issue48 [OB小组] 第17次作业 individual and group

phillipsareaUID: 2318537

题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：544          用时：00:45:58          日期：2007-7-29 下午 02:54:36
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The author claims that the most significant events and trends in history were made by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten rather than the famous few. In my view, while I am firmly confirmed that the study of history should place more emphasis on the groups of people rather than individuals, however, we still cannot ignore the contributions made by the individuals in history.

To begin with, it's true that in the long term of history, it's those groups of people who have made great contribution to the progress of history. For instant, in China, everybody knows there're 4 great inventions: paper, compass, powder and typography. These 4 inventions make great contribution to China as well as the whole world. The paper and typography help people record things happen in the past, the compass helps Zheng He, who is the national hero of China, leading a group of ships to discover the western land and the powder helps people to defend the aggressors abroad. All these make it possible for the countries to progress a big step in history, however, most people know the 4 inventions and they don't know who the inventors are. Perhaps some of them are the inventions of a group of people rather than any individuals. Another example that supports this view is the pyramids of Egypt. This is one of greatest miracles in the world which is grand and gallant. However, there's no doubt that it's an art work by a group or even generations of people. Thus, we can see that most of the significant events and trends in history were made possible by the groups of people rather than the famous few.

However, we cannot deny that in some fields, individuals also make great contribution to the society as well as the trends of history. The great physical scientist Newton is just a case in point. The laws of Newton, which is the fundament of classical physics, greatly push the development of physics. While when we talked about the laws of Newton, we cannot deny that it's Newton, an individual person who finds the law rather than a group of people. Besides, those art works by Michalangelo, Raphael as well as Leonardo de Vinci are also made by the individuals. Thus, in some fields, it's also possible for the individuals to make some significant events and trends in history.

Moreover, there's a person who best expresses how the individual power affects the history, he's Napoleon. In the early 19 century, Napoleon led the French army marched across the European land and occupied almost the whole Europe. People sometimes argue that Napoleon failed at last, however, isn't it a great event in history by Napoleon himself? The war of Napoleon not only shows his great ambitious to conquer the whole world, but also suggests that sometimes the most significant events and trends can be made by the individuals.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that on one hand, it's possible that most significant events and trends in history are made by groups of people. Meanwhile, on the other hand, sometimes the individuals in some fields can also make some contribution to the process of history.

pesticideUID: 2359145

The author claims that the most significant events and trends in history were made by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten rather than the famous few. In my view, while I am firmly confirmed (I have a strong conviction)that the study of history should place more emphasis on the groups of people rather than individuals, however, we still cannot ignore the contributions made by the individuals in history.

To begin with, it's true that in the long term of history, it's those groups of people who have made great contribution to the progress of history.(整个有点怪怪的) For instant, in China, everybody knows there're 4 great inventions: paper, compass, powder and typography. These 4 inventions make great contribution to China as well as the whole world. The paper and typography help people record things happen in the past, the compass helps Zheng He, who is the national hero of China, leading a group of ships to discover the western land(explore the western ocean) and the powder helps people to defend the aggressors abroad. All these make it possible for the countries to progress a big step in history, however, most people know the 4 inventions and they don't know who the inventors are. Perhaps some of them are the inventions of a group of people rather than any individuals. (既然此段想突出群体的作用就肯定点，不要用perhaps)Another example that supports this view is the pyramids of Egypt. This is one of greatest miracles in the world which is grand and gallant. (有点不妥)However, there's no doubt that it's an art work by a group or even generations of people. Thus, we can see that most of the significant events and trends in history were made possible by the groups of people rather than the famous few.

However, we cannot deny that in some fields, individuals also make great contribution to the society as well as the trends of history. The great physical scientist Newton is just a case in point. The laws of Newton, which is the fundament of classical physics, greatly push the development of physics. While when we talked about the laws of Newton, we cannot deny that it's Newton, an individual person who finds the law rather than a group of people. Besides, those art works by Michalangelo, Raphael as well as Leonardo de Vinci are also made by the individuals. Thus, in some fields, it's also possible for the individuals to make some significant events and trends in history.

Moreover, there's a person who best expresses how the individual power affects the history, he's Napoleon. In the early 19 century, Napoleon led the French army marched across the European land and occupied almost the whole Europe. People sometimes argue that Napoleon failed at last, however, isn't it a great event in history by Napoleon himself? The war of Napoleon not only shows his great ambitious (ambition)to conquer the whole world, but also suggests that sometimes the most significant events and trends can be made by the individuals.

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that on one hand, it's possible that most significant events and trends in history are made by groups of people. Meanwhile, on the other hand, sometimes the individuals in some fields can also make some contribution to the process of history.

段落清晰，结构分明，意思明确。
你的立场是个人与群体平行作用，我是从两者相互依赖，不可或缺的立场来写。

ldongxpUID: 2311083

题目：ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
字数：544          用时：00:45:58          日期：2007-7-29 下午 02:54:36
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The author claims that the most significant events and trends in history were made by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten rather than the famous few. In my view, while I am firmly confirmed that the study of history should place more emphasis on the groups of people rather than individuals, however, [有while还要however么？] we still cannot ignore the contributions made by the individuals in history.

To begin with, it's true that in the long term of history, it's those groups of people who have made great contribution to the progress of history. For instant [?], in China, everybody knows there're 4 great inventions: paper, compass, powder and typography. These 4 inventions make great contribution to China as well as the whole world. The paper and typography help people record things happen in the past, the compass helps Zheng He, who is the national hero of China, leading a group of ships to discover the western land and the powder helps people to defend the aggressors abroad. All these make it possible for the countries to progress a big step in history, however, most people know the 4 inventions and they don't know who the inventors are. Perhaps some of them are the inventions of a group of people rather than any individuals. Another example that supports this view is the pyramids of Egypt. This is one of greatest miracles in the world which is grand and gallant. However, there's no doubt that it's an art work by a group or even generations of people. Thus, we can see that most of the significant events and trends in history were made possible by the groups of people rather than the famous few. [我更倾向国际的例子]

However, we cannot deny that in some fields, individuals also make great contribution to the society as well as the trends of history. The great physical scientist Newton is just a case in point. The laws of Newton, which is the fundament of classical physics, greatly push the development of physics. While when we talked about the laws of Newton, we cannot deny that it's Newton, an individual person who finds the law rather than a group of people. Besides, those art works by Michalangelo, Raphael as well as Leonardo de Vinci are also made by the individuals. Thus, in some fields, it's also possible for the individuals to make some significant events and trends in history. [最好把Renaissance点出来,更符合events， trends]

Moreover, there's a person who best expresses how the individual power affects the history, he's Napoleon. In the early 19 century, Napoleon led the French army marched across the European land and occupied almost the whole Europe. People sometimes argue that Napoleon failed at last, however, isn't it a great event in history by Napoleon himself? The war of Napoleon not only shows his great ambitious to conquer the whole world, but also suggests that sometimes the most significant events and trends can be made by the individuals. [稍微写写士兵，但突出Napoleon的决定性作用更客观说服力更强]

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw our conclusion that on one hand, it's possible that most significant events and trends in history are made by groups of people. Meanwhile, on the other hand, sometimes the individuals in some fields can also make some contribution to the process of history.

phillipsareaUID: 2318537

谢谢!Napoleon我不是很了解,不敢写太多..
也谢谢pesticide,改的很好

xiao8686UID: 2266881

The author claims that the most significant events and trends inhistory were made by groups of people whose identities have long beenforgotten rather than the famous few. In my view, while I am firmlyconfirmed that the study of history should place more emphasis on thegroups of people rather than individuals, however, we still cannotignore the contributions made by the individuals in history.
表明观点

To begin with, it's true that in the long term of history, it's thosegroups of people who have made great contribution to the progress ofhistory.（it's true....这个句型有让步的语气，但是这段应该没有让步成分，是要强调group作用大） For instant, in China, everybody knows there're 4 greatinventions: paper, compass, powder and typography. These 4 inventionsmake great contribution to China as well as the whole world. The paperand typography help people record things happen in the past, thecompass helps Zheng He, who is the national hero of China, leading agroup of ships to discover the western land and the powder helps peopleto defend the aggressors abroad. All these make it possible for thecountries to progress a big step in history, （这里不需要花这么大的比重来说这些发明
的重要性的）however, most people knowthe 4 inventions and they don't know who the inventors are. Perhapssome of them are the inventions of a group of people rather than anyindividuals. Another example that supports this view is the pyramids ofEgypt. This is one of greatest miracles in the world which is grand andgallant. However, there's no doubt that it's an art work by a group oreven generations of people. Thus, we can see that most of thesignificant events and trends in history were made possible by thegroups of people rather than the famous few.（我觉得这一段证明的方法就是穷举法，说n个例子然后得出一个结论，但是由于例子个数有限，且不具代表性，所以比较weak，这时候还不如说理论证这些ordinary people是怎么起作用的）

However, we cannot deny that in some fields, individuals also makegreat contribution to the society as well as the trends of history. Thegreat physical scientist Newton is just a case in point. The laws ofNewton, which is the fundament of classical physics, greatly push thedevelopment of physics. While when we talked about the laws of Newton,we cannot deny that it's Newton, an individual person who finds the lawrather than a group of people. （这个例子和论证不错）Besides, those art works byMichalangelo, Raphael as well as Leonardo de Vinci are also made by theindividuals. Thus, in some fields, it's also possible for theindividuals to make some significant events and trends in history.

Moreover, there's a person who best expresses how the individual poweraffects the history, he's Napoleon. In the early 19 century, Napoleonled the French army marched across the European land and occupiedalmost the whole Europe. People sometimes argue that Napoleon failed atlast, however, isn't it a great event in history by Napoleon himself?The war of Napoleon not only shows his great ambitious to conquer thewhole world, but also suggests that sometimes the most significantevents and trends can be made by the individuals.
从开头的感觉是要写group的作用大一些，但是文章中有感觉是想些individual的作用大一些

All in all, from what has been discussed above, we can easily draw ourconclusion that on one hand, it's possible that most significant eventsand trends in history are made by groups of people. Meanwhile, on theother hand, sometimes the individuals in some fields can also make somecontribution to the process of history.
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