issue150 2006.2.23-issue-MARS,小组作业，请各位给点意见，谢谢。

iven19821005UID: 2160156

150"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

提纲：反对
1、        由于广告效应，网络上获得更多的有关进景点的信息，（相比传统途径）。这点上讲，电脑和电视将促进旅游的繁荣。（比喻，enough power to add one small rung to ladder, but together ……climb to the moon）
2、        通过电视和网络的图像，我们的确可以用肉眼体验到一些，以前不曾接触的画面。但人们会应此而满足吗？当然不会，这样的画面只会激起人更大的兴趣，想去全身体验这种感觉，从这点上讲旅游将得到促进。并且定车、定飞机、定房、安排适当的旅游路线都易如反掌。从况且网络使得人们结伴到达，旅游路线上没有表明的地方享受大自然变得可能。（survey）
3、        但是网络和电视对有些，低劣旅游公司旅游景点的报道，将导致他们加速死亡。可这个补对旅游的反展只又好处，而无坏处。（业界名人的话）
字数：579

Recently, there is much debate on the problem of whether the videos showed on TV and displayed on internet will make the tourism a desert. Many guides are quite worried about the obsolescence will arrive in no time, meanwhile some scholars advocate that traveling is almost impossible to be undermined by TV Programs or world wide computer connections. As far as I concern, scarcely, can TV and net get rid of tourism, on the contrary, they are the best guides that can spur the development of tourism.

In the first place, it is necessary to point out the video, showing fantastic photos of landscapes and scenes, is akin to some lively advertisement on one hand, and the convenience brought by internet is a magnificent assistance to the thriving tourism on the other. The online information almost shows abstracts and summaries of every traveling station that we can arrive with the leading of guides, and some experience wrote by other tourists, who has been there, no matter the experience is fantastic or boring, you may take these news as your reference, then the destination may be easily determined. In addition, videos showing scenes may be the first glance in your mind, in case that, the sight is so attracting and appealing to some people for these places are just like what they have met in their dreams, then they will definitely eager to visit the places. In sum, every tourist appealed by net or TV can only master enough ability to add one small rung to the ladder, leading to particular scene-moon, but together we can climb to moon to have a travel.

In the second place, with the help of appealing landscapes, people’s desired satisfaction and convenient service of traveling, such as booking tickets, rooms, and choosing personal track, the deep potential may soon be dig out  by traveling deputies. Obviously, hardly can the pictures, watched form TV and net, be enough for people, thus, they will not feel enough until they have the opportunities to taste the air and water by their own noses and mouths. According to recent survey conducted by sociality department of Jiao Tong University among ten top universities in China, sixty six point three interviewees agree internet and TV provokes their desires to travel, and the result also indicates four point five interviewees, even, seek friends through net to go the mountains, forests, villages and plains without the services offering by traveling company. A researcher reveals that internet and TV does promote the development of tourism for the statistics show that the gap between the amount of people traveling in the latest ten years and the period before is quite large.

Last but not least, admittedly, it is true that the report from TV News and internet promote the bankrupt of many traveling companies and scene stations. But we should find out the real reasons for their disappearance, are the ugly environments, rough services, and traveling with shopping instead of relaxation. From this point of view these black sheep are worthy of their fate, then the traveling market will obtain better development.

To summarize, it is very likely that people will never be able to arrive at the same conclusion on this controversial issue due to their different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless, public awareness of the various dimensions of problem between TV or internet and tourism will certainly contribute to the thorough understanding that TV and internet does all goods and not harm to the realm of traveling.

[ 本帖最后由 yogurt4 于 2006-2-24 01:36 编辑 ]

lazzycatUID: 205352

150"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

提纲：反对
1、        由于广告效应，网络上获得更多的有关进景点的信息，（相比传统途径）。这点上讲，电脑和电视将促进旅游的繁荣。（比喻，enough power to add one small rung to ladder, but together ……climb to the moon）
2、        通过电视和网络的图像，我们的确可以用肉眼体验到一些，以前不曾接触的画面。但人们会应此而满足吗？当然不会，这样的画面只会激起人更大的兴趣，想去全身体验这种感觉，从这点上讲旅游将得到促进。并且定车、定飞机、定房、安排适当的旅游路线都易如反掌。从况且网络使得人们结伴到达，旅游路线上没有表明的地方享受大自然变得可能。（survey）
3、        但是网络和电视对有些，低劣旅游公司旅游景点的报道，将导致他们加速死亡。可这个补对旅游的反展只又好处，而无坏处。（业界名人的话）
字数：579

Recently, there is much debate on the problem of whether the videos showed on TV and displayed on internet will make the tourism a desert. Many guides[这个名词不合适] are quite worried about the obsolescence will arrive in no time[这句话有语病。Many cicerones are quite worried that the obsolescence of the tourism will arrive in at any moment],[.] meanwhile[Meanwhile] some scholars advocate[这个动词用的不行] that traveling is almost impossible to be undermined by TV Programs or world wide computer connections. As far as I concern, scarcely, [，去掉]can TV and net get rid of tourism, on the contrary, they are the best guides that can spur the development of tourism.[最后一句话很怪异]

In the first place, it is necessary to point out the video, showing fantastic photos of landscapes and scenes, is akin to some lively advertisement on[the] one hand, and the convenience brought by internet is a magnificent assistance to the thriving tourism on the other. The online information almost shows abstracts and summaries of every traveling station that we can arrive with the leading of guides, and some experience wrote[written] by other tourists, who has been there[中式英语，不大通。] no matter [whether]the experience is fantastic or boring, you may take these news as your reference, then the destination may be easily determined. In addition, videos showing scenes may be the first glance in your mind, in case that, the sight is so attracting and appealing to some people for these places are just like what they have met in their dreams, then they will definitely eager to visit the places. In sum, every tourist appealed by net or TV can only master enough ability to add one small rung to the ladder, leading to particular scene-moon, but together we can climb to moon to have a travel.[感觉这段论述的不是特别贴题，而且很多句子用得很怪异。]

In the second place, with the help of appealing landscapes, people’s desired satisfaction and convenient service of traveling, such as booking tickets, rooms, and choosing personal track, the deep potential may soon be dig out [这个词组不适合用在这里吧？] by traveling deputies. Obviously, hardly can the pictures, watched form[from] TV and net, be enough for people, [.]thus[Thus], they will not feel enough until they have the opportunities to taste[breathe] the air and[taste the] water by their own noses and mouths. According to [a]recent survey conducted by sociality department of Jiao Tong University among ten top universities in China, sixty six point three interviewees agree internet and TV provokes their desires to travel, and the result also indicates four point five interviewees, even, seek friends through net to go the mountains, forests, villages and plains without the services offering by traveling company. A researcher reveals that internet and TV does promote the development of tourism for the statistics show that the gap between the amount of people traveling in the latest ten years and the period before is quite large.

Last but not least, admittedly, it is true that the report from TV News and internet promote the bankrupt of many traveling companies and scene stations. But we should find out the real reasons for their disappearance, are the ugly environments, rough services, and traveling with shopping instead of relaxation. [看不懂。]From this point of view these black sheep are worthy of their fate, then the traveling market will obtain better development.

To summarize, it is very likely that people will never be able to arrive at the same conclusion on this controversial issue due to their different experiences and conflicting values. Nevertheless, public awareness of the various dimensions of problem between TV or internet and tourism will certainly contribute to the thorough understanding that TV and internet does all goods and not harm to the realm of traveling.[结果还可以。]

总体感觉论述得比较乱，不思特别贴题，思路不是很清晰。
有很多句子用很奇怪，可能还是不地道吧！存在一些语法错误，有些句子我看不明白想说明什么意思。
模板痕迹较重。还要加把力啊！要先能把问题说清楚。

加油加油！
请选择性接受意见。呵呵。

iven19821005UID: 2160156

1,scarcely, can TV and net get rid of tourism, on the contrary, they are the best guides that can spur the development of tourism.是倒装
2，谢谢，有些地方说得正确，有些地方，我们可以探讨一下。

lazzycatUID: 205352

嗯。我知道是倒装。我是说scarcely后面的那个逗号去掉比较好。呵呵。
我还没有见过有逗号的用法。

iven19821005UID: 2160156

噢,谢谢是我粗糙了

fhxyweiUID: 157384

有逗号的用法也有

Vagrant_leeUID: 2176531

看完iven19821005 (shine) 的文章，个人觉得有点跑题。
从题目本身的意思看，是因为有了电视和互联网等现代通讯工具，导致了人们可以对很多没有去过的地方比较熟悉。正因为如此，作者才得出结论：旅游将会变得过时。换句话说，从作者的意思看，导致旅游过时的直接原因是人们可以对很多没有去过的地方变得很熟悉，而不是电视和互联网直接造成旅游过时的。既然iven19821005 (shine) 对题目持反对意见，那么是否可以用一段来论述一下旅游的真正目的是。。。。，而不仅仅是为了熟悉一个地方呢？这样是否会更有说服力一些
（以上纯属个人意见，欢迎讨论）

Vagrant_leeUID: 2176531

以下是我对这一题目的一个提纲，欢迎跟贴讨论
反对
1，确实，有了电视、互联网等现代通讯工具后，人们可以很快的熟悉一些自己根本没有去过的地方。
2，旅游的目的不仅仅只是为了熟悉一个地方，不同的人，旅游有不同的目的。有的人旅游是为了踏遍世界的名山大川，而有的人旅游是为了体会世界各地的风土人情，还有的人旅游纯粹就是为了好玩。。。。。。
3，而电视、互联网的现代通讯工具又可以为人们的出行提供很多方便（比如网上购票，预定旅店），所以，电视和互联网不仅不会导致旅游业的过时，还会促进旅游业的发展。

ivan_w_jUID: 2170271

谢谢，fhxywei