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发表于 2011-10-2 23:01:27 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

各位亲爱的童鞋，本人刚完成我人生的第一篇GRE作文，先心情特别激动，想和大家一起分享，请各位G友帮忙指出各种的不足，灰常感谢，本人已经被作文困扰了多年，希望各位不吝赐教，不胜感激！！！
5"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
正文： The cultivation of talents has become a important strategy for all nations around the wrold. Accordingly, the uniform national curriculum has been required so as to educate students at the same level. However, from my perspective, the items that is taught at school should adapt to the local conditions where the schools and the students are situated in, and it is impossible for the governments to implement the same curriculum in the national wide.

Admittedly, the same national curriculum could make it possible for children to get the opportunity to compete and enjoy their right for education at the same level. Since the governments plan to impliment the uniform educational policy, it would stirive to ensure average allocation of educational sources , which is the driving force behind the increasingly accelerating advancement of schooling in developing areas. As a result of that, when the students, who comes from the rural areas, facing the college entrance examination, could sand at the same beginning line just as the students in the urban region do. Considering the college, they could also benefit from this, the uniform education and evaluation system enable them to distinguish the excellent and potential applicants more easily thereby eliminating the unfair led by regional imbalance.

However, the speaker seems fail to foresee the potential disadvantages this method might brought with. Too excessive uniform will destroy the local identity. Imagining students, regardless of where they grow up , either the place where they come from, if they receive the same education, they will bound to forget their own culture. Because the syllabus maker could not take all the uniqueness into account when they making up the study plan for students come form different background.Even if they try to, it is unavoidable for them to forgo some of these. It is widely known the survival of local region should be closely connected with the education of the young people, who could bring new blood into this kind of culture and ensure the heritage of this unrenewable precious location. therefor from this point , the local governments should be entitled right to determine which academic courses to offer.

To sum up, to unifrom educational system is beneficial to the manager to manage the healthy and uniform development of the education all around the country , besides, this is also fare for all the students to receive education at the same level. But individuals cannot ignore the side effects brought by this claim, the governments should make up the general syllabus and leave out some space for each locals to add their own special courses.

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