With the technology developing, it becomes more and more convenient for people to move one county to another. Subsequently, there is a question someone has to answer, whether go or not.(the question that someone has to answer is whether to go or not) In my perspective, we’d better to live in one county for our life quality with(for) the reasons as follows.
, c8 i* o* O$ c) ?% R First and foremost, holding living in one city will benefit your(建议不要用第二人称,会冒犯评阅人) career. As you know, (a)job will be (a)crucial problem when you get to a new place. And working with new colleagues will be a hard challenge(感觉challenge已经有hard的成分在里面,可以不要hard) for many people . What’s more , it’s hard for you to get promotion and salary rise soon because it needs time for the bosses to be familiar with you. In the opposite, if you stay in the company or a country for a long time, you will be succeed easier obviously. 3 B- _2 T5 n- v% u' B
Secondly, there are many problems in routine life when you try to live in a new society. Language will be the most important one. Although as a fluent speaker ,but(although 和but不能连用) you can’t understand their culture. It’s the(前面还未提及的例子应用不定冠词) very example that some good funny stories in England couldn’t make a Chinese laugh a bit. In addition, sometimes you will feel lonely because you are totally a stranger in the(a) new place .There (are )no old friends to go along with and perhaps no family(指家庭成员最好用复数) to talk with, It’s will be a sorrow situation.
3 q- d# X- ?' I' N Lastly, living in the same country all life doesn’t mean you can’t get the experience with the different culture. Because you could take a long journey to any place on the planet at any time as 0 J) a' p8 V" p* w$ P2 F' B+ `
you like. That different experience will bring a lot of funs(fun 指乐趣时不可数) to you and your families or friends who have shared many joy time with you. 1 j# h! f6 Q5 R
To sum up, it will be a wise choice to live in one country all life and take a journey sometimes as illustrated above. 思路比较清晰,文章注意不要用第二人称,感觉文章里有很多because,可以换些其他的词,有些语法错误要注意,毕竟是第一篇文章,多多练习,一起进步啊 |