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In order to solve the problems of the present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.
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It is a common sense that most people nowadays pay more attention to complete a simple task, and they are cautious, so cautious that they even take the past into account.(我不太明白这句话的意思。) Admittedly, when it comes to the question concerning whether it is necessary to understand the past to solve the temporary or coming questions, people's perspectives diverge considerably. As for me, I am inclined to the view that the past is not a prerequisite to solve problems of the present and future.2 W! \/ t$ j% o" @0
}First and foremost, not all experience is right. It is undoubted that some items we can get from the past is incorrect. To illustrate this, we need look no further than the well-known experiment of Galileo. As we all know, another noted scientist named Aristotle ever made a prediction: a heavier ball would contact the ground first, when compared with a light ball falling from the same point above the sea level, regardless of the same time they are allowed to slide from hands. Over hundreds of thousands of years, little people had ever denied the reliability of the application before Galileo cast doubt on it. Therefore, it comes as no surprise that the past, directly or indirectly, might mislead us to another or even opposite direction.+ P+ i. d- Y($ }4 P(我觉得这一段作者因该注意题目说的是“understand the past”,而这一概念不等于“learn everything of the past”。所以,作者是不是应该换一种口吻。比如,把这层“不应该learn everything of the past”的意思放到让步中去说。具体讲就是:“我们应该重视过去,但不应该把过去的一切奉为真理。”不知作者怎么想。)
On top of that, it is not effective and efficient for us to solve our problems in terms of the past. It is self-evident that reviewing the past consuming our precious time to finish our work. Hillary, The secretary of United States, said after his failure in presidential campaign, as quoted here, “Every moment wasted looking back prevents us from moving forward”. Great minds think alike! With the time spent understanding the past, we could achieve more if we focus on the present and future. Furthermore, we live in a brand new century, and creation is the spirit and priority of our society. The role it plays in our daily life is irreplaceable, without which our nation can not go as far as it is today.(个人觉得这个分隔定语从句应该不能这么用吧。如果这个结构成立,那么先行词应该在主句宾语的位置。) However, the past restrict our ability of creation, which can be demonstrated by numerous cases in the scientific field. (我觉得作者是否应该强调一点:“过去的情况与现在是不同的”即过去的经验理论不能应用于现在。然后,正是因为这,所以“spending time on understanding the past is wasting time.”,所以,“past restrict our ability of creation”。个人觉得这样段内才更顺理成章,显得更有理有据。不显得那么强词夺理的感觉。当然,作者的条理比较清晰。首先说,过去对现今没有作用,只是浪费时间;其次,强调过去还会限制解决现在和将来的问题。这点值得学习。)
Undeniably, the past can give us some advices and mirror the fact of history. Nevertheless, it also sometimes can pose a great risk and permanent effect on the problems of the present and future. Thus, I cling to the belief that we should be engaged in the works at hand instead of the past when the reliability of the past and the efficiency of the present are taken into consideration.
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我觉得作者的遣词造句很好,词用的准确,句子写得好。
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个人觉得,作者注意题目中所阐述的概念。题目不是“过去对解决现今和将来问题的影响”,而是“理解过去对于解决现今和将来问题的影响”。两者本质上有差别。第二段,可以保留。但是,对于第一段,作者应该修改下。 |
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