issue46 比较长，有空的dx帮我看看！

happyman2000UID：136936

Issue 46 while some leaders in government, sport, industry and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, a society can better prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation.
尽管在政府、体育、工业和其他领域的一些领导人把他们的成功归功于良好的竞争意识，一个社会还是应该给年轻人灌输合作的思想，以更好地培养他们的领导能力。

Certainly it is true that modern society has laid so much emphasis on competition that most people seriously ignore the role of cooperation. In the nature of it, cooperation does not necessarily incongruous with competition and in most times they coexist. Therefore, young people can be better prepared for leadership by instilling them not only a sense of competition, but also a sense of cooperation.

Maybe some people may argue that the modern society is a society full of intense competition, but in some sense the modern industrial society can be better depicted as one characterized by its narrower and narrower specialization and working division. Adam Smith, the greatest economist in history, has figured this tendency as the process of manufacturing needles. Before the age of industry, one person did all the processes on his/her own, including acquiring steel, forging steel into bar, honing needle and boring hole. However, with the coming of modern industry, these processes are assigned respectively to different people: one person undertakes only one process. By this means of cooperation, people can become more skillful and more experienced since their job has become relatively simple. As a result, a higher efficiency can be attained: the quantity of needles manufactured through cooperation will be far more than the total made respectively by six individuals. Modern society works in this manner certainly. No products are manufactured by a single person, no achievements completed by individual, and no cause realized by one great people.

Furthermore, the ever-increasing complexity of the modern world also makes it necessary to cooperate with each other even for those competitors. Take automobile manufacturers for example. In order to reduce cost and market risk, some major producers such as the Ford, the General Motor and the Toyota keep a very close cooperation on research of new products and market promoting. The G.M and the Toyota even use the same factory to produce mutually competitive cars. We live in the same world and inevitably share many things such as water, air, space, and so forth, which determines we are certain to face with the same problems and have the same benefits on many occasions. With the progress of science and technology, the society changes more rapidly; the life becomes more complicated, and the negative effects of human behaviors become more and more manifest. No single individual or organization can deal with all these complexity of modern life. All these require a large-scale cooperation not only between mutual competitors but also between all people through the world.

However, the looming of cooperation is not exclusive to competition as many people imagined; instead, it makes competition more violent to some extent. The six needle workers in a working-group maybe shouldn’t compete with each other as they worked individually before, but they as a whole are confronted with a more violent competition for larger share of market from other groups or factories. The cooperation between the Toyota and the GM does not reduce the intensity of their competition at all; on the contrary, their competition becomes more ferocious than ever as the Toyota is continuously capturing the market share of the GM. On the other hand, competition also urges individuals or organization to cooperate on many areas for the same sake. The relationship between IBM and the Acer, a Taiwan computer producer, provides such an example. Regardless of their competitive relationship at personal computer market, they still decided to cooperate on the supply of computer accessories and even the manufacture of final products in order to deal with their all other enemies in this market. The automobile manufactures cooperate for the similar season, as the above mentioned. Obviously, it is difficult for us to distinguish competition and cooperation for the most part because they are not mutually exclusive. Where competition exists in this world, there must be cooperation. Therefore, when we emphasize the importance of competition, we shouldn’t ignore the role of cooperation, vice versa.     

As a conclusion, since the intimate relationship between competition and cooperation, while some leaders in government, sport, industry and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, we shouldn’t ignore the same critical role of cooperation in preparing young people for better leadership. The best education should instill in them both the sense of competition and the sense of cooperation.  (719 words)

ken0405UID：124994

Issue 46 while some leaders in government, sport, industry and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, a society can better prepare its young people for leadership by instilling in them a sense of cooperation.
尽管在政府、体育、工业和其他领域的一些领导人把他们的成功归功于良好的竞争意识，一个社会还是应该给年轻人灌输合作的思想，以更好地培养他们的领导能力。

Certainly it is true that modern society has laid so much emphasis on competition that most people seriously ignore the role of cooperation. In the nature of it, cooperation does not necessarily incongruous with competition and in most times they coexist. Therefore, young people can be better prepared for leadership by instilling them not only a sense of competition, but also a sense of cooperation. 简洁明了.

Maybe some people may argue that the modern society is a society full of intense competition, but in some sense the modern industrial society can be better depicted as one characterized by its narrower and narrower specialization and working division. Adam Smith, the greatest economist in history, has figured this tendency as the process of manufacturing needles. Before the age of industry, one person did all the processes on his/her own, including acquiring steel, forging steel into bar, honing needle and boring hole. However, with the coming of modern industry, these processes are assigned respectively to different people: one person undertakes only one process. By this means of cooperation, people can become more skillful and more experienced since their job has become relatively simple. (why and how??)As a result, a higher efficiency can be attained: the quantity of needles manufactured through cooperation will be far more than the total made respectively by six individuals. (why and how??)Modern society works in this manner certainly. No products are manufactured by a single person, no achievements completed by individual, and no cause realized by one great people. 最后一句我的理解是工作是要coopernation的,也就是比要性.可是例子说的实现存在.有点不妥.你在例子惯窜自己的分析,这点我要向你学习的,happyman.

Furthermore, the ever-increasing complexity of the modern world also makes it necessary to cooperate with each other even for those competitors. Take automobile manufacturers for example. In order to reduce cost and market risk, some major producers such as the Ford, the General Motor and the Toyota keep a very close cooperation on research of new products and market promoting. The G.M and the Toyota even use the same factory to produce mutually competitive cars. We live in the same world and inevitably share many things such as water, air, space, and so forth, which determines we are certain to face with the same problems and have the same benefits on many occasions. With the progress of science and technology, the society changes more rapidly; the life becomes more complicated, and the negative effects of human behaviors become more and more manifest. No single individual or organization can deal with all these complexity of modern life. All these require a large-scale cooperation not only between mutual competitors but also between all people through the world. 对了,例子也恰当.这个分析的很有说服力.

However, the looming of cooperation is not exclusive to competition as many people imagined; instead, it makes competition more violent(这个词,我认为不妥) to some extent. [The six needle workers in a working-group maybe shouldn’t compete with each other as they worked individually before, but they as a whole are confronted with a more violent competition for larger share of market from other groups or factories.这句有点不懂] The cooperation between the Toyota and the GM does not reduce the intensity of their competition at all; on the contrary, their competition becomes more ferocious than ever as the Toyota is continuously capturing the market share of the GM. On the other hand, competition also urges individuals or organization to cooperate on many areas for the same sake. The relationship between IBM and the Acer, a Taiwan computer producer, provides such an example. Regardless of their competitive relationship at personal computer market, they still decided to cooperate on the supply of computer accessories and even the manufacture of final products in order to deal with their all other enemies in this market. The automobile manufactures cooperate for the similar season, as the above mentioned. Obviously, it is difficult for us to distinguish competition and cooperation for the most part because they are not mutually exclusive. Where competition exists in this world, there must be cooperation. Therefore, when we emphasize the importance of competition, we shouldn’t ignore the role of cooperation, vice versa. 这段观点很好.就是前面说的不是太清楚.是说合作有利于竞争力的提高吧.

As a conclusion, since the intimate relationship between competition and cooperation, while some leaders in government, sport, industry and other areas attribute their success to a well-developed sense of competition, we shouldn’t ignore the same critical role of cooperation in preparing young people for better leadership. The best education should instill in them both the sense of competition and the sense of cooperation. (719 words)
很容易看懂,也容易接受.好样的.就是1和2段我觉得你表达的意思是一样的.认为,是不是再加一条理由,或合作的重用性好一点?

QQsugarUID：136441

happy 猪，你的文章写的真的很好，文笔很流畅，我只给你提一个看法吧，本文说的主要是leadership 的问题，可是你的文章里却并没有强调作为一个领导者，the sense of cooperation 为什么会比competition 更重要一些。如果是我写的话，我会举政治上和商场上两个例子来说明，为什么领导者更需要cooperation
1. 改革开放，各国间加强合作和交流都是例子
2.商场上，互相取长补短，共同开拓市场
此外，教育，经济更方面的合作也正日益加强。

happyman2000UID：136936

多谢ken和ＱＱ糖的评改与建议！
这篇文章的确有个问题，就是通篇谈论的是competition 和cooperation的关系，而不是sense of  cooperation/competition.
另外，结构上也感觉有点问题。一二段谈coopertation的作用，三段谈cooperation与competition的关系。结论是the sense of cooperation与the sense of competition都很重要。好像不够平衡！