花花回归作文专版

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1.23 不同兴趣,人格的人能不能做朋友?

When it comes to friends, different people show diverse inclinations on their friends’ styles. As the old saying goes, “people can have true friendship only with those who speak the same language with them”, many people hold the idea to make friends with the same interests and personalities. However, more and more people today tend to think whether we can build a friendship with those whose interests and personalities are totally different from ours. Based on my abundant experience, I agree that people with distinct interests and personalities can make friends with each other, and they can even make the friendship everlasting.


To begin with, friends with various interests and personalities can enrich your life. For people with different interests, they are good at things that you are not interested in, so when necessary they can use their unique ability to help you. For instance, as I know little about cooking, when I get a friend who cooks well and live together, it makes my life more comfortable as I always have the chance to enjoy her palatable dishes and at the same time, learn cooking from her. So a friend with diverse interests really helps your life and also let you learn more. For people with different personalities, they view things in various viewpoints, so they can help you understand facts more comprehensively. When one thing occurs, we used to judge it due to our own point, if you are with a friend who differs from you, s/he can bring a brand new way to handle the case, and it more or less influences you and extends your thinking.



On the other hand, as people with diverse interests and personalities tend to make frictions more easily, it is a good chance to train ourselves in such a friendship. When we enter in schools, we meet with various kinds of people and make friends with them. We all have to tolerate those days when we know each other better and have frictions more often, but if we really want to continue our relationships, we have to train ourselves some abilities. We should learn to listen, think on friends’ viewpoint, and also learn to tolerate and accept our friends’ weak points. By the time we are in good command of these, we can not only make the friendship ever last, but also be able to handle any person and situation.


To sum up, based on these points I mentioned above, I do think it is good for people to make friends with different interests and personalities. It can broaden your eyes since they know things you don’t know, it can also help you to build a better personality as you have to learn to deal with various people and situations. So don’t hesitate to make friends with various kinds of people.

volksrenUID：2189399

2.19 TPO7 综合写作 首先，非常抱歉，我交作业迟了，同时也给你评迟了，非常抱歉╮(╯▽╰)╭
In the reading material, the writer lists three points to prove that wood companies in the United States may not work on receiving ecocertification. However, the speaker in the lecture use arguments to claim that there's good reasons for those wood companies to do so.这个开头段写得太赞了，不愧是花花童鞋。4 U! U; o7 D) \; b. z6 J7 Y
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First, the author thinks that American customers would not pay attention to the label as there is so much advertising around them. But the lecturer says the American customers actually do not treat all ads the same. They are able to distinguish which claims by companies themselves and claims by independent agencies, and they are confident about those independent agencies' saying. Thus, the customers would react favorably toward those products labeled "ecocertified".  w; i0 U0 Z: Q
Second, the writer points out that customers won't buy ecocertified wood because it's more expensive, also companies have to cost more for certain exams. In the lecture, the professor agrees that the price of ecocertified wood would be expensive, but it wouldn't influence the sales. With certain study's result, customers would buy things depending on price alone only when the price is much higher or lower than others. If the difference on price is less than five percent, there's no obvious decrease on sales. On the contrary, costumers would care more about products' value under such situation.8 O; {就像米说的那样，我又重新听了一遍听力，确实这个地方有说美国人的环保意识在增强，不过我也没有记下来╮(╯▽╰)╭Z8 w) \4 q; J' \3 c* ]
Finally, the text shows as American wood businesses sell most of their products in the United States, pursuing certification wouldn't make any sense. However, the speaker suggests that if domestic wood companies don't get ecocertified, it would increase foreign competition. One day American customers would be interested in ecoceritified products. 好像听力里面并没有说one day 这个概念吧？( ⊙ o ⊙ )啊If American companies are still slow capturing those customers, foreign companies would step into the market and offer products which American companies are lack of. : E/ B' a- P0 d, C9 O# L& h
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Based on the lecturer's saying, it's good for American wood companies to receive ecocertification.

恩，总之，花花童鞋的作文点很全，听力基础很好。By 紫日

eejchenUID：2225156

In the reading material, the writer lists three points to prove that wood companies in the United States may not work on receiving ecocertification. However, the speaker in the lecture use arguments to claim that there's good reasons for those wood companies to do so. 第一段简洁明了，很好 y
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Firstly, the author thinks that American customers would not pay attention to the label as there is so much advertising around them. But the lecturer says the American customers actually do not treat all ads the same. They are able to distinguish which claims by companies themselves and claims by independent agencies, and they are confident about those independent agencies' saying. Thus, the customers would react favorably toward those products labeled "ecocertified".这个写的好详细，我就没听出来两者的区别，55～
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Secondly, the writer points out that customers won't buy ecocertified wood because it's more expensive, also改为because是不是更好？ companies have to cost more for certain exams. In the lecture, the professor agrees that the price of ecocertified wood would be expensive, but it wouldn't influence the sales. With certain study's result, customers would buy things depending on price alone only when the price is much higher or lower than others. If the difference on price is less than five percent, there's no obvious decrease on sales. On the contrary, costumers would care more about products' value under such situation.价格部分说的很详细，但是没提到美国人的环保意识在增长.+ i& \(" M4 n& D; P
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Finally, the text shows as American wood businesses sell most of their products in the United States, pursuing certification wouldn't make any sense. However, the speaker suggests that if domestic wood companies don't get ecocertified, it would increase foreign competition. One day American customers would be interested in ecoceritified products. If American companies are still slow capturing those customers, foreign companies would step into the market and offer products with ecocertified label which American companies are lack of. + e7 t( u/ \& M- f" X: C
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Based on the lecturer's saying, it's good for American wood companies to receive ecocertification.还有总结段，好！功力好强大！语言说得极其恰当，并且细节基本包括，字数也有控制，赞～


by 米

arimidyUID：2673973

2.19 TPO7 综合写作

In the reading material, the writer lists three points to prove that wood companies in the United States may not work on receiving ecocertification. However, the speaker in the lecture use arguments to claim that there's good reasons for those wood companies to do so.

First, the author thinks that American customers would not pay attention to the label as there is so much advertising around them. But the lecturer says the American customers actually do not treat all ads the same. They are able to distinguish which claims by companies themselves and claims by independent agencies, and they are confident about those independent agencies' saying. Thus, the customers would react favorably toward those products labeled "ecocertified".

Second, the writer points out that customers won't buy ecocertified wood because it's more expensive, also companies have to cost more for certain exams. In the lecture, the professor agrees that the price of ecocertified wood would be expensive, but it wouldn't influence the sales. With certain study's result, customers would buy things depending on price alone only when the price is much higher or lower than others. If the difference on price is less than five percent, there's no obvious decrease on sales. On the contrary, costumers would care more about products' value under such situation.

Finally, the text shows as American wood businesses sell most of their products in the United States, pursuing certification wouldn't make any sense. However, the speaker suggests that if domestic wood companies don't get ecocertified, it would increase foreign competition. One day American customers would be interested in ecoceritified products. If American companies are still slow capturing those customers, foreign companies would step into the market and offer products which American companies are lack of.

Based on the lecturer's saying, it's good for American wood companies to receive ecocertification.

ganbeUID：2759187

看过了没什么问题，除了个别句子个人感觉有些怪以外。
However, the professor uses scientists’ doubts on those evidences to challenges the conclusion.
还有就是都是长句，有些觉得没必要。第三段
....weren’t growing rapidly, and it shows that ...
要点和细节都有，字数也够多。
水平有限，动不了刀。sorry

arimidyUID：2673973

2.10        TPO4 综合写作
In the reading material, the writer lists three evidences to support the idea that dinosaurs are actually endotherms. However, the professor uses scientists’ doubts on those evidences to challenge the conclusion.

Firstly, about the argument of polar dinosaurs, the author suggests as dinosaur fossils have been found in polar regions, dinosaurs can be regarded as endotherms because only endotherms can be active in such cold environment. The speaker claims that when dinosaurs lived, even the polar regions were much warmer than today so that animals which were not endotherms also could be active in those regions. Also, when the polar regions were during cold period, the inhabitants could either migrate to warm places or hibernate to avoid the extreme environment.

Secondly, about the fact that dinosaurs have their legs under the bodies, not at the sides, this enables dinosaurs to run and the writer thinks that proves dinosaurs are endotherms as they have the leg position and movement just like endotherms have. However, the lecturer announces that having legs under the body is a necessity for dinosaurs to grow to a large size. In another word, it ensures the legs to be able to sustain its own weight. As being large has advantages for dinosaurs, this kind of explanation seems to be more convincing.

Finally, about the bone structure, as dinosaur fossils are usually dense with haversian canals which are typical for endotherms, this helps to suggest that dinosaurs are endotherms. On the contrary, the professor in the listening material uses the discovery of growth rings in dinosaur’s bone structure to contradict the author’s opinion. As the growth ring is regarded as evidence which indicates the period dinosaurs weren’t growing rapidly, and it shows that dinosaurs stop growing or grow more slowly during cooler periods. Also this kind of growing pattern is a characteristic for animals that aren’t endotherms.

Based on the three explanations mentioned in the lecture, it still has problems to prove that dinosaurs are endotherms.

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15# arimidy
不好意思，花花童鞋，我改晚了~
Nowadays we live a life which is almost surrounded by various types of advertisements. Whenever we switch on the TV or open a newspaper, we would find ads introducing different products consciously or unconsciously. Gradually, those advertisements seem to become one part of our living, regarded as a way to get information. Recently, an essay published on China Daily draws people’s attention as it strongly punches certain ads which are specially aimed at children ranged from 2 to 5.(要写成英文的形式) The author lists examples to point out those ads would mislead children and their parents to some extent and call for the prohibition on this kind of TV ads. However, as far as I am concerned, I would choose to support showing those ads as its helpfulness outweighs its disadvantages. : `. F, @4 m8 f
To begin with, this kind of ads can help parents to get some useful information. For parents who are raising children around 2 to 5, they would always get confused about various children products. When they stand in front of numerous kinds of products, they find it’s difficult for them to choose one which would be suitable for children of their own. Instead of visiting an authority, TV ads provide a much more convenient method to offer help (offer help=> help)to(去掉) those young parents. Simply by sitting on the coach and watching a seconds-long advertisement, parents are able to know what they should pay attention to when select goods. Take(taking) ads introducing milk powder as an example, almost every ads of this kind would list a chart of nutrients (which the product contains and去掉） are good for children’s growth. After seeing those advertisements, parents are capable to be familiar with those helpful nutrients and it would save their time with (on)choosing the milk powder whose nutrients’ index is higher.


On the other hand, ads on TV also help children to develop their thinking and cultivate certain abilities. By watching ads, children receive information both visually and aurally. Those moving characters send the image of actions to children’s brain and children may lately imitate those actions and it helps them to get familiar with motions accomplished by their arms and legs. One research shows that music can entertain people including children, making them uplift. In some cases, the songs in those advertisements may even inspire children’s sense of music and make them be interested in music in the future.

Back to the advertisement itself, instead of forbidding showing all ads, it is government’s and TV station’s responsibility to supervise the ads’ content and decide whether they could be shown on TV. It is for sure that there would be advertisements which may mislead parents and do harm to children at some point, but as there are more ads with high quality and are planed(换成aimed是不是好点) to convenient parents(convenient是个形容词，改成facilitate). In this case, TV stations should take the responsibility to check every advertisement’s content to see if it is （with quality改成qualified）. On the hand, government may pass certain rules to punish ads with negative effects and limit certain doings, and also supervise TV station’s broadcast

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To sum up, I see more ads’ advantages than their disadvantages, and as its shortcomings can be forbidden, we certainly should support TV stations to broadcast advertisements which are specially aimed at children ranged from 2 to 5.
总之，花花童鞋的这篇作文结构清晰，语言丰富，有很多很多值得我学习的地方~学习了

arimidyUID：2673973

2.9        私人收藏化石的优缺

Almost in every period of China’s history, private collection has long been a popular interest for Chinese. Our ancestors enjoyed collecting a lot. Portraits painted by famous painters, ancient containers which were perfectly made, all this kind of artworks are regarded as things worth collecting. As till today, there is a considerable number of people have developed the habit of housing fossils. They think fossils are created by natural for thousands of years, and fossils are valuable both for private collection and for scientific research. In another word, fossils are much more meaningful than those famous portraits or ancient containers for those collectors. As even a coin has two sides, this trend cannot simply be treated as a personal behavior. For fossils, the collectors’ doings may cause good and harm to either themselves or the society.

To begin with, collecting fossils is just like one kind of investment that can help people enrich themselves. We know that fossils are usually antiques, they are the witness of some certain historical period. As those collections become older, their value on the antique market enhances. Thus, if the owner thinks the price is reasonable, s/he can decide whether to sell the collection for the current profit. Also, the collector can choose not to sell the fossil, s/he is also able to wait for a higher bid. However, in the antique market, there are also things collectors should be concerned. News like announcing that a certain kind of fossils is related to the royalty would significantly raise the fossils’ value and lead to an increasing demand for them. On the contrary, news such as reporting that a high rate of certain fossils in the antique market is fake would certainly drop their value as no one tends to buy them. Hence, collecting fossils is like an adventure in life, to gain or to lose, it all depend on the collectors themselves.

On the other hand, the whole society may lose the way back to the ancient times by private collection. Generally, fossil research is the main way that helps researchers tracing the history. The fossil of a wolf-like creature’s skull shows its ear area has the characteristic only seen in aquatic mammals, thus helps professors to draw the conclusion that this creature is actually the ancestor of modern whales. Various types of fossils are needed in archaeology studies, as researchers are engaged in solving such a big puzzle. If most of the fossils are collected by individuals in private, or are selling in the antique market for money, they would never have a chance to be exploited the real value in archaeology and other related aspects. Obviously, it does harm to the whole world, preventing people to understand the world and themselves further by studying fossils.

To sum up, we can draw the conclusion that private collection on fossils has both advantages and disadvantages. On one hand it enriches person’s life by acting as one kind of investment. On the other hand it blocks scientists’ research on both the nature and we human beings. When it comes to whether we should do the collection, we must take both the good and harm aspects into account.

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2.8 综合写作TPO3
In the reading material, the writer lists three aspects to announce that the portrait of an Elderly woman in a White Bonnet couldn't be a work by Rembrandt. Although the professor in the lecture agrees with those discoveries, she uses a group of researchers' explanation to prove that painting was actually painted by Rembrandt.

Firstly, the author presents that there’s something inconsistent about the way the woman in the portrait is dressed, as Rembrandt was known for his attention to the details of his subjects’ clothing, this kind of inconsistency wouldn’t be appeared in his work. However, as the lecturer claims, X-rays and analysis show that the fur collar of the portrait today is not part of the original. The fur collar may be painted and covered the original 100 years after Rembrandt finished the work, aiming to increase the painting’s value by someone.

Secondly, the writer thinks as Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, there would never have errors like the unfit elements in this painting from all his works. The speaker corrects it by describing the original painting’s light and shadow. When the fur color is removed, the original shows the woman was wearing a simple collar of light colored cloth, and it reflects light that illuminates the woman’s face. In the original portrait, the light and shadow are very realistic.

Finally, the author points out this painting was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together, as no painting known to be by Rembrandt uses such a panel, it’s sure this work is not Rembrandt’s. With the lecturer’s explanation, as the fur collar was added, the panel was enlarged with extra wood glued to the original, to make the painting more grand and more valuable. What’s more, researchers also have found that the original panel of this painting is from the very same tree as the wood panel used for another portrait painted by Rembrandt, which is called Self Portrait with a Hat.

arimidyUID：2673973

2.62.6
该不该禁止针对小孩子（2－5岁）的电视广告

Nowadays we live a life which is almost surrounded by various types of advertisements. Whenever we switch on the TV or open a newspaper, we would find ads introducing different products consciously or unconsciously. Gradually, those advertisements seem to become one part of our living, regarded as a way to get information. Recently, an essay published on China Daily draws people’s attention as it strongly punches certain ads which are specially aimed at children ranged from 2 to 5. The author lists examples to point out those ads would mislead children and their parents to some extent and call for the prohibition on this kind of TV ads. However, as far as I am concerned, I would choose to support showing those ads as its helpfulness outweighs its disadvantages.

To begin with, this kind of ads can help parents to get some useful information. For parents who are raising children around 2 to 5, they would always get confused about various children products. When they stand in front of numerous kinds of products, they find it’s difficult for them to choose one which would be suitable for children of their own. Instead of visiting an authority, TV ads provide a much more convenient method to offer help to those young parents. Simply by sitting on the coach and watching a seconds-long advertisement, parents are able to know what they should pay attention to when select goods. Take ads introducing milk powder as an example, almost every ads of this kind would list a chart of nutrients which the product contains and are good for children’s growth. After seeing those advertisements, parents are capable to be familiar with those helpful nutrients and it would save their time with choosing the milk powder whose nutrients’ index is higher.

On the other hand, ads on TV also help children to develop their thinking and cultivate certain abilities. By watching ads, children receive information both visually and aurally. Those moving characters send the image of actions to children’s brain and children may lately imitate those actions and it helps them to get familiar with motions accomplished by their arms and legs. One research shows that music can entertain people including children, making them uplift. In some cases, the songs in those advertisements may even inspire children’s sense of music and make them be interested in music in the future.


Back to the advertisement itself, instead of forbidding showing all ads, it is government’s and TV station’s responsibility to supervise the ads’ content and decide whether they could be shown on TV. It is for sure that there would be advertisements which may mislead parents and do harm to children at some point, but as there are more ads with high quality and are planed to convenient parents. In this case, TV stations should take the responsibility to check every advertisement’s content to see if it is with quality. On the hand, government may pass certain rules to punish ads with negative effects and limit certain doings, and also supervise TV station’s broadcasts.

To sum up, I see more ads’ advantages than their disadvantages, and as its shortcomings can be forbidden, we certainly should support TV stations to broadcast advertisements which are specially aimed at children ranged from 2 to 5.

fatruiUID：2726256

2.40
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

As the world has reached such a high standard of modernization, （发现原来是你的模板？）Things have been changed and we have to confront a lot of new challenges. Recently, as the case of children indulged in network games is being discussed heatedly, parents start being afraid if their children can（cannot吧？） grow up in the way they expect（expected？）. Particularly, people point out that nowadays children tend to relay on technology too much and thus makes them less creative than they（这个代词感觉有点问题，因为前面有children和parents） were in the past. As far as I am concerned, I would support the idea that technology has made children more creative than they were in the past, as long as children make use of it properly.（这个突然来了个转折，不是很习惯，加个连词吧）

To begin with, technology helps children to broaden their thinking by making things which are impracticable happen（这个句子有问题，making things 之后是个定语重句是吧，但是定语重句后面应该加点东西吧？）. With the help of technology, we are now able to do things that dare not be thought of（of去掉） in the past. We （应该用children吧，因为别人问你children噢）won’t believe that we（they） can have a video chat with a friend in the distance simply by software called MSN; we（children） won’t get the chance to visit an island named Saipan which located in the Pacific Ocean after hours of flight. （MSN和travel的论证有点弱，没有回到这个broaden thinking的上面）The main source for the emergence of those technologies is creativity, and（and可以不用吧？） on the contrary, new technology’s debut is regarded as a stimulus for the creation on others. With witnessing those seemingly impracticable things happen in front of their eyes, children are capable to think out of box. （think out of box 学习了，发现你很喜欢用Ving+句子，主语+句子这种结构噢，常在GMAT那里见到）They would no longer be restrained by the fixed thinking patterns of whether one is reasonable to practice. As the technology is to（is to 这里感觉不大对） make a miracle come true, it enables children not only to make full use of their creativities, but also to inspire more on them.（上面文章貌似只稍微的说到HOW inspire了）

Moreover, as certain technology such as the Internet helps to publicize the positive message to people, it makes more parents begin to pay attention to cultivate and stimulate their children’s creativities. With the programs on TV and videos on the Internet showing the youngster get awarded or be accepted by a well-known school for his/her creative doings, parents realize that it would be good for children’s future if they are able to develop a more creative thinking. Thus, parents would take the responsibility to cultivate their children to be creative and in the meanwhile, supervise and correct children’s mistakes. （这个make mistake和creative没什么关系吧）They would on one hand send children to schools（to school认为多余） to attend various courses which help prefect their creative thinking. On the other hand, they would also keep an eye on children’s doings, always get ready to correct their faults. In this case, technology encourages parents to get involved in making children more creative.（这个，感觉论证有点弱啊，不过应该说得过去的吧。论坛咱们多讨论）

From all what I have mentioned above, I would speak highly of technology’s helpfulness（highly of technology’s helpfulness这个用法有问题） on the development of children’s creativities. It not only plays as tools to make imaginations practicable, but also plays as stimulus, to broaden children’s thinking, to（“，”去掉“to去掉”加个and） make parents participate in the perfection.（perfection用法不对）


总结：这个文章，估计也把你恶心了吧，我也被恶心了，论证有点弱，加油啊，相信你能把这个克服的。语法没有什么问题。不好意思，个人的语法也不是太好，所以可能改得不太好，有什么意见就和我说啊。


By Fatrui

arimidyUID：2673973

2.4
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

As the world has reached such a high standard of modernization, things have been changed and we have to confront a lot of new challenges. Recently, as the case of children indulged in network games is being discussed heatedly, parents start being afraid if their children can grow up in the way they expect. Particularly, people point out that nowadays children tend to relay on technology too much and thus makes them less creative than they were in the past. As far as I am concerned, I would support the idea that technology has made children more creative than they were in the past, as long as children make use of it properly.

To begin with, technology helps children to broaden their thinking by making things which are impracticable happen. With the help of technology, we are now able to do things that dare not be thought of in the past. We won’t believe that we can have a video chat with a friend in the distance simply by software called MSN; we won’t get the chance to visit an island named Saipan which located in the Pacific Ocean after hours of flight. The main source for the emergence of those technologies is creativity, and on the contrary, new technology’s debut is regarded as a stimulus for the creation on others. With witnessing those seemingly impracticable things happen in front of their eyes, children are capable to think out of box. They would no longer be restrained by the fixed thinking patterns of whether one is reasonable to practice. As the technology is to make a miracle come true, it enables children not only to make full use of their creativities, but also to inspire more on them.

Moreover, as certain technology such as the Internet helps to publicize the positive message to people, it makes more parents begin to pay attention to cultivate and stimulate their children’s creativities. With the programs on TV and videos on the Internet showing the youngster get awarded or be accepted by a well-known school for his/her creative doings, parents realize that it would be good for children’s future if they are able to develop a more creative thinking. Thus, parents would take the responsibility to cultivate their children to be creative and in the meanwhile, supervise and correct children’s mistakes. They would on one hand send children to schools to attend various courses which help prefect their creative thinking. On the other hand, they would also keep an eye on children’s doings, always get ready to correct their faults. In this case, technology encourages parents to get involved in making children more creative.

From all what I have mentioned above, I would speak highly of technology’s helpfulness on the development of children’s creativities. It not only plays as tools to make imaginations practicable, but also plays as stimulus, to broaden children’s thinking, to make parents participate in the perfection.

fatruiUID：2726256

2.2 Printed book have had greater effects on society than television has?

As the world has reached a pretty high standard of modernization, many old things are on their way to disappear. We witness the decreasing number of printed books and people’s welcome to the high-technique televisions instead. Despite people’s inclinations, sometimes we would doubt whether it’s the right choice as many authorities announce that printed book have had greater effects on society than television has（这里事态？has是不是应该had？）. Based on my abundant experience, my opinion is just on the opposite, I’d like to claim that it is television which has greater effects on society today.

To begin with, being different from its initiative purpose to entertain, nowadays television has been developed into a utility invention. （这个句子用得好啊）A television is a medium transmits instant information to its views（viewers？）. Whenever people switch on the television, they are able to get the latest news not only domestic but also abroad. It’s also a platform which can satisfy everyone’s interests, ranging from children to the old. It provides cartoons and talk shows for the youth, with classic dramas and operas for the old. Moreover, the new-released television is even capable of linking computers. With the internal USB, a television can simply find the access to a computer, read its information and display it on television’s screen. This fresh function is now widely used in offices, conferences. For a family, this function also enables people to watch a movie on a bigger screen after they downloaded it on the computer, they only need to copy the file to a USB disk and insert it to the television.（现在电视机有这么牛？）

On the other hand, if we put television and printed books together to compare, to we can clarify this debate. Generally speaking, various types of printed books have diverse functions. For instance, one reference book may help you to cook a palatable dish; a guidebook may introduce a tremendous place for you to spend your holiday. However, all of these functions are included in TV programs. With showing a chief cooking the dish step by step, people can understand the procedure more easily. By watching TV programs introducing tourist attractions, we are also able to decide（know） which （distinguished）place we should take a visit to. Thus, television seems to contain much more knowledge than the printed books does. Moreover, the knowledge and information in the television would be updated within minute even second（这里可以比喻一下新闻）; people can always learn the most developed（advanced） techniques and the latest news in it. But the content in a printed book rarely changes, only the best sellers may publish a second or third edition years after its first print. （后面这句话貌似和上面那句话没有形成对比）
From what I have mention above, it’s pronounced that television do have a greater effect on society than printed books. The television updates information and technology for people,（这句话感觉怪怪的TV怎么update technology呢？） it also facilitates people’s life. I am sure television would play a more significant role in social development.


总结：我真的不知道怎么改好了，结构很好，论证部分也是很强大，逻辑结构就更不用说了，我只能膜拜你了。看完你的就觉得奇怪，怎么自己不能像你那样这么多东西写呢？

By Fatrui

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2.2 Printed book have had greater effects on society than television has?

As the world has reached a pretty high standard of modernization, many old things are on their way to disappear. We witness the decreasing number of printed books and people’s welcome to the high-technique televisions instead. Despite people’s inclinations, sometimes we would doubt whether it’s the right choice as many authorities announce that printed book have had greater effects on society than television has. Based on my abundant experience, my opinion is just on the opposite, I’d like to claim that it is television which has greater effects on society today.

To begin with, being different from its initiative purpose to entertain, nowadays television has been developed into a utility invention. A television is a medium transmits instant information to its views. Whenever people switch on the television, they are able to get the latest news not only domestic but also abroad. It’s also a platform which can satisfy everyone’s interests, ranging from children to the old. It provides cartoons and talk shows for the youth, with classic dramas and operas for the old. Moreover, the new-released television is even capable of linking computers. With the internal USB, a television can simply find the access to a computer, read its information and display it on television’s screen. This fresh function is now widely used in offices, conferences. For a family, this function also enables people to watch a movie on a bigger screen after they downloaded it on the computer, they only need to copy the file to a USB disk and insert it to the television.

On the other hand, if we put television and printed books together to compare, to we can clarify this debate. Generally speaking, various types of printed books have diverse functions. For instance, one reference book may help you to cook a palatable dish, a guidebook may introduce a tremendous place for you to spend your holiday. However, all of these functions are included in TV programs. With showing a chief cooking the dish step by step, people can understand the procedure more easily. By watching TV programs introducing tourist attractions, we are also able to decide which place we should take a visit to. Thus, television seems to contain much more knowledge than the printed books does. Moreover, the knowledge and information in the television would be updated within minute even second, people can always learn the most developed techniques and the latest news in it. But the content in a printed book rarely changes, only the best sellers may publish a second or third edition years after its first print.

From what I have mention above, it’s pronounced that television do have a greater effect on society than printed books. The television updates information and technology for people, it also facilitates people’s life. I am sure television would play a more significant role in social development.

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In the lately published China Daily, the most hot-debated issue is whether people should live in the city or country all life, as the index of people moving both between cities and from country to city has been dramatically increased during this period(这句让人有点费解). With a further discussion about the topic, people are arguing if people are necessary to do this kind of movement in their lives. As far as I am concerned, I would definitely support and encourage people to live a life more mobile rather than to stay in the(a) city or country all life.
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To begin with, to every aspect, moving to another place leads you to a better life. For those people who were born in a small town, as all kinds of facilities are under-developed, they are not able to get regular education, some of them are even forced by their own parents to drop out from school and help the farm work. What’s worse, there also doesn’t have a high-standard hospital to heal people’s various diseases, the locals have to go to the city miles away to visit the authoritative doctors. From above, if people want to perfect their lives, the first step is to move to the city, to a place which is more developed than the town. The city provides various first-class schools to them for education, they can gain knowledge and become more competitive when they graduate. It(指代?) ensures people to find a certain job, earning(earn) a relatively satisfactory salary. Also, as the city is highly developed, it owns more advanced facilities.(加For example,是不是好一点？) People are able to watch an IMAX movie in the nearby cinema, to go to work simply by taking a subway. In a word, people could change and improve his/her life by moving to another place.- Q8 W$ P/ r- }9 S
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Moreover, to some degree, we regard this kind of movement as a re-planning for one person’s life. Although people own steady jobs and live happily with their relatives, some of them are just not satisfied about it. They may pursue for another job, be unpleasant about the place’s environment（翻译：他们可能会寻找另外的工作，不喜欢工作环境。我理解不了意思，呵呵）. In another word, when a person can afford to modify his/her life, moving to another place is the way（the way感觉表达过薄，the best way不知好不好？或者其他更好的表达）. Within this kind of movement（请教这句可以表达原因还是前提条件？用within 确实少见，我就多怪了，见笑呵呵。）, people are able to create a new plan for his/her latter life. As everything would have a new start after the movement, people can make choices for themselves all over again. Despite of choosing houses or applying for jobs, it’s a life start over again for people themselves（与上句表达感觉像转圈）. People may take this chance to correct the mistakes s/he ever made and try to be a better person. Take myself as an example, I used to be an unsociable girl, and didn’t have any contact with my classmates and even do not have any friends. When my family moves to another city, I made up my mind to be open, and finally became a popular girl. 1 C: m& O" D+ O% Y

With all what I have mentioned above, I recommend people to move to another place, whether it’s short or long term, it is worthy spending time on it. The movement helps you to broaden your horizon, to see a better world, to be a better person.
另：对我来说，很难在考场上敲出这500多字的文章，向你学习，努力。
这两天出门去了，现在才改，见谅。