急！！明天考试，今天写出的第一篇作文，麻烦大家帮改改。

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ISSUE 160 - "The most essential quality of an effective leader is the ability to remain consistently committed to particular principles and objectives. Any leader who is quickly and easily influenced by shifts in popular opinion will accomplish little."

Whether effective leadership require consistence should not be a question. Consistence, undoubtly, is one of the essential character of a leader. However, a leader who never considers the people's opinion will sooner or later be put down.

Nearly all of the famous leaders in the history own the quality of consistence. This quality , along with many others, makes them win the place of leadership  and helps to be success as a leader. In everyone's life, he will meet something difficult. Some of them are very hard to solve. Some of us choose to give up, but the ones with consistence do not .They work hard to solve these problems and it pays .At last, they turn to be  leaders ,but those without the quality of consistence turn to be common people. That is the difference.

In another aspect, if a leader is too consistent to hear his people's voice, he is surely not a good leader. The leaders' duty is to work for their men. How can a leader who never hears his people's advice be helpful for his people? In the history, many of the leaders are put down by his men for they are too arbitrary, especially in France. As the social develops, it will need more and more democracy ,  and an arbitrary leader will never stay long .

In conclusion, a leader should be and is sure to be consistent, but he should also take some of the advice from the popular opinions. It depends.

lovingmintUID: 201587

LZ要注意展开和举例哦，展开不够例子来凑阿。明天我也要考了，bless!睡个好觉

[ 本帖最后由 lovingmint 于 2006-8-22 21:51 编辑 ]

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原帖由 lovingmint 于 2006-8-22 20:22 发表
LZ要注意展开和举例哦，展开不够例子来凑阿。明天我也要考了，bless!睡个好觉

想不出什么例子，总觉得时间很紧，你觉得我这样能得几分？

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原帖由 lovingmint 于 2006-8-22 20:22 发表
LZ要注意展开和举例哦，展开不够例子来凑阿。明天我也要考了，bless!睡个好觉

想不出什么例子，总觉得时间很紧，你觉得我这样能得几分？

华19860321UID: 2173901

你可以把你的主题句写完这后加一个for example 这样字数就上来了
你写得很简单，没什么深度
我也不是什么高手，说的话别在意就行。
如果拒不出什么例子，自己编一个就行，比如 a current research made by the perking university though the area of perking has showed ....这里天你要写的东西... an expert on ...said that ....
还有自己的例子这类的

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原帖由 华19860321 于 2006-8-22 20:36 发表
你可以把你的主题句写完这后加一个for example 这样字数就上来了
你写得很简单，没什么深度
我也不是什么高手，说的话别在意就行。
如果拒不出什么例子，自己编一个就行，比如 a current research made by the ...

十分感谢

华19860321UID: 2173901

不用谢
祝你明天好运

fiskerUID: 2181475

总体思路还有，
加例子，
不行了就加循环论证
结尾要充实

lovingmintUID: 201587

555,刚刚写好的帖没有发出来……
这样的，1、假设没有XX的情况下，什么情况……2、假设XX过多（极端法）的情况，怎么样……
然后翻来覆去解释阐述一番，用CET6的词汇就够了（XDF修锐said）.太复杂的句子也不要太多了，否则绕昏自己还犯语法错误就划不来咯。差不多就这样咯……