求大神修改作文~二战了。。。。:(

z1215225UID：3141143

Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of ad. and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.To what extent do u agree or disagree?

When it comes to the discussion whether high turnover of popular consumer goods depended on the influence of advertising, people hold different views——others suppose that the demand of the society drives people to do purchasing. It is high time for us to debate the truth behind this issue.

Nowadays, advertising can be seen wherever crowed with people and it became a part of our live long before 21 century. No one can deny the fact that advertising affects the shopping habit to certain extend and people tend to be attracted by the consumer goods which are known. Thus, increasing number of institutes embrace the impact of advertising dominates the turnover of goods as customers seem to fail to avoid being led or misled.

Of course, indeed, advertising is able to stimulate the social economy and enable countries get rid of the global plummet as soon as possible. Nevertheless, I take into account the fact that the real demand of the society contributes largest proportion to the high sales rather than commercial promotion.

Without doubtful, people who live in modern city are wise enough on decision-making. Meanwhile, some TV shows often disclose the tricks played to mislead customers from time to time, the education of prevention which makes no one too careless to be misled by the advertising. Moreover, before paying, customers always have ability to observe the consumer good whether meets their satisfaction. Hence, customers will not do purchasing if they find the advertising is a fraud.

All in all, though advertising powerfully contributes to improve the sale, the key reason to high turnover lies on the real needs of people. Nothing can easily play dominant role in making decision of people.

bqianaUID：193168

4.5-5

z1215225UID：3141143

2# bqiana

分数直线下降。。。这次的原因？

jokemaUID：3277519

2# bqiana
版主怎么不去我那几个帖子评下分。。。是不是我连4.5也没。。

bqianaUID：193168

分数下降是因为套用很多不该套用的句型
另外，段落分配不清楚+文章扩展不够
总之，不符合雅思的文章风格