issue51教育类（MARS小队－作业）请指教，谢谢！

iven19821005UID: 2160156

51"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
提纲：中立
Beginning：the source of conflicting and my position- these two forces undermine each other at times, but they can also compliment with each other, if handled probably.-.
Part A: Some people maintain that the ability of now day’s education, especially in developing country such as China is far from totally adopting the method of distinguishing education
Part B: others argue that it is definitely important for the developing of young child.
Part C: these two forces can also compliment with each other, if handled probably.
Conclusion:
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Recently, the debate of whether specially designed education for meeting the needs and the interests of each student is effective has been paid much attention to by the whole society. Some people maintain that the ability of now day’s education, especially in developing country such as China is far from totally adopting the method of distinguishing education, while others argue that it is definitely important for the developing of young child. As far as I concerned, these two forces undermine each other at times, but they can also compliment with each other, if handled probably.

To begin with, some exact situation in developing regions makes it impossible for schools to offer the curriculums that their students desire for. In the summer of 2003, I earn the opportunity to go to a small village called “Cong Hui” in Shan Xi province in china to help the children there. My task is to teach some lessons, to communicate with these younger brothers or sisters and to help them as much as I can. One night, sleeping with a boy, I asked him “what kind of curriculums he likes best?” He answered “I enjoy every moments in the class and almost any lessons are his favorite.” Later I got the information that his opportunity to enter school is not an easy one. This sample is probably too simple to a lot of people who want to make topics of making individual education, but there is something profound in the answer of this child, something educator should pay much attention to. They are the difficulty of paying fee, the scarce of eligible teachers, especially in some poor region, the problem of safe environment has not been solved, etc. Obviously, how can develop specified designed education in these poor areas?

However, students in developed countries and rich cities, for instance Shanghai and Beijing, parents there hope with the support of finance their boys or girls can be taught as the most suitable way, specifically designed for their child. According to a recent survey conducted by sociality department of Fudan University among ten top universities in China, seventy two point six percent of new parents have been preparing for their children to accept some individual curriculums such as piano, football, graphics and acting. Research from National Educational Bureau believes this phenomenon results from the quick rise of living condition in big cities. Therefore, the emphasis on the future of children becomes priority issue in these families. Consequently, with the enough competent educators and support of money the specifically designed individual education is reasonable.

Last but not least, different method of educating should be taken in different places. Since the great leader of People’s Republic of China, Deng XiaoPin, said (and I paraphrase) “China’s rise should have its own suitable Road which is especially useful the complex condition of China.” As to the education principle of different counties, different provisions, and different cities are the same reason. Consequently, for one thing developed region may try using specifically method of education, for anther much help should be taken to help the education of poor areas and the individual education may not be realized simultaneously.

In sum, it is very likely that people will never be able to arrive at the same conclusion on this controversial issue, due to different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless, public awareness of the various dimensions of the issue discussed in the above argument will certainly contribute to the thoroughly understanding of the problem.

[ 本帖最后由 iven19821005 于 2006-2-17 16:56 编辑 ]

iven19821005UID: 2160156

不会吧，那么没人气啊，加油加油！

shellnutsUID: 2168496

Recently, the debate of whether specially designed education for meeting the needs and the interests of each student is effective has been paid much attention to by the whole society. Some people maintain that the ability of now day’s education, especially in developing country such as China is far from totally adopting the method of distinguishing education, while others argue that it is definitely important for the developing of young child后半句与前半句相比显得单薄些，力度不够. As far as II’m concerned, these two forces undermine each other at times, but they can also compliment with each other, if handled probably.背景式开头，提出两种对立观点，但是否自己的观点不够明确呢？

To begin with, some exact situation in developing regions makes it impossible for schools to offer the curriculums that their students desire for. In the summer of 2003, I earn the opportunity to go to a small village called “Cong Hui” in Shan Xi province in china to help the children there. My task is to teach some lessons, to communicate with these younger brothers or sisters and to help them as much as I can和前句重复. One night, sleeping with a boy, I asked him “what kind of curriculums he likes best?” He answered “I enjoy every moments in the class and almost any lessons are hismy favorite.” Later I got the information that his opportunity to enter school iswas not an easy one. This sample is probably too simple to a lot of people who want to make topics of making individual education, but there is something profound in the answer of this child, something educator should pay much attention to. They are the difficulty of paying fee, the scarce of eligible teachers, especially in some poor region, the problem of safe environment has not been solved, etc.这一句感觉不够清晰 Obviously, how can we? develop specified designed education in these poor areas?这段的意思是想说明in rural area ,special designed education由于经济上的原因无法实行。但这么一个平常的例子说服力感觉不够，应该多分析一下原因，以及实行这种教育会怎样增加学生，家长，社会的负担

However, students in developed countries and rich cities, for instance Shanghai and Beijing字数不是这么增加的吧:), parents there?? hope with the support of finance their boys or girls can be taught asin the most suitable way, specifically designed for their childchildren. According to a recent survey conducted by sociality department of Fudan University among ten top universities in China, seventy two point six percent of new parents have been preparing for their children to accept some individual curriculums such as piano, football, graphics and acting. Research from National Educational Bureau believes this phenomenon results from the quick rise of living condition in big cities. Therefore, the emphasis on the future of children becomes priority issue in these families. Consequently, with the enough competent educators and support of money the specifically designed individual education is reasonable.这段语句很流畅，但家长让孩子接受专门教育等同于教育迎合学生的个人兴趣和需要吗？

Last but not least, different method of educating should be taken in different places. Since the great leader of People’s Republic of China, Deng XiaoPin, said (and I paraphrase) “China’s rise should have its own suitable Road which is especially useful the complex condition of China.” As to the education principle of different counties, different provisions, and different cities are the same reason. Consequently, for one thing developed region may try using specifically method of education, for antheranother much help可以换个词strategies,assistance,… should be taken to help the education of poor areas and the individual education may not be realized simultaneously. 你说的if properly handled没有体现来，应该多写写具体怎么实施

In sum, it is very likely that people will never be able to arrive at the same conclusion on this controversial issue, due to different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless, public awareness of the various dimensions of the issue discussed in the above argument will certainly contribute to the thoroughly understanding of the problem.结尾不敢这么写吧，等于什么也没说，至少应该呼应一下开头吧。不过考场上实在没时间了这倒是个好办法，学习一下，嘿嘿

个人感觉，不说语句(我也没资格说，菜鸟一个)，我觉得你对这个题目的理解有些欠妥：

这个题目主要是想探讨什么样的教育方式才是对个体发展来说最effective的。诚然，教育是一个国家的重中之重，要针对具体国情制定相应政策。但你的论述是否过于局限宏观层次了呢？让人觉得很大很空。应该多分析一下不同的教育方式对个体的成长与成才会有什么具体作用，从而决定哪个是最有效的。

语言方面，语法和拼写错误稍多了点，建议以后写完自己多看一下
论述方面，感觉你引用和举例多了一点，说理分析比较少。

我也新手一个，不会改，只是凭直觉，挑的都是毛病，还请多多见谅阿。有什么我理解不对的地方咱们再探讨，呵呵。

iven19821005UID: 2160156

多谢shellnuts,
1.拼写等小错误,我下次一定多加,注意.
2.这是我第一次写issue,在理解题目的真正意图是有了点差错,其实这点我也在看队友的文章后认识到了这点。
3.你的分析让我对文中的一些问题有了更深的了解,
4.谢谢,希望我们可以通过努力,一起进步,谢谢.