mother was right and apparently, the reason why Edison was regarded as a slow student at school was that he was made to accept teacher-oriented courses that not interested him at all.

However, student-oriented courses should be based on the rational individual desire. Extremely reliance on student’s interest is unavailable. If the design of courses fails to evaluate the importance on some basic subjects, it can not be seen as a qualified education. Every student is asked to study math in elementary education process, for mathematic is important knowledge because it is relevant to daily life. Though individual interest is considered, it cannot be exaggerated too much since chaos in education may be caused if unreasonable students’ desire is winking.

Accordingly, education is a complicated process that calls for delicate design which concerns individual needs, ones that accelerate students to search further, while keeping orders of education by imparting basic subjects. Since everyone is different, focus on individual interest, one that was overlooked for a long period, is significant. Thus, better designed education equals to further development of students in which they are satisfied both happiness derived from the process of gaining knowledge but also greater potential in their future career. All in all, educators should pay more attention on individual interests when designing courses.

第一篇认真写的issue，希望大家多多指教

RolinWuUID：2625938

占位改195

leslinUID：2571497

203# zad

多去New York Times这样的地方转转，还有写作文之前可以在网上搜搜相关的内容（英文），会有不错的收获，还有#191需改啊，为什么冷了呢

zadUID：2507560

202# lbsophia

占位改202

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192# leslin

谢谢修改，确实我的例子太老，请问有没有好的办法短时间能扩大自己的例子库。

lbsophiaUID：2598915

TOPIC: ISSUE70 - "In any profession-business, politics, education, government-those in power should step down after five years. The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership."
WORDS: 588          TIME: 00:45:00          DATE: 2009-4-9 11:30:39

In many professions, like politics, government, and business, those in power should step down after five years, because these enterprises need revitalization through new leadership. However, this is not the surest path to success for any enterprise, since there might be requirement of a leadership who can lead the enterprise to make a plan and continuously constructing.

I agree that in many professions, like politics, government, and business, those in power should step down after five years, to make revitalization through new leadership possible for these enterprises. We know that the leaders who have taken power for a long time will probably be restricted to the conserved policies, and unwilling to make changes because of fearing for taking adventures. If the enterprise does not run well and there is no such a policy that those in power should step down after a term like five years, the situation would be at stake. The leaders may not realize what's wrong with the enterprise and insist on their policy, thus the enterprise would definetly go down. On the contrary, if there is a chance that other individuals can become a leader within a not so long time, the enterprise could possibly be saved and revitalized by the changes of new leaders. Such a principle can be suitable for many professions such as politics and business. Therefore, I think the policy should become a common sense for many professions that those in power should not hold the power for a long time.

Besides, such a policy can also benefit the enterprise since it can provide opportunities for new comers to take charge of the enterprise. Such opportunities can form a stimulus for the yong to work hard because they know that there is a chance for them to take power of the enterprise and realize their own blueprint of their career. Therefore, the enterprise would be promising because everyone wants to work better and achieve something. Such morale is the consequence of the democratic policy to give everyone a chance by setting the length of a leader's term.

However, we cannot say that the surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership. Sometimes, it is even more important for the leader to have enough long time to fulfil their plans and constructions of the enterprise. For example, there is a survey once conducted on the average lenghth of terms of a president in Harvard University, and the result was 13.9 years. It is much longer than five years as the topic suggested. This is because in education, the president needs a long time to conduct an education reformation. Recruiting potential professors and discovering an efficient way of learning would take a long time. And such a complete plan on construction should always be conducted by the same leading group due to its requirement of integrity. It would cost too much and a long time to form a new one to take hand of such an uncompleted project. What's more, in a new term, the president may have his own thoughts and plans about how to improve the school, and what has not yet done will be casted away and thus becomes a great loss since no result comes out despite of the money already spended. Under this situation, the restriction of the lenghth of a leader's term would do harm to the enterprise.

In conclusion, I agree that in some professions such as politics and business, those in power should step down after five years or some. But the revitalization is not the surest way to make success since we should consider the cost and price for an enterprise to adopt new policies and plans in a new term of leadership.

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196# Neptune2010
谢谢你的批语  很好
我在努力produce template  呵呵

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186# i2000s
啊~非常感谢~呵~这几天一直没上网~就没看到~：P 谢啦~

小AJUID：2603280

Issue195 "The goal of politics should not be the pursuit of an ideal, but rather the search for common ground and reasonable consensus.
words: 588   time:50:00   date:2009-4-8
By analyzing the assertion of the author ,it seems that there is a severe conflict between the pursuit of an ideal and searching for common ground and reasonable consensus in politics. Is that really the case ?I am afraid i can not admit it thoroughly. while i concede that sometimes the present situation is indeed quite far from the one idealistic ,but it is too extreme and unreasonable to simply give up the ideal, because ideal still plays an enormously important role in politics.
To begin with, i would like to introduce a famous argument of a celebrity, "Ideal is the beacon, without ideal there is no secure direction, and without direction there is no life."
For a politician ,it is necessary to have a ideal keep in mind, not withstanding some thing drift in the air. The ideal just act as a campus, setting the directions and make the whole system operating within the proper circumscribe. It is not to deny the reality that in some period the whole society would develop in an definitely alternative way even the opposite direction, because the history tells us ,the way of revolution is quite a suffering road encountering different trials and obstacles. And I consider it is pretty much the case why should a politician keep his ideal in mind, just only by stick to it can he regain the right direction and not be confusing by the present stuff.
Moreover, it is through the democratic procedure that eventually a politician take the leader place of a government, so it is undoubtedly that he or she will certainly represent the attitude of majority since he or she won the election .It is admitted that the faith of a politician should be nothing else but to organize the whole country efficiently ,improve the social facilities, make the economy flourish and finally enable his people to take advantage of all the good things. Don't you think this ideal just matches the common ground and reasonable consensus of the ordinary citizens perfectly? Abraham Lincoln was keen on his ideal that all the black slaves should be treat just like the white people equally ,that is just the consensus of majority people in that period .Without the dream of Martin Luther King ,it is possible to have separate zone for black and white in a bus. These facts convince us that only when the ideal of a politician meet the consensus of the majority, can it be supported and realized ultimately.
However, when difference occurs between the ideal and common ground, there should be one side taking a compromise, and that could be either the politician or the common people. It is more obvious in economic business. Several years ago ,the real-estate business flourished very much ,most of the citizens invest their rest money
the into the real-estate market, bringing a severe crisis that the price soars without people actually live in..In order to slow down the up rising price ,the government took the control of the market and compressed the price ,which is called government interference ,certainly it was harmful to the common ground trend, but it did secure the stability of our society as well as the healthy developing of the economy.

All in all, the ideal and common ground are both indispensable to secure a society operating in a right direction. T he politician should not given up his faith ,and by solving the coming up problems in time can he or she eventually heat the target step by step.


第二次写issue，很希望大家能给我点意见~谢啦~

小AJUID：2603280

TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare." WORDS: 1          TIME: 00:00:03          DATE: 2009/4/8 20:41:24 也帮忙看看我的吧，欢迎严厉的鞭策 ==；（汗、、 I fundamentally agree with the speaker's assertion that the absence of choice is a rare situation, for the reason （感觉应该加一个主语，反正这句话好像有点问题）to do with the nature of ourselves, namely the independent minds, personalities and deeds. Nevertheless, it might to tempting（temp） to agree that sometimes individual pursuits yield to pragmatic concern of surviving, it is by no means （少一个动词，后面直接跟短语好像不对）an indication of no choice, but rather a sense of unwillingness to do so. From childhood, we naturally learn to develop our own characters, personalities and interests largely through the process of choice. Kids at an early age tend to pick up individual hobbies, sports, dressings or even their famous admirers. At secondary and high school level, students are given options to select their interested subjects. In the（删掉the） meanwhile, they join in clubs, unions of various themes to make friends according to likes and dislikes. Nevertheless, none of these deeds can totally disregard the influence of other external confinements. For example, their early pursuits may be partly driven by faddish trends, or family education. Course selection might have to take into account of practical concern such as employment demands or economic condition in the later time. However, such factors do not render us a sense of no choice at all, for otherwise we would have essentially become more of the same with our peers. On the contrary, individual differs from each other sharply. Isn't it the choices born of our both our internal hearts and the opportunities from our social environments which brought about this result?（这句话不通顺啊，可以加一个副词indispensablely） 例子用的很好，建议在段首或是段尾加一句总结观点的句子，这样比较清楚一些。 Upon we enter into society as responsible grown-ups, I concede that our favored pursuits sometimes inevitable give way to other ones which are more driven by social and family responsibility, confinements within a group or moral restraints. Indeed, one must acknowledge the obvious fact that leading a life is not easy thing to do. In our society, there are countless people who defer their dream to a comfortable life, asserting that they are forced to do so. But, in my observation, a deferred dream is perhaps not a dream at all. Had one willing to attain what he is craving for, he is（倒装） necessarily well prepared for sacrifices of some sorts. One does not need to look further than life-devoted scientists ranging from Newton to Einstein, Kepler to Darwin, to see this point. According（）accordingly,  choices that are not based on true devotion or spiritual commitments are meaningless entity itself. 这段的中心是不是最后一句？我觉得应该再论证一下为什么不是base On true devotion 的choices 就会没有意义，因为前面根本么有详细说明或者是过渡。 Besides, in situations that one feels the absence of choice, steeping back and creating a choice is nevertheless a sound option to move forward, if one considers the long run agenda. Consider Bill Gates once quitted Harvard University for fulfilling his dream in the computer world. （个人认为这个例子好像和论点不符合，毕竟Bill Gates并不是被逼着退学的，他不是no choice，而是自己choose to quit）The ex-Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping three times suffered from political downfall during the Chinese Cultural revolution, he optimistically faced the reality and worked as a labor worker, pending opportunities for the later regain and attaining his political dream, namely to pull Chinese economy out of recession via institutional reformation. These heroes did not view temporary dilemma as boggling without choices, rather they choose to learn how to choose, or even how to create a choice.（这个结论下的好啊~） At last, I believe that feeling of no choice is more or less the same as unwilling to choose, as long as one actively develops and applies an independent mind, （这句话用完成时态比较好哦~）one that not only allow us（himself） to pursuit what is presented, but also to create options. 这篇文章的观点还是不错的，不过文章的脉络不是很清楚，建议每段前可以简单点点题，这样会比较一目了然~呵呵

Neptune2010UID：2626044

TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."
WORDS: 1          TIME: 00:00:03          DATE: 2009/4/8 20:41:24
也帮忙看看我的吧，欢迎严厉的鞭策 ==；（汗、、

I fundamentally agree with the speaker's assertion that the absence of choice is a rare situation, for the reason to do with the nature of ourselves, namely the independent minds, personalities and deeds. Nevertheless, it might to tempting to agree that sometimes individual pursuits yield to pragmatic concern of surviving, it is by no means an indication of no choice, but rather a sense of unwillingness to do so.

From childhood, we naturally learn to develop our own characters, personalities and interests largely through the process of choice. Kids at an early age tend to pick up individual hobbies, sports, dressings or even their famous admirers. At secondary and high school level, students are given options to select their interested subjects. In the meanwhile, they join in clubs, unions of various themes to make friends according to likes and dislikes. Nevertheless, none of these deeds can totally disregard the influence of other external confinements. For example, their early pursuits may be partly driven by faddish trends, or family education. Course selection might have to take into account of practical concern such as employment demands or economic condition in the later time. However, such factors do not render us a sense of no choice at all, for otherwise we would have essentially become more of the same with our peers. On the contrary, individual differs from each other sharply. Isn't it the choices born of our both our internal hearts and the opportunities from our social environments which brought about this result?

Upon we enter into society as responsible grown-ups, I concede that our favored pursuits sometimes inevitable give way to other ones which are more driven by social and family responsibility, confinements within a group or moral restraints. Indeed, one must acknowledge the obvious fact that leading a life is not easy thing to do. In our society, there are countless people who defer their dream to a comfortable life, asserting that they are forced to do so. But, in my observation, a deferred dream is perhaps not a dream at all. Had one willing to attain what he is craving for, he is necessarily well prepared for sacrifices of some sorts. One does not need to look further than life-devoted scientists ranging from Newton to Einstein, Kepler to Darwin, to see this point. According, choices that are not based on true devotion or spiritual commitments are meaningless entity itself.

Besides, in situations that one feels the absence of choice, steeping back and creating a choice is nevertheless a sound option to move forward, if one considers the long run agenda. Consider Bill Gates once quitted Harvard University for fulfilling his dream in the computer world. The ex-Chinese leader Deng Xiaoping three times suffered from political downfall during the Chinese Cultural revolution, he optimistically faced the reality and worked as a labor worker, pending opportunities for the later regain and attaining his political dream, namely to pull Chinese economy out of recession via institutional reformation. These heroes did not view temporary dilemma as boggling without choices, rather they choose to learn how to choose, or even how to create a choice.

At last, I believe that feeling of no choice is more or less the same as unwilling to choose, as long as one actively develops and applies an independent mind, one that not only allow us to pursuit what is presented, but also to create options.

Neptune2010UID：2626044

占位改187 i2000s(可不可以不当官)

楼下狂批吧，思路、结构、措辞等等

ISSUE 99
In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options.

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If you were a scientist, what should be your blueprint about the next experience? If you were a politician, how would you prepare your speech? And how would you, as a boss, start a business? Or what scene would you, if an artist, hold before drawing your first line on your canvas? Everyone wants to success, viewpoints before any action, tending to be practical or theoretical, decide your position of starting line and speed in the ruthless race.(这一句语法上有点小问题,知道那些从句和短语是在修饰哪个词)  Success comes easier when you combine the merits of both types of views. Further, it comes faster(用快了衡量成功是不是有点……？) when you order them appropriately.

Admittedly，Man lives on the feet of reality. Reality notices you how many and which kinds of the bricks you've owned to pave your road leading to the success. When Edison, one of the greatest inventors in history, lightened his first bulb, he just used the usual materials at hand, not the rare earth materials that now we found better but so hard to refine(精炼出来？用produce直接些吧) that take scientists worldwide more than a century to certificate them（them是指materials? 这个that从句有点看不明白）. Reality releases your aimless rashness and tells you how you can get to the target from the very condition at the stage. When Washington won the first President in America history, actually, his concerns didn’t deviate from the folks' practical needs and the actual conditions at that time which earned the public confidence and moved US standing up to win. Countless big potatoes in all kinds of careers win their honors with holding the practical viewpoints that root in reality solidly. Do pragmatic viewpoints save you all the time?(实用主意观点引导伟人们成功。Edison和Washington的例子都比较有道理，如果能加上一点点小分析就更好了)

In fact, practical thoughts cost more time to consider more factors（一般习惯上不用两个more） than ideal ones do. The more severely the views are idealized, the deeper people touched by them. When Martin Luther King, the hero of black American, gathered his supporters and won the revolution, he emphasized the common dream born in black people's hearts, rather than first on the setbacks they may subject to(挫败，退缩？感觉这里用的不太合适，如果说改革面临的困难和行动时，可以用the how-to-do and necessarily concomitant compromises. More importantly, the simplified views accelerate the process of planning and operating much more effectively than those of trapping oneself into some unnecessary worries about the actuality. Bill Gates, the richest man in the world nowadays, started his Microsoft corporate, only driven by a simple ideal that every family should own a personal computer, and he conceived the plan simply from the DOS operating system without a colorful screen and even a mouse, which is extremely prevailing at present. Similarly, a painter may merely hold the outline of somebody whom is about to be drawn on the canvas, in comparison to (这里没有比较级，所以不用rather,) much more details at first glance. （反：idealistic views简化目标的方向，给予我们更清晰直观的思维，反而太关注practical concerns有可能迷失在细节上）

Now we're arriving at the crux: What's the starting line of a competition before actions, to be it a complex plan that may take you wandering a long period to examine almost every factor of reality, or only to be it a simple skeleton that only contains some basic perspectives and leaving much room to be filled out after you set out? As we all know, a line between two points makes the shortest distance. This is also steadfast when come to the topic of success. That is to say, first employ the ideal views to define your beginning and terminate points, and the best way linking them with your knowledge acquired. Then consider the key practical factors that may impede your processes and then detail your plans. The rest work is to constantly deal with the bugs when moving on. So as the tenet people hold, "The complex world maybe run under some simplest principles", why not to simplify your viewpoints under reality?  (首先确定理想主义的目标的指引，然后根据实际现实寻找方案。如果有事例支持的话会很有说服力，因为是独创的方法，呵呵)

Success is a direct result of a series of actions ordered well enough after a series of considerations in a limited period. A good, or easily attainable, beginning is a half of success; the other part should be done with weighting significant amounts of more complex details after that. The ideal plan with considering some basic practical factors make it easy to begin the task at a high speed. Only by organizing both the idealistic and practical views seemly, will the success occur in our sights timely.

感觉观点总体来说是不错的。作者似乎从“快速”成功和节省资源和思考的角度入手，成功的定义也可以是“其意义”上的，这个层面也有很多可以写，比如短期实用不等于长期利益，理想主义实现等于永远等待…………
然后就是作者的语法要加强。事例有点老套，但可以说明问题。
结构很大胆，不过如果是我的话还是会比较保守的用模板式，呵呵==；

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